Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct minor grammar and pronunciation errors, and add a brief reason or personal detail. Use one clear topic sentence followed by up to two supporting sentences with linking words. Avoid repetition (e.g., “easy” used several times).

例: My favourite food is Maggi because it’s quick and tasty. I usually make it by boiling water and adding the noodles and spices, which takes only two minutes. Also, I like it when I’m busy, as it’s a convenient and satisfying snack.

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy (past habits: ‘when I was a child’, ‘I used to’), combine short fragments into coherent sentences using linking words, and give one or two specific examples of foods or juices. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: When I was a child, I usually ate healthy food because my parents and school encouraged vegetables. For example, I often had spinach and fresh fruit juice before sports lessons, which helped me stay energetic during games.

提案: Avoid repetition and run-on sentences. State a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific seasonal examples and use linking words (e.g., ‘for example’, ‘in summer’). Correct minor errors and keep sentences concise.

例: Yes, we eat different foods according to the season. For example, fresh spinach is more common in winter, while in summer we enjoy lighter curries and seasonal fruits like mangoes.

提案: Make the answer grammatically correct and more coherent: give a clear statement that your preferences changed, explain why with specific examples, and use linking words. Avoid vague phrases like ‘mentality’ and unnecessary repetition.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. When I was younger I often ate Maggi, but now I prefer more nutritious meals like grilled chicken and salads because I want to stay healthy and avoid gaining weight.

× My favorite food is Maggi which is ready in 2 minutes.

✓ My favorite food is Maggi, which is ready in 2 minutes.

Missing comma before nonrestrictive relative clause. Add a comma to set off 'which is ready in 2 minutes' because it provides extra information about Maggi rather than defining it. Suggestion: Place a comma before 'which' when the clause is nonessential.

× It is an easy process which I can just make by boiling the water and putting the Maddie and the ingredients in it.

✓ It is an easy dish that I can make by boiling water and putting the Maggi and the ingredients in it.

Incorrect noun and unnecessary use of 'process' and 'which'; 'make by boiling water' is more natural. 'Putting the Maddie' is likely a misspelling of 'Maggi'. Use 'that' for defining clause or rephrase. Suggestion: Use 'dish' and 'boiling water' and correct product name.

× It is ready to eat even if we are in hurry.

✓ It is ready to eat even if we are in a hurry.

Missing article 'a' before 'hurry'. The phrase 'in a hurry' is the correct idiom. Suggestion: Use 'in a hurry' for this expression.

× It's really delicious in taste and easy to make.

✓ It's really delicious and easy to make.

Redundant phrase 'in taste' is unnecessary; 'delicious' already describes taste. Suggestion: Remove 'in taste' for conciseness.

× When I was child, I used to eat healthy food because in school and in the home they taught us to eat the green vegetables which make our body fit and energetic.

✓ When I was a child, I used to eat healthy food because at school and at home they taught us to eat green vegetables that make our bodies fit and energetic.

Missing article 'a' before 'child'; use 'at school' and 'at home' (preposition choice); 'the green vegetables' should be 'green vegetables' (no article) and 'which' in defining clause should be 'that'; 'body' should be plural 'bodies' to match general subject. Suggestion: Add 'a', change prepositions to 'at', remove unnecessary 'the', use 'that', and pluralize 'bodies'.

× For the sports.

✓ For sports.

Fragment and incorrect article 'the'; 'for sports' is concise and correct in context. Suggestion: Combine with surrounding sentence or use 'for sports'.

× As I took part in the sports activities so I used to eat the healthy food and juices every time so that I can be energetic.

✓ Because I took part in sports activities, I used to eat healthy food and drink juices regularly so that I could be energetic.

Tense inconsistency: main clause is past (took part, used to) so purpose clause should use past modal 'could' not 'can'. Remove unnecessary 'the' before 'healthy food' and 'the sports activities'. Use 'drink juices' instead of 'eat juices'. Suggestion: Keep past tense consistently and correct verbs.

× Yes, definitely at different times of the year, there are different types of the vegetables available.

✓ Yes, definitely at different times of the year, there are different types of vegetables available.

Unnecessary definite article 'the' before plural 'vegetables'. Remove 'the' when speaking generally. Suggestion: Omit 'the' in such general statements.

× So which we can eat and enjoy is as like the spinach is mostly the fresh spinach is mostly present in the winter season.

✓ For example, spinach is mostly fresh and available in the winter season.

Awkward and repetitive structure 'So which we can eat and enjoy is as like'; repeated words 'mostly the fresh spinach is mostly' and wrong order. Simplify and reorder to a clear example sentence. Suggestion: Use 'For example' and concise phrasing.

× So we used to eat in in the winter and in the summer we have some delicious curries which is available at that time.

✓ So we used to eat it in the winter, and in the summer we have some delicious curries that are available at that time.

Repeated 'in'; 'curries which is' has subject-verb agreement error: plural 'curries' requires 'are' or 'that are'. Use 'that are' for defining clause. Suggestion: Remove duplication and fix agreement.

× So it depends on season to season.

✓ So it depends on the season.

Awkward phrase 'season to season'; use 'depends on the season' or 'varies from season to season'. Suggestion: Prefer 'depends on the season' or 'varies from season to season'.

× Yeah, according to the time and the mentality, my food have changed from the childhood to since.

✓ Yeah, over time and with changes in mindset, my food has changed since childhood.

Incorrect verb agreement 'my food have' should be 'my food has'; awkward phrasing 'from the childhood to since' should be 'since childhood' or 'over time'. Suggestion: Use 'has changed' and 'since childhood'.

× Now, as I told you, I used to eat the Maggi, but now I concentrate on more of the nutritious food which makes my body well, so that it should not be fatty, because at the time it's making your body dull.

✓ Now, as I told you, I used to eat Maggi, but now I concentrate more on nutritious food that makes my body healthy so that I do not become overweight, because at that time it made my body feel dull.

Multiple issues: article 'the Maggi' should be 'Maggi' (no article); 'concentrate on more of the nutritious food' awkward—use 'concentrate more on nutritious food'; relative clause 'which makes my body well' better 'that makes my body healthy'; tense consistency: talking about past effect 'it made my body feel dull' (past), and change from past to present must be consistent; 'fatty' is wrong word for person—use 'overweight'. Suggestion: Rephrase for natural collocations and proper tense usage.

× So I think it changes.

✓ So I think it has changed.

Tense mismatch: speaker refers to a change that occurred, so present perfect 'has changed' is appropriate rather than simple present 'changes'. Suggestion: Use 'has changed' when referring to a change from past to present.