Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct to the question by stating a clear favourite or explaining why you don't have one, use correct tense and reduce redundancy. Keep to 2–4 sentences, include a topic sentence and one supporting detail with a linking word. Correct grammar (e.g. 'when I'm stressed') and avoid repeating ideas.

例: I don't have a single favourite food, but I do have a favourite drink: milk tea. Because I often feel stressed, I find milk tea very soothing and it helps me relax after a busy day.

提案: Use past tense consistently to describe childhood (e.g. 'I enjoyed'). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one concrete reason and a brief linking sentence about change. Correct grammatical errors and avoid vague phrases like 'I guess'.

例: When I was young, I enjoyed eating roasted meat a lot because I liked the flavour and needed more protein. However, I became a vegetarian in recent years, so I no longer eat meat.

提案: Good direct answer and example. Improve fluency by using natural phrasing and complete the final clause. Use correct collocations (e.g. 'crave chestnuts and mooncakes' and 'available then'). Add a linking word to connect idea to example.

例: Yes, I eat different foods throughout the year because I prefer seasonal ingredients. For example, in autumn I often crave chestnuts and mooncakes, which are only available then.

提案: Provide a clearer, grammatically complete answer: state the change, give a specific example of past and present favourites, and explain briefly why. Fix tense and phrasing errors (e.g. 'I have learned to enjoy'). Avoid incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed from meat to vegetables; for example, I used to love meatballs as a child, but now I prefer broccoli because I care more about health and enjoy the taste.

× I enjoy drinking tea with milk whenever I'm stressful.

✓ I enjoy drinking tea with milk whenever I'm stressed.

Uses the adjective 'stressful' (which describes something that causes stress) incorrectly to describe a person’s feeling. Use the past participle/adjective 'stressed' to describe a person’s emotional state. Suggestion: use 'stressed' or rephrase to 'when I feel stressed'.

× I find it always soothing and takes all my worries and pressure away.

✓ I find it always soothing and it takes all my worries and pressure away.

Missing subject for the second clause causes a sentence fragment and incorrect verb attachment. Add the pronoun 'it' before 'takes' to match the subject of the clause. Also keep consistent tense and subject-verb structure.

× When I was young I enjoy eating roasted meat a lot.

✓ When I was young I enjoyed eating roasted meat a lot.

Mixes past time marker 'When I was young' with present tense 'enjoy'. Use past tense 'enjoyed' to match the time frame.

× But I've become a vegetarian in recent years so I no longer enjoy meat as I were was a child.

✓ But I've become a vegetarian in recent years, so I no longer enjoy meat as I did when I was a child.

Multiple errors: 'as I were was a child' is ungrammatical. Use 'did' to refer back to the past action and 'when I was a child' for the time clause. Also include a comma before 'so' for clarity.

× Yes, I eat different food at different times of the year.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year.

Countable plural 'foods' is correct when referring to different kinds of food. 'Food' as a mass noun could work, but when emphasizing different types, use 'foods'.

× I like seasonal ingredients, especially those in the autumn.

✓ I like seasonal ingredients, especially those in autumn.

Use 'in autumn' without the definite article when speaking generally about the season. 'The autumn' is not strictly wrong in some varieties, but 'in autumn' is more natural here.

× For example, I always crave for chestnuts and mooncakes, which are only available.

✓ For example, I always crave chestnuts and mooncakes, which are only available then.

Remove unnecessary preposition 'for' after 'crave' (crave takes a direct object). The relative clause 'which are only available' is incomplete; add 'then' to indicate the time they are available (autumn/seasonal).

× Yes, my favorite food has changed from meats to broccoli.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed from meat to broccoli.

When referring to a category in general, use the mass noun 'meat' rather than plural 'meats'. 'Meat' is more natural here.

× As a child I enjoyed having meatball meal, but now I learn to enjoy.

✓ As a child I enjoyed having meatball meals, but now I have learned to enjoy broccoli.

Several issues: 'meatball meal' is awkward—use 'meatball meals' or 'meatballs' or 'meatball dishes'. The second clause 'now I learn to enjoy' mixes tense and is incomplete about the object. Use present perfect 'have learned' to show change over time and specify what is now enjoyed (broccoli) to complete the thought.