Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법과 어휘 사용에 대한 수정이 필요합니다. 문장의 구조가 어색하고 의미 전달이 불분명합니다. 예를 들어 ‘gimbal’이 무엇을 가리키는지 명확하지 않고 ‘high food’라는 표현은 자연스럽지 않습니다. 답변은 주제문을 먼저 말하고, 이유를 구체적으로 덧붙이며 연결어를 사용해 자연스럽게 이어야 합니다. 가능하면 음식의 맛, 재료, 즐겨 먹는 상황 등을 한두 문장으로 구체적으로 설명하세요.

例: My favourite food is gimbap. I like it because it contains a lot of fresh vegetables and rice, so it feels healthy and filling. Also, I often eat gimbap when I’m busy because it’s easy to carry and eat on the go.

提案: 시제와 동사의 형태를 정확히 사용해야 합니다. 또한 이유를 덧붙이면 답변이 풍부해집니다. ‘when I was young’에는 과거 시제를 사용하고, 예시를 조금 더 구체적으로 설명하십시오. 연결어(However, but 등)를 활용해 현재의 변화 이유를 설명하면 좋습니다.

例: When I was young, I really liked spicy foods such as tacos and kimchi. However, I don’t enjoy very spicy food anymore because it upsets my stomach and I prefer milder flavours now.

提案: 문법(어순, 대명사)과 어휘 선택을 개선해야 합니다. ‘proteins me more’ 같은 표현은 잘못된 어순입니다. 계절에 따른 음식 변화에 대해 답할 때는 계절별 예시를 들고, 최근의 식습관 변화라면 이유(운동, 건강 등)를 명확히 제시하세요. 연결어를 사용해 현재와 과거 또는 일반적인 패턴을 비교하세요.

例: Generally, I eat similar foods throughout the year, but since last year I’ve tried to eat more protein to build muscle because I started working out regularly. In winter I also eat more soups and stews, while in summer I prefer light salads.

提案: 문장 흐름과 어순을 개선하고 이유를 구체화하세요. ‘try to more eat’ 또는 ‘not only or not spicy’ 같은 표현은 자연스럽지 않습니다. 변화에 대한 설명은 이유(건강, 취향, 생활습관)와 함께 구체적인 예를 들어 연결어로 논리를 정리하면 좋습니다.

例: Yes, my favourite foods have changed. Nowadays I try to eat healthier foods, such as steamed vegetables and grilled fish, because I want to maintain my health. When I was a child I enjoyed very spicy dishes and chocolate, but now I prefer milder and more balanced meals.

× My favorite food is gimbal because there are so many vegetables so it is high food.

✓ My favorite food is gimbal because it has a lot of vegetables, so it is healthy.

The student used 'high food' incorrectly; the appropriate adjective is 'healthy'. Also 'there are so many vegetables' is wordy; use 'it has a lot of vegetables' for clarity. Use of adjectives/adverbs was incorrect and word order could be improved. 추천 이유: 'high'은 음식의 건강함을 나타내지 않으므로 'healthy'로 교체하고 'there are so many vegetables'를 'it has a lot of vegetables'로 자연스럽게 바꿔야 합니다.

× When I was young I really like spicy food like Taco, but now I don't like it.

✓ When I was young I really liked spicy food like tacos, but now I don't like it.

The sentence refers to a past time ('When I was young') so the verb should be in the past tense: 'liked' not 'like'. Also use the plural 'tacos' when talking about the food type generally. 추천 이유: 과거 시점과 일치하도록 동사를 과거형으로 바꾸고 'Taco'를 일반적인 음식 종류로 표현하려면 복수형을 사용합니다.

× Now I eat similar food during the years, but from last year I try to eat proteins me more for my muscles.

✓ Now I eat similar foods throughout the year, but since last year I have been trying to eat more protein for my muscles.

Multiple issues: 'during the years' is unnatural; use 'throughout the year' for current habitual behavior. 'From last year' should be 'since last year' when the action continues to the present. 'I try to eat proteins me more' has word order and form problems: use 'I have been trying to eat more protein'. Use 'protein' (uncountable) not 'proteins', and correct word order. 추천 이유: 현재 상태와 과거부터 이어진 변화를 정확히 표현하려면 현재완료 진행형과 올바른 전치사를 사용해야 합니다.

× Yes, it changed. Nowadays I try to more eat healthy food, not only or not spicy.

✓ Yes, it changed. Nowadays I try to eat healthier food, not only spicy food.

'I try to more eat' has incorrect adverb placement; place 'more' before the adjective or use comparative 'healthier'. 'not only or not spicy' is ungrammatical; clarify with 'not only spicy food'. Use 'healthier' to compare current eating habits. 추천 이유: 부사 및 형용사 위치를 바로잡고 의미를 명확히 하기 위해 'eat healthier food'와 'not only spicy food'로 수정합니다.

× Otherwise when I was young I really enjoy to eat spicy food or chocolate.

✓ When I was young I really enjoyed eating spicy food and chocolate.

Mix of tense and verb complementation errors: 'when I was young' requires past tense 'enjoyed'. Use the gerund 'eating' after 'enjoyed' rather than 'to eat'. Use 'and' instead of 'or' to list items typically enjoyed together. This corrects sentence structure and verb form. 추천 이유: 과거 표현에 맞춰 동사를 과거형으로 바꾸고 'enjoy' 후에는 동명사 형태를 사용해야 합니다.