Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and concise: start with a clear topic sentence naming the favourite food, then give one or two brief reasons. Use natural phrasing and avoid repetition (e.g. don’t repeat “I think” multiple times).

例: My favourite food is fuchka. I don’t eat the same thing all the time because it depends on my mood, but I always enjoy fuchka because of its spicy, tangy flavour and crunchy texture.

提案: Organize the answer: give a clear topic sentence about what you liked, then one or two specific details (taste, ingredients, memories). Avoid unclear or incorrect words and keep sentences short and coherent. Use correct names (e.g. fuchka/puchka) and accurate descriptions.

例: When I was young I loved puchka, a popular street snack. It is crunchy and filled with spicy mashed potato and tamarind water, and I remember enjoying it with my friends after school.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, then two concise examples linked with a linking word. Improve grammar and avoid filler words. Mention specific seasonal foods and a brief reason for each to add content.

例: Yes, I do. Because Bangladesh has six seasons, my choices change with the weather: in summer I eat a lot of mangoes because they are ripe and refreshing, while in winter I avoid ice cream and prefer warm drinks and seasonal vegetables.

提案: Answer directly with a clear sentence saying whether it changed, then give a brief, specific reason and one example memory. Avoid long, repeated phrases and finish the sentence clearly.

例: No, it hasn’t changed. I’ve always loved puchka since childhood because it cheers me up with its tangy flavour; even now, when I’m upset I often buy puchka to feel better.

× I think there is no particular food I would love to prefer.

✓ I don't have any particular food that I prefer.

The original uses 'there is no particular food I would love to prefer,' which awkwardly combines 'there is' with a preference verb. Use a subject-focused structure: 'I don't have any particular food that I prefer.' This removes the unnecessary 'there is' construction and corrects meaning.

× So I think I would love to have Fujika every single day.

✓ So I think I would love to have Fujika every day.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable, but 'every single day' is wordy. Change to 'every day' for natural phrasing. No tense change is required.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? -> At very young age, I always discovered and tried to need food.

✓ At a very young age, I always discovered and tried new foods.

The original uses incorrect verb 'need' and lacks article 'a' before 'very young age.' Use plural 'foods' and adjective 'new' to convey the intended meaning: repeated past actions use simple past verbs 'discovered' and 'tried.'

× I knew food items.

✓ I knew many food items.

'I knew food items' is incomplete and sounds odd. Add a quantifier like 'many' to indicate familiarity with different items. Also 'knew' is past tense, matching the question about childhood.

× So at very young age, I think I would love to have that fuchsia, which is a traditional dish of Indian food, so where we can put a turmeric water in it and there's a crisp.

✓ So at a very young age, I used to love that fuchka, which is a traditional Indian dish where we put turmeric water in it and it is crisp.

Multiple issues: missing article 'a' before 'very young age'; tense should be past 'used to love'; 'fuchsia' is likely the dish 'fuchka' (spelling); 'traditional dish of Indian food' is better as 'traditional Indian dish'; 'turmeric water' is clearer; 'there's a crisp' is ungrammatical — use 'it is crisp.'

× Absolutely 'cause I'm in as a Bangladeshi citizen, I have six seasons.

✓ Absolutely, because I am a Bangladeshi citizen; we have six seasons.

'I'm in as a Bangladeshi citizen' is incorrect phrasing. Use 'I am a Bangladeshi citizen.' Also 'I have six seasons' is better as 'we have six seasons' to indicate the country's seasons. Replace informal ''cause' with 'because.'

× So it depends on definitely weather when in like I properly avoid ice cream in winter season and in summer season I would love to have mango.

✓ So it definitely depends on the weather; for example, I avoid ice cream in the winter and I love mangoes in the summer.

Original has incorrect word order and extra words ('depends on definitely weather when in like I properly'). Rearranged to natural word order: 'definitely depends on the weather.' Use plural 'mangoes' for general preference and articles 'the winter/the summer.'

× No, I am very loyal person I think even if it's just about the food or person or anything.

✓ No, I am a very loyal person, I think, whether it's about food, a person, or anything else.

Missing article 'a' before 'very loyal person.' Add commas for clarity and use 'whether' and 'anything else' for natural phrasing.

× But my mood doesn't change easily and even if my young age very young age I would love to have puchka and till now I still have the fujika and whenever I am in a bad mood I would love to have my.

✓ But my mood doesn't change easily, and even when I was very young I loved puchka; until now I still like fuchka, and whenever I am in a bad mood I like to have it.

This sentence has tense inconsistencies and repetition. Use past 'when I was very young I loved puchka' and present 'until now I still like fuchka.' Fix spelling to 'puchka'/'fuchka' consistently. 'I would love to have my' is incomplete — replace with 'I like to have it.' Ensure verbs match time references.