Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), correct place names and possessives, and give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Keep it under five sentences.

例: My favourite food is rendang, a spicy beef dish from Padang in North Sumatra. I love it because it has a rich, complex blend of spices and tender meat that soaks up the sauce. For example, the coconut milk and lemongrass create a deep, aromatic flavour that I find irresistible.

提案: Answer directly and vary phrasing to avoid repetition. Use a clear past or present perfect structure when talking about childhood, and give a brief supporting detail or anecdote. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I have always liked rendang since I was a child. Because of its complex mix of spices and tender texture, it was my favourite at family gatherings, especially during festivals when my mother cooked it for everyone.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be more fluent and concise. Avoid small grammar errors and redundant phrases. Use a linking phrase to introduce examples and keep sentences shorter.

例: Yes, I usually vary my meals because I dislike eating the same thing every day. For example, I might have instant noodles one day, ketupat the next, and soto the following day, so my diet stays interesting.

提案: Avoid repetition and tighten the response. State clearly whether it has changed, then give one specific reason. Correct small grammar issues and use linking words for clarity.

例: No, my favourite food has not changed; it has always been rendang. I still love it because of its rich spices and deep flavour, which remind me of family celebrations and traditional cooking.

× My favorite food, it will be Rendang.

✓ My favorite food is Rendang.

The speaker is stating a current preference, so use present simple, not future 'will'. Replace 'it will be' with 'is' to express a general truth or habitual preference.

× Rendang is a food came from uh, Padang in Sumatra Uttara and their food is very delicious and very tasty when you taste it.

✓ Rendang is a food that comes from Padang in North Sumatra, and the local food there is very delicious.

Use a relative clause 'that comes from' instead of 'came from' to describe origin in present tense. 'Sumatra Uttara' should be 'North Sumatra'. 'Their food' is vague; 'the local food there' is clearer. Avoid redundant 'very delicious and very tasty when you taste it'.

× It's more than one flavor to eat.

✓ It has more than one flavor.

The original is unidiomatic. Use 'has' to indicate the dish contains multiple flavors. 'To eat' is unnecessary.

× So whenever.

✓ (Omit fragment)

'So whenever.' is an incomplete sentence fragment. Either complete the thought (e.g., 'So whenever I eat it, I enjoy it.') or remove it.

× I think it's always been renowned because rendang is one of the kind.

✓ I think it has always been renowned because rendang is one of a kind.

Use present perfect 'has always been' for an ongoing reputation. 'One of the kind' is incorrect; idiomatically 'one of a kind' means unique.

× You cannot replace them with anything else because the taste of rendang is mixed of the complexity of spice and flavour, and the taste is not replaceable.

✓ You cannot replace it with anything else because the taste of rendang is a complex mix of spices and flavors, and that taste is irreplaceable.

Rendang is singular, so use 'it' not 'them'. Use 'a complex mix of spices and flavors' instead of 'mixed of the complexity of spice and flavour'. 'Irreplaceable' is the correct adjective.

× Yes, I usually it's something different because I'm kind of person who doesn't like eating for the same thing every day.

✓ Yes, I usually eat something different because I'm the kind of person who doesn't like eating the same thing every day.

Remove the extraneous 'it's'. Use 'eat something different' for the habit. Include the article 'the' in 'the kind of person' and remove unnecessary 'for'.

× For example one day I eat indo mie, the next day I eat ketupa and the other next day I eat Soto.

✓ For example, one day I eat Indomie, the next day I eat ketupat, and the day after that I eat soto.

Keep present simple to describe habitual actions (consistent with 'usually'). Capitalize brand/place names: 'Indomie'; use 'ketupat' spelling. 'The other next day' is awkward; 'the day after that' is natural.

× So I like to make my meals different every day.

✓ So I like to have different meals every day.

'Have different meals' is more natural than 'make my meals different'.

× As I said before, my favorite food has always been rendang.

✓ As I said before, my favorite food has always been rendang.

Sentence is correct grammatically; keep as is. (No change needed.)

× It is my one and only favorite dish from Indonesia.

✓ It is my one and only favorite dish from Indonesia.

Sentence is correct; no grammatical article errors. (No change needed.)

× I love it because still it's rich of the spice and the flavor, so nothing can replace it.

✓ I love it because it is still rich in spices and flavor, so nothing can replace it.

'Still it's rich of the spice' is ungrammatical. Use 'it is still rich in spices and flavor'. 'Rich in' is the correct prepositional phrase; use plural 'spices'.