Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更自然、语法更准确，并且控制在五句话以内。可先直接回答（主题句），然后用一两句说明原因或描述细节，避免语气词如“Uh”，并注意时态和主谓一致。可以补充关于口感或何时吃的具体细节以增加内容丰富度。

例: My favourite food is durian pizza. I first tried it at a night market and was surprised by the sweet, creamy durian combined with savory cheese. The contrast of flavors makes it a memorable treat, and I often order it when I want something unique.

提案: 回答中时态不一致且有词汇错误（如“case, circus”不明确），句子碎片化。应先用过去时作主题句，然后用一两句具体说明喜欢的甜点种类和原因，最后用一句说明现在的改变并解释原因。避免使用模糊词语“etcetera”。

例: When I was young, I loved sweet desserts such as chocolate cake and ice cream. I ate them often because they were easy treats after school and tasted comforting. However, as I grew older I realized they were unhealthy, so I now prefer fruit and yogurt instead.

提案: 回答偏离问题（询问不同季节的饮食，但学生谈过去和现在的习惯），还有严重的词汇和拼写错误（例如“sex”应为’snacks’，“case”应为’cake’）。应直接回应季节性差异，用现在时描述并举具体季节和食品作为例子，使用连接词使逻辑清晰。

例: Yes, I do eat different foods depending on the season. In summer I tend to eat more cold desserts like ice cream and fruit, while in winter I prefer warm soups and stews. These choices help me feel comfortable and healthy throughout the year.

提案: 回答总体清楚但需要更自然和语法正确的表达。使用过去时描述童年，使用现在时描述现在的喜好，并可以简要说明为什么改变（例如健康、口味变化或习惯）。控制在两到三句内更为有效。

例: Yes, it has changed. As a child my favourite was chocolate ice cream because I loved sweet treats, but now I prefer strawberries because they are fresh and healthier.

× When I first tasted, I feel really yummy and delicious.

✓ When I first tasted it, I felt that it was really tasty and delicious.

句子中时态混用：主句用过去时（tasted），从句却用现在时（feel），应保持一致使用过去时；另外“yummy”作口语形容食物，搭配上要用形容词“tasty”或“delicious”，并在“tasted”后补it作宾语。建议整体改为过去时态并加入宾语，使表达更自然。

× When I was young, I'm really into different kinds of dessert like chocolate case, circus, etcetera.

✓ When I was young, I was really into different kinds of desserts like chocolate cake, circus, etcetera.

原句主句时态为过去（When I was young），但随后使用现在时态“I'm”，应改为过去时“I was”；“dessert”需用复数“desserts”；“case”应为“cake”。建议保持过去时一致并修正名词单复数与拼写。

× But now when I get older. I know that it wasn't healthy, so I tried some healthier food.

✓ But now that I am older, I know that it wasn't healthy, so I try to eat healthier food.

原句有断句问题“But now when I get older.”不完整；时态不一致：应使用现在完成或现在时表示现在的状态（now that I am older），并且对过去不健康的事实用过去时（wasn't），但随后结果应影响现在的习惯，故“tried”应改为现在时“try to eat”。建议合并为完整句并调整时态以表达从过去到现在的变化。

× Yes, when I was young I usually eat some sex like ice cream case, chocolate etcetera.

✓ Yes, when I was young I usually ate snacks like ice cream, cake, chocolate, etcetera.

句子中时间状语为过去（when I was young），动词应使用过去时“ate”而不是现在时“eat”；“sex”显然为拼写错误，应为“snacks”；“case”应为“cake”。建议使用复数形式和正确拼写，动词与时间一致。

× But when I get older I try to eat some healthy food like yogurt, fruits etcetera.

✓ But now that I am older I try to eat healthier foods like yogurt and fruit.

“when I get older”应与说话时态匹配，若指现在可用“now that I am older”或“since I got older”；原句“healthy food”可改为“healthier foods”或“healthier food”，并将“fruits”通常用不可数“fruit”或复数“fruits”视语境，此处更自然为“fruit”。建议明确时间并使用比较级“healthier”表达与过去对比。

× Yes, when I was a child my favorite food is chocolate ice cream, but now my favorite food is a kind of fruit strawberry.

✓ Yes, when I was a child my favorite food was chocolate ice cream, but now my favorite food is strawberry.

对比过去和现在时，过去部分应使用过去时“was”而不是现在时“is”；“a kind of fruit strawberry”表达冗余且不自然，应直接说“strawberry”。建议使用过去时和简洁表达。