Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct vocabulary and grammar, and avoid invented or mistranslated words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using correct terms (e.g., 'fresh herbs,' 'savory broth,' 'pho,' 'spring rolls'). Use one linking phrase. Keep to under five sentences.

例: My favourite food is Vietnamese cuisine because it combines fresh herbs and rich, savory broths. For example, I love pho for its aromatic beef broth and rice noodles, and I often eat fresh spring rolls filled with herbs and shrimp, which are light and refreshing.

提案: Use correct tense and clear chronological markers. Give a direct topic sentence about past preference, then contrast with your current choice using a linking word like 'but' or 'now'. Avoid repetition and vague phrases ('something related to fish'). Keep sentences grammatically correct.

例: When I was a child I loved eating pork with rice and could eat it almost every day. However, now in my twenties I prefer healthier options like grilled salmon, steamed vegetables and other fish dishes.

提案: Good content and relevant examples. Improve fluency by using smoother linking phrases and correcting grammar (e.g., 'in Vietnamese tradition' → 'in Vietnamese culture'). Be slightly more specific about festivals or dishes and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I eat different foods in different seasons. In Vietnamese culture we have special foods for festivals — for example, mooncakes are popular in autumn during the Mid-Autumn Festival — while in winter people prefer hearty pork stews and braised dishes because they feel warming.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and use correct grammar and vocabulary (e.g., 'noodles,' 'boiled potatoes,' 'nutrition'). Explain reason briefly and precisely. Avoid filler words and keep to two or three sentences.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. I used to love noodles as a child, but now I prefer healthier options like boiled potatoes and steamed vegetables because I care more about nutrition and skin health.

× Actually, my favorite is Vietnamese cuisine because they offer a wide range of flavor from Franken herbs to savory broth.

✓ Actually, my favorite is Vietnamese cuisine because it offers a wide range of flavors from fragrant herbs to savory broths.

The subject 'Vietnamese cuisine' is singular and should take the singular pronoun 'it' (pronoun error). Also 'flavor' and 'broth' should be plural to match 'a wide range of', and 'Franken herbs' appears to be a typo for 'fragrant herbs'. Correcting these yields grammatical agreement and clearer meaning. Suggestion: Use singular pronouns to match singular nouns and ensure noun plurality after 'a wide range of'. Replace typos like 'Franken' with 'fragrant'.

× For example, I love pho for its rich, aromatic Bo birth and fresh herbs, and I often eat spring rolls because they taste like and refreshing.

✓ For example, I love pho for its rich, aromatic broth and fresh herbs, and I often eat spring rolls because they taste light and refreshing.

'Bo birth' is a garbled phrase; the intended word is 'broth'. 'Taste like and refreshing' is incorrect word order and word choice; the correct adjective pair is 'light and refreshing'. Adjectives should be in the correct order and unnecessary words removed. Suggestion: Proofread for typos and ensure adjective order is logical (e.g., 'light and refreshing').

× When I was young, about 10 to 15 years old, I have a big passion for pork and rice.

✓ When I was young, about 10 to 15 years old, I had a big passion for pork and rice.

The time phrase 'When I was young' refers to the past, so the verb should be in the past tense ('had') rather than present ('have'). Suggestion: Match verb tense to time expressions; use past tense for events or states that occurred in the past.

× I can eat pork and rice every day, but when I'm turning to about 20 to 28 right now, ioffer something healthier such as salmon or something related to fish, fish or vegetable.

✓ I could eat pork and rice every day, but now that I'm around 20 to 28, I prefer something healthier, such as salmon, other fish, or vegetables.

'I can eat' implies ability; past habitual preference is better expressed with 'could' or 'used to'. The fragment 'when I'm turning to about 20 to 28 right now' mixes tenses and is awkward; 'now that I'm around 20 to 28' is clearer. 'ioffer' is a typo and should be 'I prefer' or 'I choose'. 'Fish, fish or vegetable' is repetitive and needs plural 'vegetables'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent, correct typos, and use plural nouns for general categories.

× I do eat different foods in different seasons because in Vietnamese traditional we eat a different way different food in each time of the year.

✓ I do eat different foods in different seasons because in Vietnamese tradition we eat different foods at different times of the year.

'Vietnamese traditional' should be the noun 'Vietnamese tradition'. 'a different way different food' is ungrammatical; use 'different foods' or 'in different ways'. 'in each time of the year' should be 'at different times of the year' using correct prepositions. Suggestion: Use noun forms ('tradition') and correct prepositions ('at different times'). Ensure parallel structure for repeated elements.

× For example, in autumn and spring we often eat mooncakes for festival, while in winter we have more hearty pork dishes because they feel warmer and more nurturing in cold weather.

✓ For example, in autumn and spring we often eat mooncakes for festivals, while in winter we have heartier pork dishes because they feel warmer and more nourishing in cold weather.

'For festival' is incorrect; use 'for festivals' or 'for the festival'. 'More hearty' should be the comparative 'heartier'. 'More nurturing' is odd for food; 'more nourishing' is appropriate. Quantifiers and comparative adjective forms must be correct. Suggestion: Use correct comparative adjectives and appropriate collocations for food ('nourishing').

× Yes, I used to love noodle when I was child but now I prefer healthier plain infused such as boiler potatoes because I cared more about nutritions and something more healthier to protect my skin, uh, and my body.

✓ Yes, I used to love noodles when I was a child, but now I prefer healthier, plain foods such as boiled potatoes because I care more about nutrition and want to eat healthier foods to protect my skin and my body.

'Noodle' should be plural 'noodles', and 'when I was child' needs the article 'a child'. 'Plain infused' is unclear; likely meant 'plain foods'. 'Boiler potatoes' is a typo for 'boiled potatoes'. 'I cared' should be present 'I care' because it's an ongoing preference. 'Nutritions' is uncountable 'nutrition'. 'Something more healthier' is ungrammatical; use 'healthier' without 'more'. Suggestion: Use articles with singular count nouns ('a child'), correct pluralization, uncountable nouns ('nutrition'), and avoid double comparatives ('more healthier').