Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a short topic sentence saying your current favourite, then give one or two concise reasons or a brief contrast with the past. Avoid repetition and vague phrases. Use accurate vocabulary (e.g., 'boiled egg' or 'poached egg' rather than 'planting an egg') and keep answers within 2–4 sentences.

例: My favourite food now is fried rice. I like it because it has vegetables, is nutritious, and is quick to prepare. When I was younger I preferred boiled eggs, but my tastes changed as I tried different dishes.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence naming the foods, then briefly explain reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'but'). Use correct vocabulary and avoid unclear words like 'planting' or 'wheezing'. Keep it concise and coherent (2–3 sentences).

例: When I was young I mainly liked boiled and scrambled eggs because they were easy to make and nutritious. Later I started preferring noodles with vegetables because they tasted good and felt more filling.

提案: Answer directly, then give one or two clear seasonal examples using linking words (e.g., 'in spring', 'in summer'). Use accurate food names and avoid repetition. Be specific about why you choose those foods in different seasons (e.g., availability, temperature).

例: Yes. In spring I often eat fresh produce like boiled eggs and salads because it's planting season and vegetables are fresh. By mid-year, during the hot months, I prefer lighter snacks like fries or cold desserts because they are satisfying and easy to eat.

提案: Start with a clear statement that your favourite has changed, name the current favourite, then give 2–3 concise and specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'also'). Finish the sentence fully and avoid trailing off. Keep within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. Now I prefer fried rice because it includes vegetables, is nutritious, and is quick to prepare. I used to like eggs more when I was a child, but my tastes shifted as I tried more dishes.

× Well my my favorite food.

✓ Well, my favorite food depends on the situation.

The original is a sentence fragment and repeats 'my'. It lacks a main verb and does not answer the question. Suggest adding a verb phrase to form a complete sentence and remove the duplicated word. Use 'depends on the situation' to convey variability.

× When I was much younger I used to enjoy planting an egg,

✓ When I was much younger I used to enjoy poaching an egg,

'Planting an egg' is incorrect; likely the intended verb is 'poaching' or 'boiling' or 'frying'. 'Used to enjoy' correctly indicates a past habitual action. Replace the incorrect verb with the correct cooking verb.

× but now that I've gone older I've tried different dishes and I could not say half of a right food.

✓ but now that I'm older I've tried many different dishes and I could not name a single favourite.

'I've gone older' is awkward; use 'I'm older'. 'Could not say half of a right food' is ungrammatical and unclear. Replace with 'could not name a single favourite' to express inability to choose one favourite.

× But then I'll enjoy good food.

✓ But I still enjoy good food.

'I'll enjoy' (future) is inappropriate in context; the speaker means present habitual enjoyment. Use 'I still enjoy' for general present truth.

× OK, so I used to like planting and scrambled eggs, wheezing being that firstly it's very easy to make and because of the nutritional benefits that's why I liked it.

✓ OK, so I used to like poached and scrambled eggs; this was mainly because they are easy to make and nutritious.

Multiple problems: 'planting' should be 'poached' (or another cooking verb). 'Wheezing being that' is incorrect; use 'this was mainly because'. Tense and agreement: 'they are' refers to eggs generally. Remove redundant 'that's why'.

× But then at some point I preferred noodles with veggies.

✓ But then at some point I preferred noodles with vegetables.

Sentence is mostly correct; change informal 'veggies' to 'vegetables' for clarity and formality. 'Preferred' correctly indicates past preference.

× Umm, when the years just starting because it's always the season of planting.

✓ Umm, when the year is just starting it's the planting season.

Original has incorrect verb form 'years just starting' and sentence fragment. Use singular 'year' for the cycle and correct present tense 'is' to form a complete clause.

× I get to eat planting more.

✓ I get to eat poached eggs more often.

'Planting' is the wrong word; use the correct noun phrase 'poached eggs' and add 'more often' for natural English. Also correct article/numbering by specifying the food.

× And then by the time we get to half of the year, sometimes I just want to eat jello fries 'cause it's one of my favorite.

✓ And then by the middle of the year, sometimes I want to eat jollof rice because it's one of my favourites.

'Half of the year' is awkward; 'middle of the year' is natural. 'Jello fries' appears to be a misheard dish; likely 'jollof rice' (a common dish) fits context. Use 'because' instead of colloquial ''cause' and 'favourite' needs plural 'favourites' when saying 'one of my favourites'.

× Yes, it has, so many times and on different occasions.

✓ Yes, it has, many times and on different occasions.

Extra comma after 'has' is acceptable but 'so many times' is informal; remove 'so' for clarity. The sentence is short and acceptable after minor cleanup.

× Presently my favorite food is fried rice and I enjoy this because of the vegetables and because of the nutritional benefits of it and because it doesn't take so so much time to prepare and because of the.

✓ Currently my favourite food is fried rice; I enjoy it because of the vegetables, its nutritional benefits, and because it does not take much time to prepare.

Run-on sentence with repetition ('because of the' repeated, 'so so'). 'Presently' can mean 'soon' so 'currently' is clearer. Remove the trailing incomplete phrase and condense reasons into a clear list. Use 'it' for the food and avoid repetition.