Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct small grammatical issues, and give one specific reason or example. Use linking words if adding details.

例: My favourite food is ice cream. For example, yesterday I had chocolate mint, which I love because it combines a refreshing mint flavour with rich chocolate. I especially enjoy it on warm afternoons.

提案: Give a clear past-tense topic sentence and avoid repetition. Use specific examples and a linking phrase to explain why you liked them. Keep it to a few coherent sentences.

例: When I was young, I preferred sweet foods. For instance, I often ate ice cream, candies and drank Coke because sugary treats made me feel cheerful and energetic after school.

提案: Good structure and relevant details. Improve grammar and linking for fluency: use correct tense and smoother connectors, and avoid minor awkward phrases. Limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes. For example, in winter I often have hot pot with my parents because the steaming broth helps us warm up. In contrast, during summer I usually eat ice cream to cool down.

提案: Use consistent past/present tenses and be concise. Start with a clear statement about change, then give a specific example and brief reason. Avoid exaggerated claims without qualification.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed. As a child I liked sweet snacks, but now I prefer spicy food — for example, Chengdu hot pot — because I enjoy the complex flavours and the warmth it brings.

× I like ice cream best.

✓ I like ice cream the most.

Use of 'best' as an adjective after 'like' is awkward; 'the most' is the correct adverbial phrase to show degree with 'like'. Replace 'best' with 'the most' to sound natural.

× Just yesterday I ate one and the chocolate mint flavor is the most delicious.

✓ Just yesterday I ate one, and the chocolate mint flavor was the most delicious.

The time expression 'Just yesterday' requires past tense for both actions or descriptions tied to that past event. Change 'is' to 'was' to maintain past tense consistency.

× I think.

✓ I think so.

Adding 'so' completes the expression and clarifies that the speaker is giving an opinion about the previous statement.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? Student: I like some food which is sweet best when I was young such as ice cream, sugar, Coca-Cola or some ice cream.

✓ When I was young, I liked sweet foods the most, such as ice cream, candy, and Coca-Cola.

The question asks about the past, so use past tense 'liked' rather than 'like'. 'Some food which is sweet best' is ungrammatical: use 'sweet foods the most.' Use 'candy' instead of 'sugar' for a suitable countable noun and avoid repeating 'ice cream'. Also move 'when I was young' to the beginning for natural word order.

× Eating the sweet food will let me feel happy.

✓ Eating sweet foods used to make me feel happy.

Because the speaker is talking about childhood, past tense should be used: 'used to make' or 'made'. Also use plural 'sweet foods' for generality and drop 'the'.

× Yes. For example, in winter I will choose to eat hot pot with my parents because the weather is very cold and hot pot can warm it up.

✓ In winter I choose to eat hot pot with my parents because the weather is very cold, and hot pot warms me up.

The habitual action should be expressed in present simple ('I choose' or better 'I usually eat') rather than 'will choose'. 'Can warm it up' incorrectly refers to 'weather'; use 'warms me up' to show effect on the person.

× But in summer I choose to eat ice cream because it let me cool.

✓ But in summer I choose to eat ice cream because it helps me cool down.

'Let me cool' is incorrect; use the verb 'help' plus 'cool down' or say 'it cools me down'. Maintain present simple for habitual actions.

× Has your favourite food changed since you were a child? Student: Yes, when I was a child I preferred eating something sweet, but when I grow up, I like the spicy food more, such as the hot pot in Chengdu, and I think it is the most delicious food in the world.

✓ Yes. When I was a child I preferred eating sweet things, but as I grew up, I came to like spicy food more, such as the hot pot in Chengdu, which I think is the most delicious food in the world.

Maintain consistent past reference: 'when I was a child' + 'as I grew up'. Replace 'grow' with past 'grew' and 'I like' with 'I came to like' to show change over time. Use 'sweet things' rather than 'something sweet' and 'spicy food' without 'the'. Use a relative clause 'which I think' to refer to hot pot.