Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Сократите повторения и сделайте ответ более структурированным: начните с общей фразы, затем добавьте одну-две конкретные причины и закончите коротким выводом. Избегайте запинок и неверного порядка слов, используйте связку для плавности (for example, because, so).

例: My favourite food is sushi because I like the balance of fresh fish and slightly vinegared rice. For example, I often choose salmon nigiri for its smooth texture and clean taste. I also think sushi is a healthy option, so I eat it regularly.

提案: Устраните повторы и неясные вставки, стройте ответ логично: тема — причина — пример. Добавьте уточнение времени или места и свяжите мысль союзами (because, although, so) для ясности.

例: When I was young I enjoyed eating burgers, especially from McDonald's, because I loved their juicy taste. Although I knew they were not very healthy, I ate them often as a treat. Now I rarely eat fast food.

提案: Сделайте ответ более чётким и избегайте лишних заполнителей. Начните с прямого 'Yes' или 'No', затем приведите конкретные примеры и объяснение, используя связки (for example, in summer, in winter).

例: Yes, I do. In summer I prefer cold dishes such as okroshka or salads because they are refreshing. In winter I like warm soups and stews to stay comfortable.

提案: Уберите повторы и говорите в прошедшем/настоящем времени последовательно. Дайте короткое сравнение вчера и сегодня и приведите конкретные примеры изменения привычек. Используйте связки (when, now, so) для логики.

例: Yes, it has. When I was a child I preferred unhealthy snacks like chips and sweets, but now I choose healthier options. For example, I often have smoothies and plenty of vegetables instead of sugary snacks.

× My favorite food is sushi because I really like the balance of fresh fish and the rice. I enjoyed both and I I eat usually not always but it I think it's healthy and very tasteful.

✓ My favorite food is sushi because I really like the balance of fresh fish and rice. I enjoy both; I don't always eat them, but I think they are healthy and very tasty.

The original contains repetition, wrong verb tenses and awkward word order. 'I enjoyed' (past) conflicts with present habitual preference; use 'I enjoy'. Remove the extra 'the' before 'rice' since rice is uncountable here. 'I I' is a repetition error. 'I eat usually not always but it' has incorrect adverb placement and structure; use 'I don't always eat them' or 'I don't always eat sushi'. 'Tasteful' is incorrect for food (means having good taste in style); use 'tasty'. Also change 'it...they are' agreement for plural 'fish and rice' to 'they are'. Suggestions: use present simple for habits, place adverbs before main verbs (usually I eat) or in negative form 'I don't always eat', avoid repetitions and use 'tasty' for food.

× When I was young, I really enjoyed eating burgers because I think it was I, I know, I know it was not healthy because but I really like the taste and I ate it in McDonald's. So they really taste tasty burgers.

✓ When I was young, I really enjoyed eating burgers because I knew they were not healthy, but I really liked the taste and I used to eat them at McDonald's. So the burgers tasted really good.

Mixing present and past tenses: 'I think it was' is incorrect for past-time reflection; use 'I knew they were not healthy'. Use past simple 'liked' and 'tasted' to match 'when I was young'. 'I ate it in McDonald's' is wrong: use 'I used to eat them at McDonald's' or 'I ate them at McDonald's'; 'it' should be 'them' (plural). 'So they really taste tasty burgers' is ungrammatical; correct to 'So the burgers tasted really good' and avoid 'tasty tasty' redundancy. Suggestions: keep consistent past tense for past events, use plural pronouns for plural nouns, and avoid repetitive words.

× Definitely yes, because uh, in, in the hot seasons, I enjoy eating umm, cold meals, uh, like Akroshka and uh, on this, on the whole cold seasons I like uh, it's warm.

✓ Definitely, because in the hot season I enjoy eating cold meals like okroshka, and during the cooler seasons I prefer warm dishes.

Preposition and phrase usage is incorrect: use 'in the hot season' or 'in hot weather' rather than 'in the hot seasons'. 'On this, on the whole cold seasons' is ungrammatical; use 'during the cooler seasons' or 'in cold seasons'. 'I like it's warm' is incorrect structure; use 'I prefer warm dishes'. Also 'Akroshka' spelling corrected to 'okroshka'. Suggestions: use 'in' or 'during' with seasons, keep parallel structure when comparing seasons, and use 'prefer' for general preferences.

× Actually, yes, when I was a child I really liked unhealthy food and now I become more, umm, I become more, uh, healthier and uh, uh, I'd like to choose more healthy food and uh, such as smoothies and vegetables.

✓ Actually, yes. When I was a child I really liked unhealthy food, and now I have become healthier and prefer to choose healthier foods, such as smoothies and vegetables.

Tense and verb choice errors: 'now I become more healthier' is incorrect; use present perfect 'I have become healthier' to show change from past to present. 'Become more healthier' is redundant (more + -er). 'I'd like to choose more healthy food' should be 'I prefer to choose healthier foods' or 'I like to choose healthier foods'; use comparative form 'healthier' not 'more healthy'. Also use plural 'foods' or 'food' consistently and include examples after a comma. Suggestions: use present perfect to describe changes over time, avoid double comparatives ('more healthier'), and use 'healthier' as adjective before nouns.