Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more grammatical, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the dish, then give one or two specific reasons (ingredients, taste, cultural popularity). Use linking words to connect ideas and limit to 2–3 sentences to sound natural.

例: My favourite food is pho, a traditional Vietnamese noodle soup. It has a rich beef broth, flat rice noodles and fresh herbs, and I love it because the flavours are comforting and many visitors try it when they come to Vietnam.

提案: Answer with a clear topic sentence about childhood preferences, then give specific examples and a brief reason. Avoid repetition and correct basic grammar (e.g., ‘I liked snacks’). Use a linking word to contrast past and present if needed.

例: When I was young I liked snacks such as chips and chocolate. I avoided vegetables because I was picky then, but now I try to eat more balanced meals for my health.

提案: Provide a direct answer followed by one or two specific examples tied to seasons or festivals. Improve grammar and coherence: use linking words like ‘for example’ and name the festival and specific dishes. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes. We eat special foods during festivals; for example, during Tet (Lunar New Year) we often have banh chung (sticky rice cake) and spring rolls, which are different from everyday meals.

提案: Answer directly and succinctly, stating whether it changed and why. Use correct tense and clearer phrasing (e.g., ‘I have changed my diet’). Give one specific example of what you eat now versus before, and use a linking word to show contrast.

例: Yes, my preferences have changed. I now prefer meals with more vegetables and lean meat for better health, whereas as a child I often ate junk food like chips, chocolate and milk tea.

× So as a Vietnamese, I really into food be full and this is a umm, most popular.

✓ As a Vietnamese, I really like hearty food and this is, umm, the most popular.

The student omitted the verb 'like' and used 'be full' incorrectly. 'So as a Vietnamese' should be 'As a Vietnamese'. Use 'I really like' for preference. 'Be full' is wrong here; 'hearty' or 'filling' describes food. Also include the definite article 'the' before 'most popular.' Suggestions: use 'As a Vietnamese, I really like...'; replace 'be full' with 'hearty' or 'filling'; add 'the' before 'most popular'.

× This is in Vietnam and every, uh, foreigner who visit to Vietnam also try this.

✓ This is from Vietnam and every foreigner who visits Vietnam also tries it.

Pronoun and verb agreement errors: 'who visit' should be 'who visits' because the relative clause refers to 'every foreigner' (singular). 'Also try' must be 'also tries'. Use 'it' to refer back to the dish. Use 'from Vietnam' or 'in Vietnam' with clearer context. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement in relative clauses and use correct pronoun reference ('it').

× It include the broad and the beef and the noodles.

✓ It includes broad beans, beef, and noodles.

Subject-verb agreement: 'include' should be 'includes' to match singular 'it'. 'Broad' is incomplete; likely 'broad beans'. Use commas and 'and' in a list correctly and omit unnecessary definite articles before items. Suggestions: ensure verbs agree with subject, provide complete nouns, and format lists correctly.

× When I was a kid, I really into snack because I was too lazy to eat vegetable or meat, which is a really healthy for your health.

✓ When I was a kid, I was really into snacks because I was too lazy to eat vegetables or meat, which are really healthy for your health.

'Really into' requires 'was' (past) before it. 'Snack' should be plural 'snacks'. 'Vegetable or meat' should be plural 'vegetables or meat' and agreement: 'which are' refers to plural 'vegetables or meat'. Remove redundancy 'for your health' or rephrase. Suggestions: use 'was really into', pluralize countable nouns, and match verb 'which are' to plural antecedent.

× But yeah, as a kid everybody like the unhealthy one with the chips and chocolate.

✓ But yeah, as a kid everybody liked unhealthy snacks like chips and chocolate.

Tense and subject-verb agreement: 'everybody like' should be 'everybody liked' (past). 'The unhealthy one' is awkward; use 'unhealthy snacks'. Use 'like' as a preposition meaning 'such as' or 'like chips and chocolate'. Suggestions: use past tense 'liked', avoid 'the' before a general category, and use 'like' to introduce examples.

× Uh, yes, as a Vietnamese, we have a lot of holidays in your year and in different time of the year we're gonna have a different life festival.

✓ Uh, yes, as Vietnamese, we have a lot of holidays in a year and at different times of the year we have different festivals.

Pronoun inconsistency: 'we' should match 'as Vietnamese' (plural) or 'As a Vietnamese' should be 'As Vietnamese' if speaking for the community. 'Your year' is wrong; use 'a year' or 'the year'. 'In different time' should be 'at different times'. 'Gonna' is informal; use 'have' or 'there are'. 'Life festival' is unclear; use 'festivals'. Suggestions: maintain consistent pronouns, use standard prepositional phrases ('in a year', 'at different times'), avoid 'gonna' in formal speech, and choose correct noun 'festivals'.

× And we, for example, in the third holiday we have chicken cake, the spring roll and a lot of things and it is really different from normal days we eat.

✓ For example, during the third holiday we have bánh chưng (sticky rice cake), spring rolls, and many other foods, and it is very different from what we eat on normal days.

Awkward phrasing and quantifier use: 'a lot of things' is vague; use 'many other foods'. Remove repeated 'we'. Use definite article and phrasing 'what we eat on normal days'. Clarify specific food names if possible. Suggestions: avoid repetition, use precise quantifiers ('many other foods'), and use clear comparative phrasing.

× Of course, because when I grow up, I want to have a healthier body and I try to eat more vegetable meat and which is, uh, good for my health.

✓ Of course, because as I grew up I wanted to have a healthier body, so I tried to eat more vegetables and meat, which are good for my health.

Tense inconsistency: the question asks about change since childhood, so past tense should be used ('grew up', 'wanted', 'tried'). 'Vegetable meat' is incorrect phrase; separate into 'vegetables and meat'. 'Which is' must agree with plural antecedent -> 'which are'. Suggestions: use past tense when describing changes since childhood, separate nouns correctly, and match relative pronoun agreement.

× Then I was eating as a kid because when I was a kid, everybody would like to eat junk food with a trip, the chocolate and milk tea.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to eat junk food such as chips, chocolate, and milk tea.

Awkward and redundant phrasing: 'Then I was eating as a kid because when I was a kid' repeats the idea. Use 'used to' for habitual past actions. 'A trip' is incorrect; likely 'chips'. 'Would like to eat' is awkward; use 'used to eat' or 'liked to eat'. Suggestions: avoid repetition, use 'used to' for past habits, list examples clearly, and correct item names ('chips').