Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise, correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Avoid filler sounds (um, uh) and tense errors. Use linking words for clarity (for example, because).

例: My favourite food is fried chicken. I loved it since childhood because my father used to give me a crispy piece after school, and that comforting memory makes it special to me.

提案: Answer directly with a clear past-tense sentence and one specific supporting detail. Remove repetitions and filler words. Use a linking phrase such as 'because' to explain reasons.

例: When I was young I liked fried chicken because it tasted very tasty and my father often fried it for us on weekends.

提案: Provide a structured answer: state yes/no, then give one or two specific seasonal examples. Correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and avoid trailing sentences.

例: Yes. We eat different foods in different seasons; for example, in summer we enjoy fresh fruits like mangoes and watermelon, while in winter we eat warmer dishes such as stews and soups.

提案: Use past and present tenses accurately to compare past and current preferences. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then give a concise reason using linking words like 'but' or 'because'. Reduce hesitations and grammar mistakes.

例: Yes, my favourite food has changed. As a child I preferred fried foods like fried chicken, but now I prefer fresh, healthy meals such as salads and grilled fish because they make me feel better.

× Well, that a list of food that I really like.

✓ Well, that's a list of foods that I really like.

This sentence is missing the verb 'is' and uses incorrect singular/plural form. Use contraction 'that's' for 'that is' and plural 'foods' or simply 'foods' to match 'a list of'. Improve by including the copula and correct plural: 'Well, that's a list of foods that I really like.'

× Uh, when it was a child, my father, uh, give me a piece of fine fried chicken and I love it and I really love it.

✓ When I was a child, my father gave me a piece of fried chicken and I loved it.

Errors: incorrect pronoun phrase 'when it was a child' should be 'when I was a child'; 'give' should be past tense 'gave' to match past time; 'love' should be past 'loved'. Also 'fine fried chicken' is awkward; 'fried chicken' is sufficient. Suggest practicing past tense consistency: use past verbs for past events.

× Uh, when I, when I was a child, I really like to eat chicken because it's, uh, really tasty.

✓ When I was a child, I really liked to eat chicken because it was really tasty.

The time frame 'when I was a child' requires past tense. 'like' should be past 'liked' and 'it's' referring to the past should be 'it was'. Keep verb tenses consistent with the time expression.

× And my father, uh, you use, uh, used to, uh, fry that chicken and I really like it to eat fried chicken.

✓ My father used to fry that chicken, and I really liked eating it.

Problems: extraneous pronoun 'you' and unclear 'used to' placement. 'Used to' expresses habitual past and should follow the subject: 'My father used to fry'. 'I really like it to eat fried chicken' is awkward — change to 'I really liked eating it.' Maintain past tense for past habit.

× Absolutely, because in my country in different season they have a different fruit.

✓ Absolutely. In my country, in different seasons they have different fruits.

Preposition/number issues: 'in different season' should be plural 'in different seasons'; 'a different fruit' is odd—use 'different fruits' for general statement. Also add commas for clarity. Use plural when speaking about recurring seasonal availability.

× Like in uh in the summer we owns, we usually eat like fast food and.

✓ For example, in the summer we usually eat fast food.

Errors: 'we owns' is incorrect verb choice and agreement; remove extra 'like' and trailing 'and'. Use 'we usually eat fast food' for correct subject-verb agreement and concise expression. Practice eliminating filler words.

× Absolutely. You know, when I was trying, I want to eat the food that like chicken, uh, fried chicken, fried food.

✓ When I was younger, I wanted to eat foods like fried chicken and other fried foods.

Problems: 'when I was trying' is incorrect — likely 'when I was younger' or 'a child'; tense mismatch 'I want' should be past 'I wanted'; awkward listing 'the food that like chicken' should be 'foods like fried chicken'. Ensure time reference and verb tense match and use plural nouns for general categories.

× But when I grow up, I feel, I thought that I really like to eat and food that very fresh and they give all my health.

✓ But when I grew up, I felt that I preferred to eat very fresh food because it is healthier for me.

Multiple tense and agreement errors: 'when I grow up' should be past 'when I grew up' to match reflection; 'I feel, I thought' is contradictory — use past 'I felt'; 'I really like to eat and food that very fresh' is ungrammatical — use 'I preferred to eat very fresh food'; 'they give all my health' is incorrect pronoun/agreement and idiom — replace with 'it is healthier for me'. Maintain consistent tense and use correct subject-pronoun agreement.