Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence naming your favourite food, then give one or two specific reasons or brief details (e.g., taste, memories, or when you eat it). Use linking words to connect ideas and reduce hesitations and filler words.

例: I enjoy many types of food, but my favourite is pizza because it’s comforting and easy to share with friends. For example, I often order a margherita pizza when I watch movies with friends, which makes it feel special.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then specific, coherent supporting details. Avoid repetition and unclear words. Mention one or two distinct dishes and explain why you liked them (taste, family memories). Use linking words (for example, because, so) and pronounce dish names clearly.

例: When I was young, I loved my parents’ homemade meals because they were fresh and comforting. For instance, I often ate steamed rice with curried vegetables and a side of yogurt, which reminded me of family dinners.

提案: Be specific about seasonal changes or occasions when you change food, and avoid general statements. If you mean trying international cuisines rather than seasonal food, say so and give a clear example with brief detail (where, what dish, why you liked it). Use one or two linking words to structure the response.

例: Yes, I try different cuisines throughout the year, especially at festivals or when I travel. For example, last winter I tried a spicy Chinese hot and sour soup at a well-known restaurant in Vancouver, and I liked it because it was warming and full of flavor.

提案: Answer directly and give clear reasons for the change with one or two supporting details. Avoid filler words and repetition. Use linking words (for example, however, because) to make the contrast clear between past and present habits.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I ate a lot of fast food because it was convenient and tasty; however, now I prefer healthier meals like grilled fish and salads because I want to stay fit and have more energy.

× I would like to mention that I'm a foodie person, so I love to eat every food.

✓ I would like to mention that I'm a foodie, so I love to eat all kinds of food.

'Foodie person' is awkward; 'foodie' as a noun is sufficient. 'Every food' is incorrect; use 'all kinds of food' to refer to many types. Use concise adjective form and correct quantifier.

× I love to eat every, every kind of food, whether it's fast food, whether it's a healthy food, I love eating every kind of food.

✓ I love to eat every kind of food, whether it's fast food or healthy food.

Reduce repetition and use parallel conjunction 'or' not repeated 'whether'. 'A healthy food' is incorrect — use 'healthy food' without an article.

× But moreover, pizza, pizza and burger is one of my, uh, favorite food.

✓ But moreover, pizza and burgers are some of my favorite foods.

Subject-verb agreement: compound subject 'pizza and burgers' requires plural verb 'are'. 'One of my favorite food' is wrong — use plural 'foods' or 'one of my favorite foods' if singular item. Also 'pizza, pizza and burger' was repetitive; corrected to natural phrasing.

× It's my comfort food.

✓ It's my comfort food.

Sentence is grammatical; no change needed. Included for completeness but could be left as original.

× When I was young, I, I loved simply eating like homemade home cooked meals, which made my my mother or dad mother because I really love their handmade food and homemade food as well.

✓ When I was young, I loved simply eating homemade, home-cooked meals that my mother or father made because I really loved their handmade, homemade food.

Verb tense consistency: use past tense 'loved' to match 'When I was young'. Fix word order and repetition: 'homemade home cooked' -> 'homemade, home-cooked'. 'which made my my mother or dad mother' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'that my mother or father made'.

× So so most of the times I love eating umm steamed rice with the with with the heat Adika the heat is a yogurt so they.

✓ Most of the time, I loved eating steamed rice with yogurt.

The original has many disfluencies and unclear phrases. Use 'most of the time' (singular) not 'most of the times'. Keep past tense 'loved'. Remove unclear words like 'heat Adika' and simplify to 'with yogurt'.

× Yeah, most of the times I, I love to eat like different foods, like from different countries most of the times in the year, because I am a foodie person.

✓ Most of the time, I love to eat foods from different countries during the year because I am a foodie.

'Most of the times' should be 'most of the time'. Remove filler 'like' and redundant phrases. 'During the year' is clearer than repeating 'most of the times in the year'.

× So I love to explore food.

✓ So I love to explore different cuisines.

'Explore food' is awkward; use 'explore different cuisines' for natural expression.

× Like last time I I ate, I ate Chinese, Chinese soup from a Chinese, uh, famous restaurant in Vancouver and that was really yummy.

✓ For example, last time I ate Chinese soup at a famous Chinese restaurant in Vancouver, and it was really delicious.

Remove repetition and use past tense 'ate' consistently. Use 'at a famous Chinese restaurant' rather than 'from a ... restaurant'. Use 'delicious' instead of colloquial 'yummy' for clearer speech.

× Yes, of course, my favorite food like has been changed from my child because when I was child, I usually love to eat fast food a lot, a lot, which is quite unhealthy sometimes for a child, of course.

✓ Yes, of course, my favourite food has changed since I was a child because when I was young I usually loved to eat a lot of fast food, which is quite unhealthy for a child.

Use 'has changed' (present perfect) with 'since I was a child' or simple past 'changed'. 'From my child' is incorrect; use 'since I was a child'. Maintain tense consistency: 'usually loved' in past. Remove repetition 'a lot, a lot'.

× But now as I grew, I grew older, so I now I change eating my uh, eating habits.

✓ But now that I have grown older, I have changed my eating habits.

Use present perfect 'have grown' and 'have changed' to show change up to now. Remove repetition 'I grew, I grew older' and unnecessary fillers. 'Change eating my eating habits' is ungrammatical; correct to 'changed my eating habits'.

× Now I try to eat healthy as much as I can.

✓ Now I try to eat healthily as much as I can.

'Eat healthy' is common in speech but 'eat healthily' is the adverbial form describing how you eat. Alternatively 'eat healthy foods' is acceptable. Use 'as much as I can' is fine.