Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and fix word order and article use.

例: My favourite food is beef curry. I love it because it is flavorful and widely available in my country, and it is reasonably priced, so I can enjoy it often.

提案: Organize the answer into a clear topic sentence and a supporting detail about why you liked it. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar and pronoun errors. Keep it shorter and avoid repetition.

例: When I was young, I often ate chicken masala because my grandmother used to cook it for me. I miss it a lot since she passed away last year, and the dish reminds me of her cooking.

提案: Provide a clear main sentence, then give one or two specific examples using linking words. Correct grammar and avoid vague or confusing phrases. Mention a concrete seasonal food to illustrate your point.

例: Yes, I do. Because Bangladesh has six distinct seasons, I eat different foods at different times of year; for example, in summer I often eat cooling foods like mangoes and yogurt, while in winter I prefer warm soups and rice dishes.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence stating whether your favourite changed, then give one specific example with brief explanation. Fix repetition and vocabulary (e.g., 'kachi' and 'mutton') and use correct tense and articles.

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed over the years. For instance, last year I really enjoyed kachi, a rich mutton biryani, but now I prefer lighter dishes like beef curry.

× There are many favorite food of mine but if I have to choose one, I will choose beef Curry because this is something I love to eat whenever I get it and this is very much available in our country and it is a average price.

✓ There are many favorite foods of mine, but if I have to choose one I will choose beef curry because it is something I love to eat whenever I get it, it is widely available in our country, and it is reasonably priced.

The noun 'food' must be plural as 'many' requires a plural noun (singular and plural issue). Also 'a average price' is incorrect because 'average' needs 'an' and more natural phrasing is 'reasonably priced'. Improve by using plural 'foods' and more natural adjective phrases; use commas to separate clauses. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× When I was young I used to eat chicken masala a lot because this is my favorite because my grandmother used to cook it for me and I miss the she died last year so I missed the chicken masala a lot.

✓ When I was young I used to eat chicken masala a lot because it was my favorite; my grandmother used to cook it for me, and I miss her because she died last year, so I miss chicken masala a lot.

Issues include incorrect pronoun 'the she' and unclear article use and tense consistency. Replace 'this is my favorite' with 'it was my favorite' to match past context (present tense error and pronoun error). Remove redundant articles before 'chicken masala' and use 'her' instead of 'the she'. Ensure tense consistency and clear pronouns. Grammar problem type ID: 22

× I eat different types of food of at different times of the year 'cause I live in Bangladesh where there are six seasons and every season contains many varieties of foods and fruits.

✓ I eat different types of food at different times of the year because I live in Bangladesh, which has six seasons, and each season offers many varieties of foods and fruits.

The phrase 'of at different times' incorrectly uses prepositions; use 'at different times' (preposition error). Also 'where there are six seasons' is better as 'which has six seasons' for clarity, and 'contains' is less natural than 'offers'. Improve preposition placement and clause linking. Grammar problem type ID: 11

× Also, as example, right now is summer and it is food time every everything is.

✓ Also, for example, right now it is summer and many fruits and foods are in season.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear ('it is food time every everything is'). This is a sentence structure error; rewrite to convey the intended meaning. Use 'for example' and a clear clause such as 'many fruits and foods are in season' to express that summer brings certain foods. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× Yes, my favorite lazy food list has has changed a lot throughout these years.

✓ Yes, my favorite easy-to-make foods have changed a lot over the years.

The repeated 'has has' is an error; also 'favorite lazy food list' is awkward. This is a present tense/word choice issue: use plural 'foods' to match 'have changed' and 'over the years' is more natural than 'throughout these years'. Correct subject-verb agreement and tense usage. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× For instance, last year I was so into kachi. Kachi was something which is made by made by mutton.

✓ For instance, last year I was very into kachi. Kachi is a dish made with mutton.

The phrase 'made by made by mutton' repeats and misuses passive construction. Use correct past participle 'made' with the preposition 'with' for ingredients: 'made with mutton'. Ensure no repeated words and use simple present 'is' to define the dish in general. Grammar problem type ID: 9