Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan soruyu yanıtlıyor fakat dağınık, tekrarlar ve dolgu kelimeleri (uh) var. Konu cümlesi eksik netlikte; örnek ve gerekçe yok. Cümleleri sadeleştir ve maksimum 3-4 kısa cümle kullan. Bağlaçlarla sebep ekle (because, so) ve daha uygun kelime kullan (fast food yerine fast food veya takeaway). Ayrıca dilbilgisi düzeltilmeli: “doing myself to make a food” yerine “cooking for myself”.

例: My favorite food changes, but recently I eat a lot of fast food because I don’t have time to cook. I prefer burgers and fries for convenience, so I often order takeaway after work.

提案: Cevap temel nedeni veriyor fakat dilbilgisi hataları ve belirsiz ifadeler var. ‘Fat foods’ yanlış seçim; daha doğal: ‘fatty or fast foods’. Zaman uyumu ve artikeller düzeltilmeli (parents were always working; I was often home alone). Bağlaçlarla mantığı netleştir (because, so, which led to). Spesifik örnekler ekle (pizza, fries) ve 2-3 cümlede tut.

例: When I was young I often ate fatty or fast foods because my parents were always working and I stayed home alone. They gave me money to order pizza or fries, so I became used to eating outside.

提案: Cevap doğrudan ‘no’ ile başlıyor, bu iyi; ancak konuşma gündelik ve biraz savunmacı (‘what can I do?’). Daha doğal ve yapılandırılmış cevap için sebep ve kısa sonuç ekle. Gereksiz tekrarları çıkar. Öneri veya tercih belirt (I try to change in holidays).

例: No, I don’t usually change my diet with the seasons because I tend to order the same fast food meals. However, I try to eat more fruits and vegetables in summer when they are fresher.

提案: Cevap net ama dil bilgisi hataları ve dağınık anlatım var. ‘Still love the same thing when I was seven’ yerine ‘I still like the same food I did when I was seven’. ‘It's closed’ belirsiz; neyin kapalı olduğu açıklanmalı (shop or bakery closed). Daha akıcı 2-3 cümle ve bağlaç kullan (but, so) önerilir.

例: No, my favourite food hasn’t changed; I still love the cakes I enjoyed when I was seven. Unfortunately, the bakery that made them has closed, so I rarely get to eat them now.

× Actually, it really changed, but nowadays I eat a lot of fast foods.

✓ Actually, it has really changed, but nowadays I eat a lot of fast food.

The speaker is talking about a change from the past to the present, so the present perfect 'has changed' is appropriate. 'Fast food' is an uncountable noun when referring to the category in general, so use the singular form 'fast food'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for changes over time and treat 'fast food' as an uncountable noun.

× Uh, I don't like, uh. Uh, doing myself to make a food.

✓ Uh, I don't like making food myself.

The original has incorrect word order and pronoun use: 'doing myself to make a food' is ungrammatical. Use the gerund 'making' with the reflexive placement 'myself' after the verb. Also 'food' is uncountable here, so no article is needed. Suggestion: Use 'I don't like making food myself' or 'I don't like to cook'.

× It's also fat foods too because my mother and my father always working so I always been alone in my home.

✓ It was also fatty food because my mother and father were always working, so I was often alone at home.

Several issues: 'fat foods' should be 'fatty food' or 'fatty foods' but better 'fatty food'; tense consistency requires past tense 'was' and 'were' and 'was often' instead of 'always been'. 'Always working' needs auxiliary 'were'. 'In my home' is more natural as 'at home.' Suggestion: Use past simple for past habits and ensure verbs agree (were, was) and use natural collocations like 'at home'.

× So they give me money to order something so I get addicted to eating in outside.

✓ So they gave me money to order food, and I became addicted to eating out.

Tense should be past ('gave', 'became') to match the past situation. 'Eating in outside' is ungrammatical; use 'eating out' or 'eating outside'. Combine clauses with 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: Use past simple for past events and common phrases like 'order food' and 'eating out'.

× Actually I'd say no because like I say, I get addicted to fast food so I always order the same thing so I know it's not healthy, but what can I do?

✓ Actually I'd say no, because as I said, I'm addicted to fast food so I always order the same thing. I know it's not healthy, but what can I do?

Maintain consistent present tense: 'I'm addicted' (present state) instead of 'I get addicted' which sounds like a repeated action. Use 'as I said' for reference to previous statement. Break into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'I'm addicted' for current states and avoid 'get addicted' unless describing the process of becoming addicted.

× Actually, no, I still love the same thing when I was, uh, seven or six years old.

✓ Actually, no, I still love the same things I did when I was seven or six years old.

To compare present love with past, use 'the same things I did when I was...' or 'the same thing I loved when I was...'. Maintain tense clarity: 'still love' (present) and 'when I was' (past). Suggestion: Pair present state with reference to past using 'the same things I did when I was...'.

× I eat a lot of cakes, so I'm still liking it, but in my country it's closed and I can't eat it now.

✓ I ate a lot of cake, so I still like it, but in my country it is banned/now unavailable and I can't have it now.

Tense consistency: if talking about childhood, use past 'ate'. 'I'm still liking it' is incorrect; stative verb 'like' is normally used in simple present: 'I still like it.' 'A lot of cakes' is awkward; 'a lot of cake' or 'many cakes' depending on meaning. 'It's closed' is vague for a food being unavailable—use 'banned' or 'unavailable' depending on context. Suggestion: Use 'I ate a lot of cake' for past habits and 'I still like it' for a current preference; clarify why it cannot be eaten now (banned/unavailable).