Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Polish: Usuń powtórzenia, popraw gramatykę i artykuły oraz użyj spójników, by odpowiedź była płynna. Skonstruuj jedno zdanie wprowadzające temat, potem dodaj 1–2 zdania wspierające ze szczegółami (rodzaj chleba, przyprawy, korzyści zdrowotne) i zakończ krótkim podsumowaniem.

例: My favourite food is avocado toast with a poached egg because it is both tasty and nutritious. I usually choose whole-grain bread, spread ripe avocado and sprinkle a little lemon zest and black pepper for extra flavour. The egg adds high-quality protein, so this meal keeps me full and energetic for the morning.

提案: Polish: Popraw słownictwo i czasy, usuń kolokwializmy („and all”) i błędy leksykalne. Zacznij od prostego zdania stwierdzającego, dodaj kontekst emocjonalny i szczegóły (jak przygotowywano naleśniki, smak, składniki) używając 1–2 spójników.

例: When I was young, I loved apple pancakes because my grandfather made them for me. He often topped them with chocolate sauce or sprinkles, which made them feel like a special treat. I remember the pancakes being warm and slightly cinnamon-flavoured, and they always cheered me up.

提案: Polish: Uporządkuj odpowiedź, unikaj wypełniaczy („uh”), i połącz zdania logicznymi linkami. Podaj krótkie porównanie między świętami i konkretnie opisz potrawy (składniki, smak, tradycja).

例: Yes, we eat different foods for seasonal holidays. For Easter we usually have white borscht with sausages and boiled eggs, which is hearty and slightly sour due to the fermented rye. At Christmas we traditionally eat fish dishes, mainly carp, served with potatoes and beetroot salad, reflecting our cultural customs.

提案: Polish: Uspójnić styl i ton, zastąpić emocjonalne słowa dokładniejszymi opiniami i poprawić zgody gramatyczne (np. "provides" → "provide"). Dodaj krótkie wyjaśnienie dlaczego preferujesz teraz zdrowsze opcje i przykład konkretnego posiłku.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed. I used to love pizza, but now I find it too greasy and heavy because of the large amount of cheese. Nowadays I prefer balanced meals rich in protein and whole grains, for example grilled chicken with quinoa and steamed vegetables, which keep me full and energetic throughout the day.

× My favorite My favorite food is a toast with avocado and egg because it contains the most important nutritions.

✓ My favorite food is toast with avocado and egg because it contains the most important nutrients.

The sentence repeats 'My favorite' and uses the article 'a' incorrectly before 'toast'. 'Toast' is uncountable in this context so no article is needed. 'Nutritions' is incorrect; the correct noun is 'nutrients'. Suggestion: remove the repeated phrase, drop the article, and use 'nutrients' for correct plural noun.

× I always consider the whole grain bread, fresh avocado sprinkled with some lemon zest and also an egg which is great because it has a lot of protein.

✓ I always choose whole-grain bread, fresh avocado sprinkled with some lemon zest, and an egg, which is great because it has a lot of protein.

Use 'choose' instead of 'consider' for selecting a preferred food. 'Whole-grain bread' is treated without 'the' when speaking generally. Commas are needed to separate items in a list and before the non-restrictive clause 'which is great'. Hyphenate 'whole-grain' as a compound adjective.

× When I was younger I really enjoyed eating pancakes with apples, mainly because my grandpa used to make them and all.

✓ When I was younger, I really enjoyed eating pancakes with apples, mainly because my grandpa used to make them.

Remove the colloquial filler 'and all' which is informal and unnecessary in a test response. Add a comma after the introductory clause. The past tense 'used to make' is correct.

× He always stopped them with a chocolate fetch or just a chocolate sprinkles which made my younger self really satisfied and thrilled.

✓ He always topped them with chocolate frosting or just chocolate sprinkles, which made my younger self really satisfied and thrilled.

'Stopped' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'topped' for adding a topping. 'Chocolate fetch' is not valid; likely 'frosting' or 'fudge' is intended. 'Sprinkles' is plural and should not have 'a' before it. Add a comma before the non-restrictive clause.

× My family is Christian so we celebrate different holidays such as Easter and Christmas and on Easter day, uh we eat for breakfast white borscht with sausages and eggs, boiled eggs and on Christmas we eat mainly fish.

✓ My family is Christian, so we celebrate different holidays such as Easter and Christmas. On Easter day we have white borscht with sausages and boiled eggs for breakfast, and at Christmas we mainly eat fish.

Use commas to separate clauses. 'Eat for breakfast' is less natural than 'have ... for breakfast'. Combine 'eggs, boiled eggs' into 'boiled eggs'. Use 'at Christmas' rather than 'on Christmas' for the general holiday.

× Yes, definitely. When I was younger I used to love pizza, but now I think that there is too much cheese which makes it too fatty and kind of disgusting.

✓ Yes, definitely. When I was younger I used to love pizza, but now I think there is too much cheese, which makes it too fatty and somewhat unappetizing.

Add a comma before the non-restrictive 'which' clause. 'Kind of disgusting' is informal; 'somewhat unappetizing' is more appropriate for a test. Tenses are otherwise correct.

× Now I prefer more nutritious meals that provides me a lot of protein and whole grain products which makes me feel full for a full day.

✓ Now I prefer more nutritious meals that provide me with a lot of protein and whole-grain products, which make me feel full for the whole day.

The relative clause 'that provide' must use plural verb 'provide' to agree with plural 'meals'. Add 'with' after 'provide' for correct collocation. 'Whole-grain' should be hyphenated. The second relative clause refers to plural 'products', so use 'make'. Replace 'for a full day' with 'for the whole day' for clarity.