Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and add a specific example or reason using a linking word. Limit to about 3–4 sentences. Also correct small grammar errors (e.g., 'different kinds of bread', 'sweet and savory', 'bread with meat').

例: My favourite food is bread, especially savory varieties. For example, I love a crusty roll filled with roast pork because the meat and sauce add a lot of flavour. I also enjoy sweet breads like cinnamon rolls on weekends.

提案: Answer directly in past tense and avoid repetition. Give a clear topic sentence, then add a specific example or reason using a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'for example'). Finish the sentence fully to avoid trailing off.

例: When I was young, I especially liked eggs. For example, I often ate scrambled eggs for breakfast because they were quick to cook and tasty, and sometimes my parents made boiled eggs for school lunches.

提案: Be specific and correct word choice (e.g., 'diet' not 'diary'; 'related to the seasons'). Use a linking phrase to explain how and give an example. Keep it concise and grammatical.

例: Yes, I do. I usually change my diet according to the season; for instance, I eat more fresh salads and fruits in summer, but prefer soups and stews in winter because they are warming.

提案: Use correct grammar and concise structure: start with a clear topic sentence, then add a specific reason using a linking word like 'because' and give one brief example. Correct verb forms and agreement ('I still love eating eggs', 'eggs are').

例: Not really — I still love eggs because they are healthy, tasty and quick to prepare. For example, I often make an omelette for dinner when I’m short on time.

× Different kind of bread.

✓ Different kinds of bread.

The noun 'kind' should be plural when referring to more than one type; use 'kinds' with 'different'. Also plural noun 'bread' can stay uncountable, but 'kinds of bread' is the correct phrase.

× I like both sweet and sour.

✓ I like both sweet and savory breads.

The original 'sweet and sour' is ambiguous for bread; 'sour' alone is awkward. Use a clearer adjective like 'savory' and include the noun 'breads' to match context.

× Especially the bread with some meat is the best for me.

✓ Especially bread with meat is the best for me.

Use uncountable or general noun 'bread' without 'the' and avoid 'some' which is unnecessary. Alternatively 'Especially the bread with meat is best for me' would work, but removing 'the' and 'some' makes the sentence more natural.

× I think my favorite food is eggs.

✓ I think my favorite food is eggs.

No grammatical change needed for present tense here; sentence is correct. (If necessary, 'eggs' as plural is fine when naming a food.)

× Different types of different types of eggs, scrambled eggs, boiled eggs, and.

✓ Different types of eggs: scrambled eggs, boiled eggs, and so on.

Remove the repeated phrase and finish the list with 'and so on' or 'etc.' Use colon to introduce examples. Ensure parallel structure in the list.

× I'd usually change my diary routine so I eat the food that related to the to that seasons.

✓ I usually change my daily routine, so I eat foods that are related to the seasons.

Multiple issues: 'diary' should be 'daily' (adjective), 'I'd usually change' is awkward so use 'I usually change' for habitual action, 'food' should be plural 'foods' or 'the food' with restructuring, and passive/relative clause needs 'that are related to the seasons'. Also remove duplicate 'to the'.

× Not really. I still love to eating eggs whatever when I was a child or now, because eggs is a kind of healthy and delicious food and it is very easy to cook.

✓ Not really. I still love eating eggs, whether when I was a child or now, because eggs are a healthy and delicious food and they are very easy to cook.

Use 'love eating' (verb + -ing) rather than 'love to eating'. Use 'whether' not 'whatever' for contrast. 'Eggs' is plural so use 'are' not 'is', and refer to 'they' for plural pronoun. Also simplify phrasing for natural speech.