Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, use correct verb forms, and add one specific detail about why you like dumplings (flavour, memories, or preparation). Limit to up to 3-4 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly.

例: My favorite food is dumplings because I love their savory filling and the crispy edges when pan-fried. I often cook them on weekends because my children enjoy them, so making dumplings is a way for us to spend time together. Cooking together also helps me relax after a busy week.

提案: Use past tense consistently and clarify the reason with more natural phrasing. Avoid repetition and add a linking phrase to explain emotion or memory. Keep to two or three sentences.

例: When I was young, I loved eating dumplings. My family was poor then, so simple meals like dumplings made us very happy because they were filling and comforting.

提案: Reduce hesitations and be specific about festivals and foods; use clear linking words like "for example" and correct names/spelling. Use two to three concise sentences and give one clear example of a seasonal food and when it is eaten.

例: Yes, we eat different foods at different times of the year. For example, during the Mid-Autumn Festival we eat mooncakes, and at Lunar New Year we usually eat dumplings at noon to celebrate together.

提案: Answer directly whether it has changed, use past and present tenses correctly, and finish the thought with a comparison (how tastes or ingredients differ now). Avoid fragments and hesitations; provide one brief reason why it changed.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed since childhood. When I was a child I liked mooncakes with peanuts and seeds, but now I prefer lighter snacks because I find heavy pastries too sweet and greasy.

× So I I cooking them on the weekends because my children, my family members.

✓ So I cook them on the weekends because my children and other family members like them.

The original uses 'cooking' incorrectly after 'I' where the simple present 'cook' is required for habitual actions. Remove the duplicate 'I' and add 'and other' to clarify 'family members'. Use simple present for routines: 'I cook'.

× I remember when I was young, I like to eat dumplings because I remember when I was a kid my my family is very poor, so we eat dumplings is very happy.

✓ I remember that when I was young, I liked to eat dumplings because my family was very poor, so eating dumplings made us very happy.

Multiple tense and structure errors: 'I like' should be past 'I liked' to match 'when I was young'. 'My my' is a repetition. 'My family is very poor' should be past 'was very poor'. 'We eat dumplings is very happy' is ungrammatical; use a clause 'eating dumplings made us very happy.' Maintain past tense consistency when referring to childhood.

× Yes, uh, we eat different foods at different time of the year.

✓ Yes, we eat different foods at different times of the year.

Use the plural 'times' with 'different' and include 'of the year' for the expression. 'At different time' is ungrammatical; the correct collocation is 'at different times of the year.'

× For example, umm, for example, uh, in the may the Jung Choo jie, uh, we eat uh, mooncake, we eat dumplings at noon.

✓ For example, in May during the Dragon Boat Festival we eat mooncakes, and sometimes dumplings at noon.

Problems: month names are capitalized ('May'); 'the Jung Choo jie' is unclear and needs correct festival name—here I used 'Dragon Boat Festival' as an example (if it was another festival, use its correct English name). 'Mooncake' should be plural 'mooncakes' when referring generally. Use articles and conjunctions to connect ideas: 'during the ...' and 'we eat mooncakes, and sometimes dumplings at noon.'

× Yes, my favorite food change, umm, changed since my since my was a child.

✓ Yes, my favorite food has changed since I was a child.

Use present perfect 'has changed' to describe a change from the past to the present. Remove repetition 'since my since my' and correct 'was a child' to 'I was a child.'

× I remember the I remember when I was a kid, I eat, I ate the mooncake.

✓ I remember that when I was a kid, I ate mooncakes.

Use past tense 'ate' consistently and remove repetition 'I remember the I remember.' Use plural 'mooncakes' for general reference. Keep sentence concise: 'I remember that when I was a kid, I ate mooncakes.'

× The mooncake, umm, included uh, peanuts and seeds. But now.

✓ The mooncakes used to include peanuts and seeds, but now they often have different fillings.

'Included' is past tense but needs a subject 'mooncakes' and clearer contrast with 'but now'. Use 'used to include' to indicate past habit and add continuation 'but now they often have different fillings' to complete the contrast. Also pluralize 'mooncake' for general statements.