Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct at the start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler phrases and unnecessary repetition, and add one specific reason or detail. Keep to under five sentences and use a linking word when adding an example.

例: My favourite type of food is savory dishes. For example, I especially enjoy roasted potatoes with grilled meat because the flavours are hearty and satisfying. Also, macaroni with cheese is a comfort food I often choose when I want something filling.

提案: Start with a direct statement about your past preference, avoid vague hedging, and give a concrete detail or brief anecdote explaining why you liked them. Use a linking word to connect reason to consequence.

例: When I was a child I loved sweet foods. For instance, I often ate candies and pies after school because they tasted good and felt like a treat; however, as a result my mother worried about my teeth and limited my sweets.

提案: Good clear structure and relevant detail. To improve, replace vague words like 'abundant' with more specific food examples and use one linking word for contrast. Keep sentences concise and natural.

例: Yes, I do. In winter I usually eat heartier, salty dishes such as stews and roasted potatoes to keep warm, whereas in summer I prefer fresh seasonal produce like tomatoes, cucumbers and watermelon because they feel lighter and refreshing.

提案: Answer directly and avoid filler like 'that's a bit tricky.' Give a brief comparison with a specific example of continuity or change and use a linking word to clarify frequency or condition.

例: Not really — my taste has stayed similar. I still prefer salty dishes such as meat and potatoes, although occasionally when I'm in the mood I eat a lot of sweets, just like when I was a child.

× I guess as a child I would like sweets, for example, candies or pies.

✓ I guess as a child I would have liked sweets, for example, candies or pies.

The sentence refers to a past habitual preference. Use of 'would' with a base verb plus present form is incorrect here; the correct structure is 'would have liked' to indicate past preference or alternatively 'liked'. Use 'have liked' to match past context and ensure proper tense agreement. Suggestion: Use 'I used to like' or 'I liked' or 'I would have liked' for past habitual actions.

× And my mom was sad about that because it was very unhealthy for my brain and for my teeth.

✓ And my mom was sad about that because it was very unhealthy for my brain and my teeth.

Redundant preposition 'for' before 'my teeth' is unnecessary. Also the tense is fine (past). Removing 'for' makes the sentence more natural: 'unhealthy for my brain and my teeth.' Suggestion: Avoid repeating the same preposition when it applies to two coordinated objects.

× It really depends on my mood and on my health condition.

✓ It really depends on my mood and my health condition.

Using 'on' twice is grammatically acceptable but repetitive. The present tense 'depends' is correct. Simplifying to one 'on' or omitting the second preposition improves fluency. Suggestion: Use parallel structure: 'depends on X and Y.'

× For example, when it's winter time, I prefer to eat something abundant and salty, but when it's summertime, I tend to eat fresh vegetables and fruits because they are seasonal food.

✓ For example, when it's winter I prefer to eat hearty, salty foods, but in summer I tend to eat fresh vegetables and fruit because they are seasonal.

Several issues: 'winter time' and 'summertime' are less natural than 'winter' and 'summer.' 'Something abundant and salty' is awkward; 'hearty, salty foods' is clearer. 'Vegetables and fruits' -> 'vegetables and fruit' (fruit as an uncountable collective) and 'seasonal food' should be 'seasonal' or 'seasonal foods.' Also use consistent prepositions ('in summer'). Suggestion: Use concise seasonal expressions and plural/uncountable nouns appropriately.

× That's a bit tricky question, but I'd say that my food preferences haven't changed much because I still adore eating salty food and sometimes when I'm in a certain mood I can eat a lot of sweets.

✓ That's a bit of a tricky question, but I'd say that my food preferences haven't changed much because I still adore salty foods, and sometimes when I'm in a certain mood I eat a lot of sweets.

Missing article: 'a bit of a tricky question' requires 'of a'. 'Adore eating salty food' is better as 'adore salty foods' for natural phrasing. 'I can eat a lot of sweets' is acceptable but 'I eat a lot of sweets' fits habitual meaning better. The sentence was long; splitting or adding a comma improves readability. Suggestion: Include necessary articles ('a') and prefer natural collocations ('adore salty foods').