Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep the reply short, clear and relevant. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. “My favourite food is apples.”), then give one or two concise reasons using accurate facts and vocabulary. Avoid repetition and irrelevant comments (like mentioning the examiner). Use linking words such as “because” or “and” correctly.

例: My favourite food is apples because they are refreshing and healthy. For example, I often eat an apple as a snack since it keeps me full and gives me energy during the day.

提案: Use past tense consistently and provide a clear topic sentence. Give specific details (e.g. how often you ate them, occasions) and use linking words like “because” or “and” to connect ideas. Keep to 2–4 sentences and avoid vague phrasing.

例: When I was young, I liked eating oranges because they were both sweet and slightly sour. I used to eat them nearly every day after school, and they became my favourite snack during the afternoon.

提案: Answer directly and use correct grammar for habitual actions (present simple). Mention one or two clear examples with seasonal timing and link them logically (e.g. “in summer” / “in winter”). Avoid long, confused clauses and unnecessary background details.

例: Yes, I eat different foods depending on the season. For example, I eat mangoes in the summer because they are ripe then, and I usually eat apples in the winter when they are in season.

提案: Give a clear direct answer and explain briefly. Use simple, accurate sentences: state whether it has changed, then give a specific example of a change (e.g. a food you used to like but no longer do). Avoid filler sounds and confusing phrasing.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed; I still prefer apples. However, I used to like kiwis when I was younger, but now I rarely eat them because I find them too tart.

× My favorite food is apple because it it provides us a protein of protein and I like to I like, I also like your color, color out there.

✓ My favorite food is apples because they provide protein, and I also like their color.

The sentence has adjective/adverb and diction issues: 'apple' should be plural 'apples' when speaking generally (also subject-verb agreement but covered here), 'it it' is a repetition, 'provides us a protein of protein' is awkward and ungrammatical—use 'provide protein' or 'provide us with protein'. 'I like to I like' is a repetition; remove extra words. 'Your color' is incorrect in context; refer to the apples' color using 'their color'. Suggestion: simplify statements, use plural for general foods and concise noun phrases (e.g., 'apples provide protein' and 'I like their color').

× When I was young, I like to eat all orange because it is sour and also at the same time they give sweetness. I love that combinations.

✓ When I was young, I liked to eat oranges because they are sour and also sweet at the same time. I loved that combination.

Tense is inconsistent: the main clause starts in the past ('When I was young') so the verb should be past ('liked' not 'like'). 'All orange' is incorrect—use 'oranges'. Subject-verb and noun agreement: 'they give sweetness' is awkward; use 'they are sweet' or 'they also give sweetness'. 'I love that combinations' mixes present with past and has plurality mismatch; change to past 'I loved that combination' or keep present tense consistently if intended. Suggestion: match past tense throughout when describing childhood and ensure plural nouns ('oranges') and singular/plural agreement ('combination' vs 'combinations').

× Does I like to try different foods like mangoes in in summer seasons and and apples in winter seasons until I as I actually try whenever my mother always bring me home to feel refreshing after a long time.

✓ I like to try different foods, such as mangoes in summer and apples in winter, and I try them whenever my mother brings them home to refresh me after a long time.

The sentence has multiple structure problems: 'Does I like' is ungrammatical auxiliary use; use declarative 'I like'. Redundant words ('in in', 'and and') should be removed. 'Summer seasons' and 'winter seasons' are wordy—use 'in summer' and 'in winter'. The clause 'until I as I actually try whenever my mother always bring me home' is confusing and ungrammatical; likely meant 'I try them whenever my mother brings them home'. Verb agreement: 'bring' should be 'brings'. 'To feel refreshing' should be 'to refresh me' or 'to feel refreshed'. Suggestion: split into shorter clauses, use correct subject-verb agreement, remove redundancies, and use clear pronouns for foods ('them').

× MMM actually no, my food did. My food favorite food didn't change. That's really what there are some like. I didn't like Kiwi anymore but I feel like I am full of it.

✓ Actually no, my favorite food did not change. There are some foods I do not like anymore, like kiwi, but I feel like I had my fill of it.

Tense and sentence formation errors: 'my food did' is unclear—use 'my favorite food did not change' for negation in past. 'My food favorite food' is redundant—use 'my favorite food'. 'That's really what there are some like' is ungrammatical; intended meaning appears to be 'There are some foods I do not like anymore, like kiwi.' 'I didn't like Kiwi anymore' mixes past negation and 'anymore' incorrectly; use present 'do not like anymore' or past perfect depending on context. 'I feel like I am full of it' is awkward; use 'I feel like I had my fill of it' or 'I'm tired of it'. Suggestion: choose consistent tense, remove redundancies, and rephrase idiomatically (e.g., 'I don't like kiwi anymore' or 'I've had my fill of it').