Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clearer and more grammatical: begin with a direct topic sentence naming the dish, then give two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unnecessary words and keep to 3–4 sentences. Correct vocabulary (e.g., coconut milk, lemongrass, turmeric) and agreement (singular/plural) will improve clarity.

例: My favourite food is opor ayam, a traditional Indonesian chicken dish. I like it because the coconut milk makes the sauce rich and creamy, and the lemongrass and turmeric give it a fragrant, mildly spicy flavour. My family usually eats it on special occasions, and the ingredients are easy to find at the local market.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence stating the childhood favourite, then give specific details and use past tense consistently. Avoid unrelated or unclear phrases. Use linking words (for example, because, so) to connect reasons and memories.

例: When I was young, my favourite food was opor ayam. I tried it for the first time at a family wedding and loved it so much that I asked my mum to cook it at home. I still eat it sometimes because its flavour reminds me of happy family memories.

提案: Answer directly: start with a clear yes/no and then give one or two specific examples of seasonal dishes. Remove fillers and unclear words; use linking words like however or for example. Be precise about when and what you eat.

例: Not really; I usually eat similar foods year-round. However, we prepare special dishes for religious celebrations—for example, during Eid we make ketupat and opor ayam to share with family and guests.

提案: Give a clear direct answer then add 1–2 concise supporting sentences explaining why it remains your favourite. Fix grammar and vocabulary (coconut milk, aromatic spices) and avoid filler words. Use linking words like because and so to connect ideas.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed since I was a child because I still love the taste. It is opor ayam, a traditional chicken dish cooked with coconut milk and aromatic spices, which has a pleasantly mild spiciness. My family still makes it often since the ingredients are simple and easy to buy.

× My favorite food is offer a traditional Indonesian chicken dish.

✓ My favorite food is a traditional Indonesian chicken dish called opor.

The original sentence has incorrect sentence structure and missing article and verb agreement: 'is offer a' is ungrammatical. Use 'is' followed by a noun phrase with an article: 'a traditional Indonesian chicken dish'. Adding the dish name 'opor' clarifies meaning. Suggestion: use 'My favorite food is a/an + adjective + noun' or 'My favorite food is [dish name]'.

× the coconut meal make it rich and creamy,

✓ the coconut milk makes it rich and creamy,

The noun 'meal' is incorrect; the correct ingredient is 'milk'. Also subject-verb agreement: singular 'coconut milk' requires 'makes' (third person singular). Suggestion: use correct ingredient names and match verb to singular subjects.

× and the combination of lemongrass and trimmer give its fragrance likely spicy flavor.

✓ and the combination of lemongrass and turmeric gives it a fragrant, slightly spicy flavor.

Multiple issues: 'trimmer' is incorrect word; likely intended 'turmeric'. Subject-verb agreement: 'combination ... gives' (singular). Use correct noun forms: 'gives it a fragrant, slightly spicy flavor' to convey meaning. Also add article 'a' before 'fragrant'.

× My family often prefer it for special occasion

✓ My family often prefers it for special occasions

'Family' as a collective noun is treated as singular in American English, so verb should be 'prefers'. Also pluralize 'occasion' to 'occasions' to match 'often'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and pluralize count nouns when appropriate.

× and the ingredient are easy to find at the local market.

✓ and the ingredients are easy to find at the local market.

Count noun 'ingredient' should be plural 'ingredients' because it refers to multiple items. Verb 'are' is correct for plural. Suggestion: make sure nouns are singular/plural to match intended meaning.

× When I was young I love Opal.

✓ When I was young I loved opor.

The time marker 'When I was young' requires past tense, so use 'loved' not 'love'. Also 'Opal' seems to be misspelling of 'opor' (Indonesian dish), so correct the dish name and use lowercase unless proper noun. Suggestion: match verb tense to time expressions indicating past.

× I first ride at my castle wedding and it was so delicious that I asked my mum to make it at home.

✓ I first tried it at my cousin's wedding and it was so delicious that I asked my mum to make it at home.

Several issues: 'ride' should be past tense 'tried'. 'Castle' is likely wrong context; 'cousin's' fits common usage—adjust if original meant something else. Use past tense consistently with 'first tried' and 'asked'. Suggestion: choose correct verbs and nouns and use past tense with past time context.

× I still ate it sometime because it flavor always remind me of family and happy memories.

✓ I still eat it sometimes because its flavor always reminds me of family and happy memories.

The sentence mixes past and present. 'Still' indicates ongoing habit, so use present 'eat' and adverb 'sometimes'. Possessive 'its' required, and verb agreement: 'flavor always reminds' (third person singular). Suggestion: keep tense consistent and use correct possessive pronouns.

× And not really the food I eat especially the same throughout the year, but we have traditional dishes for special occasion, for example during uh, religious celebrations.

✓ Not really; the food I eat is largely the same throughout the year, but we have traditional dishes for special occasions, for example during religious celebrations.

Original sentence has poor word order and redundancy. Correct structure: 'Not really; the food I eat is largely the same...' Also pluralize 'occasions' and remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: keep clear subject-verb-object order and avoid unnecessary words.

× Uh savage it all feed people usually uh, cook or pour and rundown.

✓ During those events people usually cook large amounts to share with others, or prepare dishes for communal meals.

The original contains unintelligible words ('savage', 'pour and rundown') and incorrect structure. Replace with clear phrasing that matches intended meaning: cooking large quantities for guests or communal sharing. Suggestion: use clear verbs and nouns; avoid filler and unclear terms.

× No, my favorite food hasn't changed since I was a child.

✓ No, my favorite food hasn't changed since I was a child.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed. It uses present perfect appropriately to describe a state continuing from past to present.

× It it is opera traditional chicken dish cooked with coconut meal and aromatic spice.

✓ It is opor, a traditional chicken dish cooked with coconut milk and aromatic spices.

Multiple errors: duplicated 'it it' removed; 'opera' corrected to 'opor'; 'coconut meal' should be 'coconut milk'; 'aromatic spice' should be plural 'aromatic spices'; add commas to set off appositive. Suggestion: proofread for repeated words and correct ingredient terms and pluralization.

× And I still love it reach a slightly spicy flavor.

✓ And I still love it because it has a slightly spicy flavor.

Original uses wrong verb 'reach' and missing conjunction. Use 'because it has' to explain reason and 'slightly spicy flavor' as noun phrase. Suggestion: use appropriate verbs like 'have/has' for possession and link clauses with conjunctions.

× The ingredient are simple and easy to buy at the local supermarket.

✓ The ingredients are simple and easy to buy at the local supermarket.

'Ingredient' should be plural 'ingredients' to match 'are'. Otherwise sentence is correct. Suggestion: ensure noun plurality matches verb.

× Uh, so my family make it.

✓ So my family makes it.

'Family' is treated as a singular collective noun in American English, so the verb should be 'makes'. Remove filler 'uh' in formal responses. Suggestion: match verb form to collective nouns and avoid fillers in speaking tests.