Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp, phát âm và dùng từ chính xác; trả lời ngắn gọn, tự nhiên (1–3 câu), nêu lý do cụ thể và ví dụ. Tránh lỗi lặp từ và từ sai (ví dụ dùng “disease” thay vì “dish”), và hoàn chỉnh câu bị ngắt quãng.

例: My favourite food is fried chicken because it tastes crispy and flavorful. I often eat it as a quick meal since there are many shops near my home.

提案: Cần phát âm rõ ràng, dùng thì quá khứ chính xác và câu dễ hiểu. Tránh từ không đúng (ví dụ “juncture”, “Almighty”) và đưa chi tiết cụ thể về loại mì hoặc vì sao thích. Giữ tối đa 3 câu tự nhiên.

例: When I was young, I loved eating noodle soup because it was warm and comforting. My parents often made it for me after school, so it felt like a treat.

提案: Câu trả lời có ý rõ ràng nhưng cần sửa ngữ pháp (plural/singular, thì), dùng từ cụ thể và nối mạch bằng linking words. Viết 2–3 câu, nêu ví dụ cụ thể và giải thích ngắn gọn.

例: Yes, I do. For example, in summer I prefer cold dishes like salads or iced drinks to cool down, while in winter I choose hot soups and stews to keep warm.

提案: Cần dùng thì phù hợp (past vs present), cấu trúc câu rõ ràng và cụ thể về thay đổi. Hạn chế lỗi như “has a big chance” — nên nói “has changed a lot” hoặc “has changed”. Giữ 2–3 câu và giải thích lý do cụ thể.

例: Yes, it has changed a lot. As a child I often ate noodles because they were convenient, but now I avoid them sometimes because I think they are less healthy.

× One of my favorite food is is fried chicken.

✓ One of my favorite foods is fried chicken.

The phrase 'one of my favorite' requires a plural noun after 'of' (favorite foods) because it refers to one item from a group; also duplicate 'is' should be removed. Suggestion: use 'One of my favorite foods is...'.

× I really love this one because it is such a really delicious disease for me every meal and I can buy it anywhere because it.

✓ I really love it because it is so delicious for me at every meal and I can buy it anywhere.

'Such a really delicious disease' is incorrect word choice and word order. 'Such' + noun requires correct noun; 'disease' is wrong word. Use 'so delicious' or 'really delicious'. Also 'for me every meal' should be 'for me at every meal'. Remove trailing 'because it.' Suggestion: replace with 'I really love it because it is so delicious for me at every meal and I can buy it anywhere.'

× And when I still a juncture, I love eating noodles and I really love the One is Almighty because it's really fit my my mood and my hobby is it?

✓ When I was younger, I loved eating noodles; they really suited my mood and hobby.

Original sentence has incorrect phrase 'still a juncture', wrong tense and pronoun use. Use past tense 'was younger' for childhood. 'The One is Almighty' is nonsensical; likely means 'they suited me' so use 'they suited my mood and hobbies.' Remove redundant words and fix subject agreement. Suggestion: 'When I was younger, I loved eating noodles because they suited my mood and hobbies.'

× Yes, of course, because there are different food at different time of a year.

✓ Yes, of course, because there are different foods at different times of the year.

Use plural 'foods' and 'times' when speaking generally. Also include definite article 'the year'. Suggestion: 'there are different foods at different times of the year.'

× Such as in the summer I often eat a cool food to reduce my temperature, but in the winter I prefer hot 1 because it's make me feel better.

✓ For example, in the summer I often eat cold foods to reduce my temperature, but in the winter I prefer hot ones because they make me feel better.

Use 'For example' instead of 'Such as' at sentence start; 'cool food' should be 'cold foods' (plural) and 'hot 1' seems to be a typo—use 'hot ones.' Subject-verb agreement: 'they make' not 'it's make'. Suggestion: 'in the summer I often eat cold foods... in the winter I prefer hot ones because they make me feel better.'

× I think it has a big chance.

✓ I think it has changed a lot.

'Has a big chance' is ungrammatical for expressing change over time. Use 'has changed a lot' to indicate change in preference. Suggestion: 'I think it has changed a lot.'

× For example, when I am still child I would like to eat noodle because it's very convenient and it is one of my favorite food at the time.

✓ For example, when I was a child I liked to eat noodles because they were very convenient and one of my favorite foods at the time.

Use past tense 'was' and 'liked' for past habits. Use plural 'noodles' and 'foods'. 'Would like' is inappropriate for past habitual; use 'liked' or 'used to'. Suggestion: 'When I was a child I liked to eat noodles because they were very convenient and one of my favorite foods.'

× But when I am older I find it unhealthy for me and I change it.

✓ But when I became older I found them unhealthy for me and I changed my preference.

Mixing tenses: use past 'became' and 'found' to match the past context. 'It' should refer to 'noodles' so use 'them' (plural), and 'I changed it' is vague—say 'I changed my preference.' Suggestion: 'When I became older I found them unhealthy and I changed my preference.'