Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, correct grammar (use singular/plural and articles), and give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Aim for 2–3 well-formed sentences and use descriptive but natural vocabulary.

例: My favourite food is fried potatoes because I love their crispy texture and salty flavour. In addition, they are easy to find and I often enjoy them with different sauces, which makes them even more enjoyable.

提案: Provide a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence about past preference, use contrasting linking words (e.g., but, however) to show change, and give specific examples of foods you liked or disliked. Eliminate hesitations and incorrect words (e.g., "soups" instead of "soaps").

例: When I was young, I mainly ate fried foods such as chips and fried chicken because my parents often prepared them. However, I did not like vegetables or soups at that time, but now I enjoy a wider variety of dishes including salads and broths.

提案: Answer directly, then give specific seasonal examples and use linking words (because, for example, in spring). Correct grammar (plural forms, possessive "its") and avoid filler words. Mention particular dishes, fruits or vegetables for different seasons to be more vivid.

例: Yes, I eat different foods throughout the year because each season brings specific produce. For example, in summer I enjoy fresh peaches and tomatoes, while in winter I prefer hearty soups and root vegetables such as carrots and potatoes.

提案: Give a clear direct answer, correct grammar ("No, it hasn't" or "No, my favourite food hasn't changed"), and add one brief reason or contrast to show development. Avoid repetition and wrong word forms.

例: No, my favourite food hasn't changed since I was a child; I still love fried potatoes because they are comforting and tasty. Although my diet now includes more variety, potatoes remain my top choice.

× My favorite food is fried potatoes. Umm, I love because it has a very umm uh, good taste.

✓ My favorite food is fried potatoes because they have a very good taste.

The original contains filler words and a sentence fragment 'I love because...' which lacks an object; also 'fried potatoes' is plural so use 'they' and plural verb 'have'. Combine into one clear sentence without fillers to improve coherence. Suggestion: remove fillers ('umm', 'uh'), ensure the clause after 'because' completes the reason, and match plural subject with plural pronoun and verb.

× And uh, I overall like scrumptious uh, dishes uh, but potatoes is for me, more favors than other.

✓ Overall I like scrumptious dishes, but potatoes are more to my taste than other foods.

Original has subject-verb agreement error: 'potatoes is' should be 'potatoes are'. 'More favors than other' is ungrammatical; use 'more to my taste than other foods'. Also remove fillers and fix word order for natural English. Suggestion: use plural verb with plural noun, replace awkward phrase with idiomatic expression 'more to my taste'.

× When I was a young, uh, I used to eat only, uh, fried, uh, dishes.

✓ When I was young, I used to eat only fried dishes.

Use 'when I was young' without the article 'a'. Also remove commas and fillers. 'Fried dishes' is a natural noun phrase; keep word order simple. Suggestion: omit unnecessary article and fillers.

× I did not like, uh, the soaps in the same kind of, uh, dishes, uh, But nowadays for me, uh, it's uh, nice to meet and uh, I can eat everything.

✓ I did not like soups of the same kind, but nowadays I enjoy many kinds of food and can eat almost everything.

Original has 'soaps' (spelling) and awkward phrasing 'the soaps in the same kind of dishes'. Use 'soups' and 'soups of the same kind'. 'Nice to meet' is incorrect; replace with 'enjoy'. Also fix capitalization after comma. Remove fillers. Suggestion: correct vocabulary ('soups'), simplify clauses, and use appropriate verbs ('enjoy').

× Yes, I eat a different, uh, foods at different times of year, uh, because in our country there are Four Seasons and uh, it's umm, each season, umm, has it's uh, uh, spectacular dishes and also vegetables and fruits and umm, I have a possibility to eat.

✓ Yes, I eat different foods at different times of the year because our country has four seasons and each season has its own special dishes, vegetables, and fruits that I can eat.

Original mixes singular and plural: 'a different foods' is wrong; use 'different foods'. 'There are Four Seasons' is acceptable but 'our country has four seasons' is more natural; 'it's each season has it's spectacular dishes' contains incorrect contraction 'it's' (it is) instead of possessive 'its' and unnecessary fillers. 'I have a possibility to eat' is unnatural; use 'that I can eat'. Suggestion: correct quantifiers and articles, use 'its' for possession, remove fillers, and use natural phrasing 'that I can eat'.

× No no, when I was child my favorite food was fried potatoes and now that nowadays also pride potato is my favorable dishes.

✓ No, when I was a child my favorite food was fried potatoes, and even now fried potatoes are my favorite dish.

Original misses article 'a' before 'child' and contains many errors: 'now that nowadays also pride potato is my favorable dishes' is ungrammatical. Use 'when I was a child'. 'Fried potatoes' (plural) require plural verb 'are' and singular 'favorite dish' or keep plural 'favorite food'. Replace 'pride potato' with 'fried potatoes' and 'favorable dishes' with 'favorite dish' or 'favorite food'. Suggestion: include necessary articles, correct vocabulary, and ensure subject-verb agreement and consistent nouns.