Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity and grammar, give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details with correct tense. Avoid repetition and filler words. Use linking words to connect ideas (e.g., 'because', 'so', 'nowadays').

例: My favourite foods are dumplings and spaghetti. I loved them as a child but couldn't eat them often; now I can cook both dishes myself, so I enjoy making and eating them regularly.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct past tense usage, and expand with one specific example and a reason. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example'.

例: When I was young, I really liked spicy food because it made meals exciting and energetic. For example, I often ate spicy curry and achar in Nepal, although I know now that too much spice can be unhealthy.

提案: Answer directly and mention specific seasons or festivals. Use present simple for general habits and give a concrete example of seasonal foods. Avoid fragmented sentences and repetition.

例: Yes, I eat different foods at certain times of the year, especially during festivals. For example, during Dashain and Tihar we prepare many special dishes, including sweet desserts and spicy meat dishes that we only make for celebrations.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and improve grammar and word choice. Explain why the food remains favourite with specific cultural or personal reasons. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed because I have always loved Dal Bhat Tarkari. It is a traditional Nepali meal that reminds me of home, so I still eat it often and prefer it over other dishes.

× When I was in child I cannot eat there as much as I want.

✓ When I was a child, I could not eat there as much as I wanted.

Mixes tense and 'there be' structure; primary problems are incorrect article with 'child' and wrong modal/tense. Use 'a child' and past ability 'could not' with past desire 'wanted' to match past time frame. Suggestion: Use 'When I was a child, I could not...' and keep verbs in past tense.

× But nowadays I lo I I'm being able to cook dumplings and spaghetti.

✓ But nowadays I am able to cook dumplings and spaghetti.

Unnecessary filler words and incorrect progressive form 'I'm being able'. Use simple present 'am able' to describe current ability. Remove stutters 'lo I'. Suggestion: Say 'Nowadays I am able to...' for present abilities.

× That's why I love cook and eat dumplings and spaghetti.

✓ That's why I love to cook and eat dumplings and spaghetti.

After 'love' use infinitive 'to cook' or gerund 'cooking'. The sentence omitted 'to' before 'cook'. Use parallel structure: 'to cook and eat' or 'cooking and eating'. Suggestion: Use 'love to cook and eat' or 'love cooking and eating'.

× When I was young, I loved or spicy spicy food because it gives me a lot of energy.

✓ When I was young, I loved spicy food because it gave me a lot of energy.

Mixed tenses and extraneous word 'or' and repeated 'spicy'. In past time frame, use past tense 'gave' not present 'gives'. Remove duplicates and extras. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent: 'loved... gave'.

× I I know it's bad for health, but when I was young, I I eat a lot of spicy things in Nepal.

✓ I know it's bad for my health, but when I was young, I ate a lot of spicy food in Nepal.

Repeated 'I', missing possessive 'my', and wrong tense 'eat' should be past 'ate' to match 'when I was young'. Use 'spicy food' rather than 'things'. Suggestion: Use 'I know it's bad for my health, but when I was young I ate a lot of spicy food in Nepal.'.

× There are a lot of spicy things in Nepal and I would.

✓ There are a lot of spicy dishes in Nepal, and I used to eat them a lot.

Sentence fragment 'and I would' is incomplete. Replace with clear past-habit expression 'used to eat them'. Use 'dishes' instead of 'things' for food. Suggestion: Complete the clause: 'and I used to eat them a lot.'.

× Yes, I ate when when we have a special days like Dosa Etihad, there are a lot of good, a lot of spicy and sweet things, which is a really we cooked and.

✓ Yes, I eat them when we have special days like Dasain; there are many spicy and sweet dishes that we cook.

Mix of past and present tenses, repeated words, wrong festival name 'Dosa Etihad', and sentence fragment. Use present habitual 'I eat them when...' if describing recurring events. Replace 'a lot of good' with 'many', and fix clause to 'that we cook'. Suggestion: Use consistent tense for habits: 'I eat them when we have special days like Dasain; there are many spicy and sweet dishes that we cook.'.

× No because I always love eat Dalwat Tarkari and I till now I used to eat Dalvatar Curry because it is out next a traditional food and this is a worldwide famous cuisine.

✓ No, because I have always loved eating Dal Bhat Tarkari, and even now I eat Dal Bhat Curry because it is our traditional food and it is a world-famous cuisine.

Tense and form errors: 'always love eat' should be 'have always loved eating' or 'always loved eating'. 'Till now I used to' is contradictory; use 'even now I eat'. Spelling errors 'Dalwat/Dalvatar/Dalbhatar'; use consistent 'Dal Bhat'. 'out next a' is incorrect—use 'our traditional'. Suggestion: Use present perfect for long-duration preferences and simple present for current habit: 'I have always loved eating Dal Bhat Tarkari, and I still eat it now.'.

× That's why I love Dalbhatar Curry and I could never change this food.

✓ That's why I love Dal Bhat Curry and I could never change my preference for this food.

'Could never change this food' is awkward; intended meaning is inability to change preference. Add 'my preference for' to clarify. Also maintain consistent dish name 'Dal Bhat Curry'. Suggestion: Say 'I could never change my preference for this food' or 'I could never stop loving this food.'.