Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with word choice and pronunciation errors (e.g., 'slightly injured rice' is incorrect). Give a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it concise (max 5 sentences). Use accurate adjectives for taste/texture, and avoid redundancy.

例: I love sushi, especially salmon sushi, because of the delicate balance between the fresh, buttery fish and the slightly vinegared rice. Also, I enjoy how the soy sauce and wasabi enhance the flavor, making it a refreshing and satisfying meal.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence and avoid filler phrases like 'Actually I don't remember' which reduce confidence. Use correct tense and article usage, and give specific reasons linked logically. Keep sentences short and organized with linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: When I was young, I liked sweets such as chocolate and brownies because they tasted rich and helped me relax after school. For example, I often had a chocolate bar as an after-school treat, which made me feel happier.

提案: Reduce hesitation words ('uh') and grammatical errors (e.g., 'eat the soup' -> 'eat soup'). Use linking words ('in winter,' 'in contrast,' 'for example') and be slightly more specific about dishes or reasons (warmth, refreshment). Keep it concise and natural.

例: Yes, I do. In winter I prefer hot dishes like soup or hot pot because they are warming and comforting, while in summer I choose refreshing fruits such as watermelon and mango to stay hydrated.

提案: Clarify your meaning and correct vocabulary and grammar ('changed sign' and 'competitive dishes' are incorrect). Use past tense for childhood and contrast with present using linking words ('but now', 'however'). Give specific examples of old and current favorites and reasons for the change.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed since childhood. When I was young I enjoyed simple sweets and fried snacks because they were tasty and convenient, but now I prefer healthier dishes such as grilled fish and a variety of vegetables because I care more about nutrition.

× My favorite food is sushi, especially salmon because I love the delicate balance of fresh fish and slightly injured rice.

✓ My favorite food is sushi, especially salmon, because I love the delicate balance of fresh fish and slightly vinegared rice.

The original uses 'injured rice' which is incorrect word choice. The correct term is 'vinegared rice' for sushi; this is an adjective issue (13). Use precise vocabulary: 'vinegared' describes rice prepared with vinegar for sushi.

× Actually I don't remember but I think when I was young I like it, a dessert like chocolate or brownie because it's dessert can make me more relaxed and reduce my stress. So I think yes.

✓ Actually I don't remember, but I think when I was young I liked desserts like chocolate or brownies because desserts could make me more relaxed and reduce my stress, so I think yes.

Multiple tense and article errors. 'I like' should be past 'I liked' to match 'when I was young' (6). 'a dessert like chocolate or brownie' should be plural 'desserts like chocolate or brownies' and 'it's dessert can' is ungrammatical; use 'desserts could' for past ability. This fixes present tense misuse and article/number issues (6,1,22).

× Definitely, uh, but it depends on the different season. Uh, in winter I like uh, eat the soup or the hot pot. In summer I really like the, uh, watermelon or mango.

✓ Definitely, but it depends on the season. In winter I like to eat soup or hot pot. In summer I really like watermelon or mangoes.

Errors: 'the different season' should be 'the season' or 'different seasons' (11/22). 'I like eat' requires infinitive 'to eat' (8). Articles: 'the soup' and 'the hot pot' can be 'soup' and 'hot pot' in general reference; 'watermelon or mango' should be plural 'mangoes' when talking generally (22,1,8).

× Yes, my favorite food has changed sign and since I was a child. When I was young I love simple sweet and uh fried snack uh, mainly because of their taste and convenience. But now I prefer have more competitive dishes like uh cela or vegetable.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child. When I was young I loved simple sweets and fried snacks, mainly because of their taste and convenience. But now I prefer more complex dishes like seafood or vegetables.

Multiple issues: 'has changed sign and since' is ungrammatical and should be 'has changed since' (26). Tense: 'I love' should be past 'I loved' to match 'when I was young' (6). Number and noun forms: 'simple sweet' -> 'simple sweets'; 'fried snack' -> 'fried snacks' (1). 'prefer have' needs 'prefer' + noun or 'prefer to have' but better 'prefer more complex dishes' (8/26). 'competitive dishes like cela or vegetable' contains wrong word choices: likely meant 'seafood or vegetables'; corrected vocabulary (13).