Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with natural phrasing and minor word choice errors. Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences) and use clear linking words. Replace awkward phrases (e.g., “go for hot water”) with accurate expressions and add one specific detail about ingredients or a memorable moment to make the description more vivid.

例: My favourite food is Sichuan hot pot because it’s spicy and full of bold flavours, and it always creates a warm, social atmosphere. For example, I go for hot pot with friends every weekend; we choose a variety of ingredients such as thinly sliced beef, tofu, and leafy greens, and share stories while cooking at the table.

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and natural collocations, and avoid informal fillers. Use past simple consistently for childhood habits, and replace awkward phrases (“crispy eats as the food”, “finished the fried chicken 1st”) with clear expressions. Add a linking phrase to explain consequences or a brief reflection to enrich the answer.

例: When I was young, I was crazy about fried foods such as French fries and fried chicken. Because I loved the crispy texture, I didn’t pay attention to a balanced diet, so my parents often had to persuade me to eat vegetables before I could finish my fried chicken.

提案: Work on grammar and word choice (e.g., “soothe the weather better”, “embrace the pork” are unnatural). Use linking words to contrast seasons and give one specific example of a seasonal dish or why it suits the season. Keep sentences concise and precise.

例: Yes, I change what I eat with the seasons because seasonal foods are fresher and suit the weather. For instance, in summer I often eat cold noodles and watermelon to cool down, whereas in winter I prefer hot pot with fatty cuts of pork to keep warm.

提案: Good structure and clarity, but avoid absolute statements that may sound exaggerated (e.g., “every day”). Use linking words to show change (e.g., “however”, “as a result”) and add a brief specific example of a healthier dish you now enjoy to make the answer more concrete.

例: Yes, it has changed a lot. As I grew older, I became more health-conscious, so I started eating more vegetables and balancing my meals; for example, I now enjoy stir-fried spinach with garlic and grilled salmon instead of fried snacks.

× For example, I often go for hot water with my friends on weekends.

✓ For example, I often go for hot pot with my friends on weekends.

The student used 'hot water' which is incorrect for the context; the intended noun is 'hot pot' (a type of meal). This is a word choice error related to prepositions and collocations. Replace 'hot water' with 'hot pot' to match the intended meaning and common collocation.

× We sit around the table, include different ingredients, and enjoy the lively atmosphere together.

✓ We sit around the table, include different ingredients, and enjoy the lively atmosphere together.

The sentence is slightly awkward: 'include different ingredients' is not the natural way to express that participants put ingredients into the pot. A clearer correction (not changing grammar problem type list requirement) would be 'we sit around the table, add different ingredients, and enjoy the lively atmosphere together.' Use 'add' instead of 'include' because 'add' correctly collocates with ingredients in this context.

× When I was young I was crazy about fried food like French fries and fried chicken.

✓ When I was young, I was crazy about fried food like French fries and fried chicken.

This sentence is grammatically correct in tense, but missing a comma after the introductory clause. Adding the comma improves sentence clarity. The issue is punctuation related to the past-tense clause.

× Like many children, I prefer the crispy eats as the food and didn't care about a balanced diet.

✓ Like many children, I preferred crispy foods and didn't care about a balanced diet.

The original mixes present-tense 'prefer' with past-tense 'didn't care' and uses awkward phrases 'the crispy eats as the food.' Change to past tense 'preferred' to match 'didn't care' and use 'crispy foods' as the correct noun phrase. This fixes tense inconsistency and pronoun/phrase misuse.

× My parents would always have to force me to eat vegetables while I finished the fried chicken 1st.

✓ My parents would always have to force me to eat vegetables while I finished the fried chicken first.

Using '1st' is informal and incorrect in narrative text. Spell out 'first.' This corrects the adverbial ordinal form. Also the sentence is past habitual; 'would always have to' is acceptable.

× I think seasonal food tastes fresher and soothe the weather better.

✓ I think seasonal food tastes fresher and suits the weather better.

'soothe the weather' is incorrect collocation. The intended meaning is that seasonal food 'suits' or 'matches' the weather. Replace 'soothe' with 'suits' to convey appropriate meaning.

× In summer I eat cold noodles and watermelon to cool down, while in winter I enjoy hot pot and embrace the pork to keep warm.

✓ In summer I eat cold noodles and watermelon to cool down, while in winter I enjoy hot pot and eat pork to keep warm.

The phrase 'embrace the pork' is incorrect; 'embrace' isn't used to mean 'eat.' Replace with 'eat pork.' No definite article is needed before 'pork' here. This corrects verb choice and article usage.

× As I grew older I started to care more about health, so I began to enjoy vegetables and balance the meals.

✓ As I grew older, I started to care more about my health, so I began to enjoy vegetables and balance my meals.

Add commas after the introductory clause. Use 'my health' and 'my meals' for natural possessive reference. 'Balance the meals' is awkward; 'balance my meals' is clearer.

× Now I eat spinach and carrots every day, unlike when I was a child and only wanted fried food.

✓ Now I eat spinach and carrots every day, unlike when I was a child, when I only wanted fried food.

Add a comma after 'child' and repeat 'when' or restructure to clarify contrast. This improves sentence clarity and preserves correct present and past tense usage.