Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence naming the food, then give 1–2 specific supporting reasons or details using linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words (uh, you know). Use correct grammar for preferences (e.g., “I like” / “I enjoy”).

例: My favourite food is grilled chicken, a traditional dish from the Central Highlands of Vietnam. I enjoy it because the meat is very flavorful and the local spices give it a unique aroma, so it reminds me of family gatherings.

提案: Answer directly in past tense for childhood (e.g., “I liked”). Give a brief reason and add one specific example; use a linking word (for example, but). Reduce fillers and correct grammar (plural/singular agreement).

例: When I was young, I liked fast food because I loved sweets and burgers. For example, I often ate fries and soft drinks after school, but I now know they were unhealthy.

提案: Keep the answer relevant to the question: say whether you change your diet seasonally. Use clear linking words (however, so) and concrete examples of seasonal foods or habits. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect vocabulary; speak in complete sentences.

例: Yes. In the summer I eat more fresh fruits and salads because it's hot, while in winter I prefer hot soups and stews to keep warm. For instance, during the mango season I eat mangoes almost every day.

提案: Answer clearly with a topic sentence stating the change, use past and present tense correctly, and give specific reasons and an example. Use linking words (because, so) and avoid repeats. Mention what you now prefer and why.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. I used to prefer fast food when I was a child, but now I prefer home-cooked meals because they are healthier and made with fresh ingredients, for example my mother's vegetable soup.

× My favorite breakfast, Uh, because, you know, it's a, as a member of Highland, Central of Vietnam.

✓ My favorite breakfast is chicken, because, as a person from the Central Highlands of Vietnam, I grew up with it.

The sentence misuses adjectives and articles and has awkward structure. Use 'is' to link subject and complement, replace 'as a member of Highland, Central of Vietnam' with 'as a person from the Central Highlands of Vietnam' for natural phrasing, and move ideas into a single clear sentence. Suggestion: use a clear subject-verb link and a correct noun phrase for the region.

× So I very like real chicken because it is meant like food, traditional.

✓ So I really like native chicken because it is a traditional food.

'Very like' is ungrammatical; use 'really like'. 'Real chicken' is unclear; use 'native chicken' or 'local chicken'. 'Meant like food, traditional' is incorrect word order; use 'a traditional food'. Suggestion: use adverb 'really' before verb and correct noun phrase order.

× When I was young, I like, uh, fast foods, uh, because I am a big fans of uh, uh, candy.

✓ When I was young, I liked fast food because I was a big fan of candy.

The clause refers to the past, so verbs must be in past tense: 'liked' and 'was'. Also use singular agreement 'a big fan' not 'a big fans'. Suggestion: match past-tense context and ensure subject-verb number agreement.

× So I very like fast food, uh, even though it's very harmful, harmful for my health.

✓ So I really liked fast food, even though it was very harmful to my health.

Again 'very like' is incorrect—use 'really liked' for past. Use 'harmful to my health' not 'harmful for my health'. Maintain past tense consistency. Suggestion: use correct adverb placement and correct preposition 'to' with 'harmful'.

× Uh, in the past, I very like fast foods.

✓ In the past, I really liked fast food.

Referring to past requires past tense 'liked' and 'really' instead of 'very like'. Also 'fast food' is uncountable here. Suggestion: use 'liked' and treat 'fast food' as a mass noun.

× However these days I uh, I have rewards of uh, the helpful of phosphorus.

✓ However, these days I try to eat healthier and get enough phosphorus.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Have rewards of the helpful of phosphorus' is nonsensical. Likely intended meaning is focusing on healthier eating and receiving nutrients like phosphorus. Suggestion: express the intended idea clearly: 'I try to eat healthier and get enough phosphorus.'

× So I distant life is uh, instead, uh, and I like green chickens, huh?

✓ So my lifestyle is different now, and I like free-range (or green) chicken.

Sentence is fragmented and has unclear phrases like 'distant life' and misplaced 'instead'. Replace with 'my lifestyle is different now' to show change, and clarify 'green chickens' as 'free-range chicken' if that was intended. Suggestion: use clear subject and predicate and standard terms.

× Yes, of course when I watch a choice I very like fast foods be.

✓ Yes, of course, when I was a child I really liked fast food.

Tense is incorrect: 'watch a choice' makes no sense; likely meant 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'liked' and 'really' instead of 'very like'. Remove extraneous 'be'. Suggestion: use conventional phrase 'when I was a child' and past-tense verb.

× However these days I didn't like it because it harmful for my health and I like home home cook because it's very very good for my health.

✓ However, these days I don't like it because it is harmful to my health, and I prefer home-cooked food because it's much better for my health.

Mixes past and present incorrectly. 'These days' requires present tense 'don't like'. Use 'is harmful to my health' with preposition 'to'. 'Home home cook' is incorrect; use 'home-cooked food' and 'prefer' fits better than 'like' to show choice. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with temporal adverb 'these days' and use correct noun forms and prepositions.