Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban sudah jelas tetapi perlu perbaikan tata bahasa, kealamian, dan keefektifan. Kurangi pengulangan (mis. 'like' beberapa kali), perbaiki struktur kalimat (use past/present correctly), dan tambahkan satu kalimat dukungan singkat yang spesifik (mis. alasan tekstur atau kenangan). Usahakan tidak lebih dari 4–5 kalimat dan gunakan linking seperti 'because' atau 'since'.

例: My favourite food is chicken, especially fried chicken because I love its crispy texture and savory flavor. I also enjoy grilled chicken seasoned with salt and black pepper for a healthier option. I've liked chicken since childhood because my family often cooked it for special meals.

提案: Jawaban memiliki ide yang baik (preferensi makanan segar) tetapi perlu memperbaiki kosa kata dan tata bahasa serta mengeliminasi frasa yang tidak jelas ('mushroom festivals'). Gunakan contoh nyata dan struktur yang lebih alami, tambahkan linking seperti 'for example' dan 'because' untuk menjelaskan alasan secara spesifik.

例: When I was young, I preferred fresh foods. For example, I often ate wild mushrooms and fresh fish from rivers or the sea because they tasted natural and were healthier. I didn't like ultra-processed foods because their flavor and texture didn't appeal to me.

提案: Jawaban singkat dan jelas tetapi terasa berulang dan ada pengulangan kata ('in in', 'like like'). Perbaiki kelancaran dengan satu atau dua kalimat pendukung yang spesifik (mis. sebutkan contoh makanan di acara khusus jika berbeda atau mengapa tidak berubah). Gunakan linking seperti 'although' atau 'however' jika ingin membuat perbandingan.

例: No, I don't usually change my diet with the seasons; I eat similar foods throughout the year. Even during holidays or religious events, we tend to prepare the same traditional dishes rather than seasonal specialties.

提案: Jawaban jelas tetapi terhambat oleh pengulangan filler (uh) dan tata bahasa yang keliru ('is still be', 'I discovered some foods that I have'). Hilangkan filler, perbaiki bentuk kata kerja, dan tambahkan satu kalimat yang menyatakan contoh makanan baru untuk menunjukkan perkembangan selera.

例: No, my favourite food hasn't changed; chicken is still my favourite because I grew up eating it. However, I've broadened my tastes and now enjoy dishes like Thai curries and grilled salmon, which I discovered more recently.

× It's chicken, specially fried chicken.

✓ It's chicken, especially fried chicken.

The adverb 'especially' should be used to indicate a particular preference. 'Specially' means 'for a special purpose' and is less appropriate here. Use 'especially' to emphasize a favourite type.

× I like it when chicken is grilled with salt and black pepper.

✓ I like it when chicken is grilled with salt and black pepper.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. Use present simple 'like' and passive 'is grilled' to describe a general preference.

× I like chicken since I was a child and until today there is no better.

✓ I have liked chicken since I was a child, and to this day there is nothing better.

Use present perfect 'have liked' for an action starting in the past and continuing to the present. 'Since' requires a point in time; 'to this day' or 'to this day there is nothing better' is more natural than 'until today there is no better.' Also use 'nothing better' instead of 'no better.'

× I did like fresh foods, for example mushroom festivals and the fish from the sea or from the river.

✓ I liked fresh foods when I was young, for example mushrooms and fish from the sea or river.

Use simple past 'liked' for past habits. 'Did like' is unnecessary and emphatic. 'Mushroom festivals' seems incorrect contextually; likely 'mushrooms.' Also plural nouns should be natural: 'fish from the sea or river.'

× I actually did not like the the ultra processed food because it's not it's not only the taste was not appeal.

✓ I actually did not like ultra-processed food because it wasn't appealing in taste.

Remove duplicate 'the the.' 'Ultra-processed' should be hyphenated and used without 'the' when speaking generally. The clause was ungrammatical: use 'it wasn't appealing in taste' or 'it didn't appeal to me.' Use past tense 'did not like' and 'wasn't' consistently.

× No I don't. I actually eat the same food throughout the year.

✓ No, I don't. I actually eat the same foods throughout the year.

Minor plural issue: 'foods' or 'the same food' both acceptable; 'same foods' fits better when referring to different dishes. Comma after 'No' improves fluency.

× Even in in some special events like like holidays or in religion events I do it the same food.

✓ Even during special events like holidays or religious celebrations, I eat the same food.

Remove duplicated words 'in in' and 'like like.' Use 'during' for events, 'religious celebrations' instead of 'religion events.' Use 'eat the same food' rather than 'do it the same food.' Add comma after introductory phrase.

× No, it hasn't changed. Chicken, uh, is still be my favorite food since I was a child.

✓ No, it hasn't changed. Chicken has still been my favorite food since I was a child.

Use present perfect 'has still been' to show a state continuing from the past to the present. 'Is still be' is ungrammatical because it mixes present 'is' with infinitive 'be.'

× It's only that my, I like some, I like various foods for now because, uh, I discovered, uh, some foods that I have.

✓ It's just that now I like a wider variety of foods because I've discovered new dishes.

Original is fragmented and repetitive. Use 'just that now' to indicate contrast, 'a wider variety of foods' for clarity, and present perfect 'I've discovered' to show a recent change. 'Some foods that I have' is vague; replace with 'new dishes.'