Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence naming your favourite dish, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid awkward phrases (e.g. “filled my mouth with water”) and minor grammar errors (plural/singular agreement, articles). Keep to maximum five sentences.

例: My favourite food right now is chicken and cashew nut egg fried rice. I like it because the chicken is tender and the cashew nuts add a pleasant crunch. Also, vegetables like onions, mushrooms and bell peppers make it more flavorful and balanced.

提案: Use past tense consistently and avoid repetition. Begin with a clear topic sentence in past simple, then give one specific supporting detail with a linking phrase (e.g. “for example”). Correct small errors like “eating for food” and unnecessary clauses.

例: When I was young, I loved eating fast food like pizza, burgers and fries. For example, my parents often bought these meals for my birthday or as a reward when I did well at school.

提案: Good structure and relevant details; improve accuracy and word choice. Use plural/singular agreement and clearer expressions (e.g. “seasonal fruits” instead of “last season of fruits”). Use a linking phrase to contrast seasons (e.g. “in contrast”). Keep sentences natural and concise.

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. In winter, for instance, I prefer warm dishes like soups, roasted carrots and dried fruits because they keep me warm and provide energy. In contrast, during summer I choose seasonal fresh fruits and salads because they are light and refreshing.

提案: Use consistent tense and correct grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles). Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether it has changed, then give specific examples and reasons using linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid long, awkward sentences and correct verb forms (e.g. “enjoyed” -> “enjoy”).

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since I was a child. I used to eat mostly fast food because it was convenient, but now I enjoy exploring different cuisines, from local street food stalls to dishes at fine restaurants, because I like trying new flavours and healthier options.

× I am a food lover that's why I try different type of cuisine.

✓ I am a food lover, that's why I try different types of cuisine.

The noun 'type' is countable and here refers to more than one kind, so it needs the plural 'types'. Also add a comma after the introductory clause for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'different types of cuisine' when referring to multiple kinds.

× But currently I am fond of chicken, cashew nuts with egg fried rice.

✓ But currently I am fond of chicken and cashew-nut egg fried rice.

The original phrasing 'cashew nuts with egg fried rice' is unclear. Use a compound noun or hyphenation to show the relationship: 'cashew-nut egg fried rice' or 'egg fried rice with cashew nuts'. Also use 'and' to list items clearly. Suggestion: Reorder phrases so modifiers clearly attach to the correct noun.

× It's crunchy nuts, tender chicken and roasted.

✓ It has crunchy nuts, tender chicken, and a roasted flavor.

The original mixes noun phrases and an adjective 'roasted' without a clear noun. Use a consistent structure (subject + verb + complements) and parallel items: 'has crunchy nuts, tender chicken, and a roasted flavor' or 'is crunchy, tender, and roasted'. Suggestion: Keep parallel structure when listing characteristics.

× Some veggies like onion, mushrooms and bell pepper filled my mouth with water.

✓ Some veggies like onion, mushrooms, and bell pepper make my mouth water.

Use the idiomatic expression 'make my mouth water' instead of 'filled my mouth with water'. Also ensure plural agreement and commas in lists. Suggestion: Use set expressions (make my mouth water) for sensory reactions.

× As a child, I love eating for food such as pizza, burger and fries.

✓ As a child, I loved eating foods such as pizza, burgers, and fries.

The time phrase 'As a child' requires past tense, so 'love' should be 'loved'. Also pluralize 'foods' or use 'foods such as' and pluralize items: 'burgers'. Remove the unnecessary preposition 'for' after 'eating'. Suggestion: Match verb tense to time expressions and pluralize countable nouns when listing examples.

× My parents often treated me to this meal on special occasion, for example on my birthday or when I did well at school, and also during it, because it felt like a fun reward.

✓ My parents often treated me to this meal on special occasions, for example on my birthday or when I did well at school, because it felt like a fun reward.

Use the plural 'occasions' for repeated events. The phrase 'and also during it' is unnecessary and unclear, so remove it. Keep the sentence concise and maintain past tense 'treated' and 'felt'. Suggestion: Use plural for repeated events and avoid redundant clauses.

× Yes, I enjoy eating different kind of food at different time of the year.

✓ Yes, I enjoy eating different kinds of food at different times of the year.

'Kind' and 'time' are countable and should be plural when referring to multiple kinds/times: 'different kinds of food' and 'different times of the year'. Suggestion: Use plural forms when referring to multiple categories or occasions.

× In winter, I usually eat warm dishes like soup, roasted carrots and dried fruits because they keep me warm and provide energy.

✓ In winter, I usually eat warm dishes like soup, roasted carrots, and dried fruits because they keep me warm and provide energy.

Main issue is missing comma in the list. The sentence is otherwise correct; add the Oxford-style comma for clarity. No tense change needed. Suggestion: Use commas to separate list items for clarity.

× In summer, I prefer fresh foods such as the last season of fruits because they are light and refreshing.

✓ In summer, I prefer fresh foods such as fruits that are in season because they are light and refreshing.

'The last season of fruits' is unidiomatic. Use 'fruits that are in season' or 'in-season fruits' to refer to seasonal produce. This clarifies meaning and keeps natural adjective order. Suggestion: Use 'in-season fruits' or 'fruits that are in season' for clarity.

× As I discussed before, when I was a child I mostly ate fast food because it was convenient and enjoy it.

✓ As I discussed before, when I was a child I mostly ate fast food because it was convenient and I enjoyed it.

The clause describes a past situation ('when I was a child'), so both verbs must be past tense: 'ate' and 'enjoyed'. Add the subject 'I' before 'enjoyed' for correct clause structure. Suggestion: Keep past-tense verbs consistent in past-time clauses and include explicit subjects.

× Now my favorite food have changed.

✓ Now my favorite foods have changed.

'Favorite food' refers to multiple items, so use plural 'foods', which agrees with the plural verb 'have'. Alternatively, use singular with 'has': 'Now my favorite food has changed.' Suggestion: Ensure subject and verb agree: use plural subject for 'have' or change verb to 'has' for singular.

× I like to explore different cuisine when I travel from local street food stalls to dishes at luxury restaurant because I enjoyed trying new flavors and healthier option.

✓ I like to explore different cuisines when I travel, from local street food stalls to dishes at luxury restaurants, because I enjoy trying new flavors and healthier options.

'Cuisine' should be plural 'cuisines' when referring to multiple types. Add commas to separate the travel clause. 'Luxury restaurant' should be plural 'restaurants' to match the range. Maintain present tense 'enjoy' for general preference rather than past 'enjoyed'. 'Option' should be plural 'options' to match 'healthier'. Suggestion: Use plural forms when referring to multiple types and keep tense consistent for habitual actions.