Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh, um), give one or two specific reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect ideas (because, so, therefore). Keep answers to 2–4 sentences.

例: I don't have a single favourite food at the moment because I'm on a long-term diet to lose weight. Because of this, I often choose healthy meals like grilled chicken or steamed vegetables instead of foods I used to enjoy.

提案: Provide a clear past-tense topic sentence and add specific supporting details. Reduce repetition and hesitations. Use linking words such as 'when' or 'so' and give one concrete example or memory.

例: When I was a child I preferred sweets, especially candy. I remember going to the grocery with my mother to pick out colourful lollipops and chocolate bars, which felt like a special treat.

提案: Answer directly and clearly: mention seasonal differences or explain why your eating habits changed. Use correct tense and avoid repeating words. Give one specific example comparing seasons or ages and use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: When I was a teenager I often ate rice for breakfast because I didn't know how to cook anything else. Now I change my meals with the seasons — for example, I eat more fresh salads in summer and warm soups in winter.

提案: Give a clear direct response (Yes/No) and then explain with one or two specific reasons or examples. Avoid vague phrases and filler words. Use linking words like 'because', 'as', or 'since' to explain the change.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed since childhood. For example, I used to love sweet snacks, but as I grew up I started preferring savory and healthier options like grilled fish and steamed vegetables because I became more health-conscious.

× Honestly, there is no, uh, there is no special meal because I, uh, I'm on a diet for a long time to, uh, to lose my weight, Uh, and uh, uh, and I eat uh, something I didn't, I don't like it and just because I.

✓ Honestly, there is no special meal because I have been on a diet for a long time to lose weight, and I eat things I do not like just because of that.

This sentence misuses 'there is' redundantly and mixes tenses. The phrase 'I'm on a diet for a long time' should be present perfect continuous ('have been on a diet') to indicate an action that started in the past and continues now. 'Lose my weight' is better as 'lose weight' (no possessive). 'I eat something I didn't, I don't like it' is ungrammatical; correct to 'I eat things I do not like.' Combine clauses clearly and remove redundant 'there is.' (Grammar problem type ID: 3)

× You know, as a child, as a child, I prefer candy more than others dish and I go to the to the to the grocery with my with my mother to buy those thing.

✓ You know, as a child, I preferred candy more than other foods, and I went to the grocery with my mother to buy those things.

The sentence has tense and pronoun/quantity errors. 'As a child' refers to the past, so 'prefer' should be past 'preferred' (present/past mismatch -> also subject-verb agreement but primarily tense). 'More than others dish' is wrong; use 'other foods' or 'other dishes.' 'I go to the grocery' should be past 'I went.' 'Those thing' should be plural 'those things.' Also remove repeated words for clarity. (Grammar problem type ID: 12)

× Yeah, I remember when I, when I teenager, I, I ate, I ate rice in the morning. Uh, that's because I didn't, uh, how, how to cooked. Uh, and I, I was, uh, I was a child or.

✓ Yeah, I remember when I was a teenager I ate rice in the morning. That was because I didn't know how to cook, and I was still a child.

Multiple past tense errors: 'when I teenager' needs 'when I was a teenager.' Repeated 'I ate' should be single. 'I didn't, uh, how, how to cooked' should be 'I didn't know how to cook' (use base form after 'to' or 'how to'). 'I was a child or' is incomplete; correct to 'I was still a child.' Use past simple consistently for past memories. (Grammar problem type ID: 5)

× OK, honestly, I don't have a specific meal, but uh, but when I, uh, growing up, I noticed something. Of course, uh, my taste has changed, uh, because everything around me is change in even is change and.

✓ OK, honestly, I don't have a specific favorite meal, but when I was growing up I noticed something. Of course, my taste has changed because everything around me has changed as well.

Tense consistency: 'when I growing up' should be 'when I was growing up' (past progressive). 'My taste has changed' is fine (present perfect) but 'everything around me is change' is incorrect; use present perfect 'has changed' to match 'changed' effect up to now. 'In even is change and' is fragmentary; clarify as 'has changed as well.' Also 'specific meal' is clearer as 'specific favorite meal.' (Grammar problem type ID: 6)