Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more specific and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct verb forms and articles, and add one brief detail (flavour or name). Keep to under five sentences and use a linking word if adding extra information.

例: My favourite food is a traditional Arabic dish called kabsa, which contains rice, chicken and vegetables. I often eat it with my family and sometimes with friends, especially at celebrations.

提案: Improve grammar (past tense and articles), remove fillers and be concise. Give a topic sentence, then one linked detail such as why you liked it or a memory. Use a linking word (for example 'because' or 'then').

例: When I was a child, I usually liked a homemade chicken and vegetable soup that my mother made. Because it tasted comforting and warm, I kept eating it until I started eating rice regularly at about seven years old.

提案: Clarify timeline and improve sentence structure. Use correct verb forms (e.g. 'study' → 'studied' or 'I study' with consistency) and avoid unclear words ('piranha'). Provide a clear contrast with linking words such as 'when' and 'however'.

例: Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, when I am home in Kuwait I usually eat Arabic dishes, but when I am in the UK I often have an English breakfast with eggs and toast.

提案: Organise the answer: give a direct topic sentence then explain reasons clearly and concisely. Fix grammar (present perfect, articles) and vocabulary (rice, taste). Avoid repetition and hesitations. Provide one clear reason and a short result sentence.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. The rice used in the dishes in my hometown has changed suppliers, so the flavour and texture are different now and I no longer enjoy it as much as I did before.

× My favorite food is an Arabic dish that contain rice, chicken and also vegetable.

✓ My favourite food is an Arabic dish that contains rice, chicken and vegetables.

The verb-subject agreement requires 'contains' for the singular noun 'dish' (subject-verb agreement). 'Vegetable' should be plural 'vegetables' because it refers to more than one type or portion. Use 'favourite' for UK English spelling. Suggested improvement: Ensure verbs agree with their subjects and use plural nouns when referring to multiple items.

× I usually eat this with my friend and my family.

✓ I usually eat it with my friends and my family.

The pronoun 'this' is better as 'it' to refer back to 'dish'. 'Friend' should be plural 'friends' if speaking about more than one friend; if only one friend, rephrase to 'a friend'. Suggested improvement: Match pronouns to the nouns they replace and use singular/plural consistently.

× When I was child, my mother usually give me, give me an, uh, soup that's contain vegetable and chicken.

✓ When I was a child, my mother usually gave me a soup that contained vegetables and chicken.

'a child' needs the article 'a'. The verb should be past tense 'gave' because the time is in the past. 'Contain' must be past tense 'contained' to match. 'Vegetable' should be plural 'vegetables'. Use 'a soup' (no extra article 'an' before 'uh' is needed). Suggested improvement: Use appropriate articles before singular countable nouns and keep verb tenses consistent with the time reference.

× Uh, you really, uh, like it.

✓ I really liked it.

The speaker is referring to their own past feeling, so the pronoun should be 'I' and the verb should be past tense 'liked' to match the previous past context. Suggested improvement: Keep pronouns consistent with the subject and match verb tense to the time frame.

× Then I start to eat rice when I was, uh, seven years old.

✓ Then I started to eat rice when I was seven years old.

The action happened in the past, so the past tense 'started' should be used rather than 'start'. Suggested improvement: Use past simple for completed actions at a specific time in the past.

× Actually yes, because I study abroad in the UK and when I back to my home I eat an Arabic food and then when I back to United Kingdom I eat English breakfast and some eggs.

✓ Actually yes. I studied abroad in the UK, and when I was back home I ate Arabic food. When I returned to the United Kingdom I ate English breakfasts and eggs.

The speaker refers to past study abroad so past tense 'studied' is required. 'When I back to my home' must be 'when I was back home' or 'when I returned home' and verbs should be past 'ate'. 'An Arabic food' is incorrect: use 'Arabic food' or 'an Arabic dish'. 'United Kingdom' needs the article 'the' when used with 'returned to the United Kingdom' in this context. 'English breakfast' can be plural 'English breakfasts' if speaking of multiple occasions. Suggested improvement: Use past tense consistently for past experiences and correct article use for country names when needed.

× So I usually eat a different kind of food and piranha.

✓ So I usually eat different kinds of food and fish.

'A different kind of food and piranha' is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Piranha' is likely a mistake for 'paratha' (a South Asian flatbread) or 'fish'. If the intended word is 'paratha', write 'paratha' and treat it as a noun; if 'fish', use 'fish'. Also pluralise 'different kinds' to match the general statement. Suggested improvement: Choose the correct vocabulary and structure the noun phrase correctly: 'different kinds of food and [item]'. Clarify intended food name.

× Yes, because, yes, because the company that's make uh, the rice in Kuwait, uh, has have a different owner and the owner they pay a rise from the Indian was changed and he pay in the Egypt.

✓ Yes. The company that makes the rice in Kuwait has a different owner, and the owner changed the rice supplier from India to Egypt.

Use present simple 'makes' for a habitual or general fact, and present perfect 'has' + past participle is not needed here; 'has have' is incorrect duplication. 'They pay a rise from the Indian was changed and he pay in the Egypt' is ungrammatical and unclear. Correct structure: 'the owner changed the rice supplier from India to Egypt' uses past simple 'changed' for the action. Country names do not need 'the' before 'Egypt' in this context; use 'from India to Egypt'. Suggested improvement: Avoid doubling auxiliary verbs, ensure subject-verb agreement, and express changes of state with clear verbs like 'changed' and 'changed the supplier from X to Y'.

× So the rise it's changed and the completely different the test and the rice material.

✓ So the rice has changed and the taste and the rice quality are completely different.

'Rise' is a spelling mistake for 'rice'. 'It's changed' is informal but could be 'has changed'; better: 'the rice has changed'. 'The completely different the test' is ungrammatical; 'taste' is the intended word. 'Rice material' should be 'rice quality' or 'the type of rice'. Use plural 'are' to agree with 'taste and quality'. Suggested improvement: Check spelling for key words, use correct noun choices ('taste' not 'test'), and ensure verb agreement for compound subjects.