Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitation words, keep answer concise (max 5 sentences), and provide one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetitive phrases and vague words like "it is beautiful" without explanation.

例: I like sushi because it offers a delicate balance of flavors and textures, which is quite different from my traditional cuisine. For example, fresh raw fish and vinegared rice are light and refreshing, making sushi an ideal meal when I want something not too heavy.

提案: Use past tense consistently and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific example and a brief reason. Limit to three sentences to meet Natural & Effective rule.

例: When I was young, I mainly ate fast food such as burgers and fries from McDonald's. I enjoyed pizza as well because it was tasty and convenient. I didn't try sushi until later, so it wasn't familiar to me then.

提案: Avoid repeating phrases and fillers. Give one or two specific examples of seasonal dishes and use linking words (e.g., "for example", "so") to make the answer coherent and informative.

例: Yes. In winter I prefer hearty dishes such as stews and roasted vegetables because they are warming and filling. In summer I choose lighter options, for example chilled salads and grilled fish, which feel more refreshing in hot weather.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, explain briefly why your preference changed with specific reasons (e.g., exposure, taste development), and avoid uncertain phrases like "I must assume". Keep to three sentences.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed from burgers to sushi because I was exposed to more cuisines as I grew older. As I tried new flavours and textures, I began to appreciate fresh fish and delicate seasonings. Now I prefer sushi because it feels lighter and more refined than fast food.

× When I was young, I like to eat the food from fast food restaurants like McDonald's, UMM, et cetera.

✓ When I was young, I liked to eat food from fast food restaurants like McDonald's, etc.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was young'), so the verb should be in the past tense. Change 'like' to 'liked'. Also simplify 'the food from' to 'food from' and 'et cetera' to 'etc.' for naturalness.

× I didn't try a lot of food when I was a child, so I must assume This is why I picked a basic meal as my favorite food.

✓ I didn't try a lot of foods when I was a child, so I assume this is why I picked a basic meal as my favorite food.

The first clause correctly uses past tense ('didn't try'), but 'must assume' is unnatural with past context; 'assume' (present) is acceptable to express current inference about the past. Also 'a lot of food' is better as 'a lot of foods' to indicate different kinds of food. Capitalization fixed ('This' to 'this').

× During the winter I eat more hearty meals umm, while in summer I eat more light and refreshing food. Like salads.

✓ During the winter I eat heartier meals, while in summer I eat lighter, more refreshing foods like salads.

Comparative adjectives are needed when contrasting seasons: 'heartier' and 'lighter'. Also combine the fragment 'Like salads.' with the previous sentence and use plural 'foods' to match general reference. This fixes sentence fragment and adjective form errors.

× My favorite food is sushi because, umm, it tastes very differently from our traditional food.

✓ My favorite food is sushi because it tastes very different from our traditional food.

The adverb 'differently' is incorrect here; 'different' (adjective) describes 'it' in a linking verb construction ('tastes different'). Also remove filler 'umm' for clarity.

× I love fish, especially raw. I love all the raw meats and I think it is a beautiful, uh, food.

✓ I love fish, especially raw fish. I love all raw meats, and I think it is a beautiful food.

The fragment 'especially raw' needs an explicit noun ('raw fish') for clarity. Remove extra filler 'uh'. Also adjust commas and article usage: 'a beautiful food' is acceptable but clarifying noun avoids ambiguity.