Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “My favourite food is Italian cuisine.”), avoid vague phrases and incorrect word forms (e.g. “it's include”, “pink pizza”), and give one or two specific examples with brief reasons. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to connect ideas and keep it to 2–4 sentences.

例: My favourite food is Italian cuisine because I love its rich flavours and simple ingredients. For example, I enjoy wood-fired Margherita pizza for its fresh tomato and basil taste, and creamy carbonara because of its comforting texture.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence stating whether your preference changed, then provide a concise reason and a brief example. Fix grammar (e.g. “there is no change” → “my preference hasn’t changed”) and avoid repetition. Use linking words like “so” or “because”.

例: My preference hasn’t changed since I was young — I have always loved Italian food because of its rich flavours. For example, as a child I enjoyed simple pasta dishes like spaghetti with tomato sauce, which I still eat today.

提案: Answer directly about seasonal changes or habits, then give specific examples of occasions or seasons and why you try new foods. Improve grammar and word choice (e.g. “I try new foods at different times of the year” and “gain experience of other cultures”). Use linking words like “for example” or “so”.

例: I don’t follow strict seasonal foods, but I often try new dishes throughout the year to learn about other cultures. For example, I sample street foods during summer festivals and try traditional winter stews when visiting relatives in cold months.

提案: Be concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear answer, then briefly explain why and add a conditional possibility. Correct grammar (e.g. “in the future,” “try dishes from other cultures”) and remove filler phrases like “Why not?”.

例: No — my favourite food hasn’t changed since childhood because I’ve always enjoyed Italian flavours. However, I might change my preference in the future if I discover a new cuisine I really love, such as spicy Thai or authentic Mexican dishes.

× My favorite food is Italian food. I am in love with this kind of food because it's include a good flavor such as pink pizza and pasta and those kind of food or dishes is the most dishes popular in Italy.

✓ My favorite food is Italian food. I am in love with this kind of cuisine because it has a good flavor, such as pizza with tomato sauce and pasta, and these kinds of dishes are the most popular in Italy.

Errors: incorrect word choice and adjective use ('Italian food' is fine but 'this kind of food' is repetitive), misuse of 'include' instead of 'has', wrong adjective 'pink pizza' (likely meant 'pizza with tomato sauce'), plural and agreement issues ('those kind of food or dishes is' should be 'these kinds of dishes are'). Suggestion: use 'cuisine' for variety, use 'has' when describing characteristics, use correct plural forms ('these kinds of dishes are'), and choose appropriate descriptive words ('pizza with tomato sauce').

× Actually there is no change about my favorite food when I was young or no, it's the same and I will be always in love with this kind of food because it really include a rich flavor.

✓ Actually there was no change in my favorite food when I was young; it's the same, and I will always love this kind of food because it really has a rich flavor.

Errors: tense and 'there is' usage—when referring to the past, use 'there was' not 'there is'. 'Change about' is incorrect; use 'change in'. 'I will be always in love' is awkward; use 'I will always love'. 'Include' is incorrect for describing a characteristic; use 'has'. Suggestion: match tense to the time referenced, use 'in' with 'change', place adverbs in natural positions ('always love'), and use 'has' to describe qualities.

× Honestly, I always hope to try a new kind of food at different time in the year because I can get many experience of other cultures about their food and I feel very happy while I'm doing that.

✓ Honestly, I always hope to try a new kind of food at different times of the year because I can gain much experience of other cultures through their food, and I feel very happy when I do that.

Errors: 'different time in the year' should be 'different times of the year' (plural and preposition). 'Get many experience' is uncountable; use 'gain much experience' or 'gain many experiences'. 'About their food' is awkward; use 'through their food'. 'While I'm doing that' is acceptable but 'when I do that' is more natural. Suggestion: use correct plural forms for repeated events, choose appropriate verbs for uncountable nouns ('gain experience'), and use 'through' to express means.

× No, my favorite food hasn't changed since I was a child. It's always the same. But maybe at the future I could change my favorite food if I if I were to try another dishes from another cultures. Why not?

✓ No, my favorite food hasn't changed since I was a child. It's always the same. But maybe in the future I could change my favorite food if I were to try dishes from other cultures. Why not?

Errors: 'at the future' should be 'in the future' (preposition). 'Could change' is okay but conditional phrasing needs correction: remove duplicate 'if I'. 'Try another dishes' should be 'try dishes' or 'try another dish' (count agreement). 'Another cultures' should be 'other cultures' (adjective form). Suggestion: use 'in the future', avoid duplicate words, ensure noun and determiner agreement ('another' + singular or 'other' + plural).