Food— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid filler words (uh, umm). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Mention why you like the food (taste, texture, memories) and give a brief example of when you miss it.

例: My favourite food is Korean monkfish because I love its spicy, rich flavour and firm texture. Since I now live abroad, I rarely find authentic versions, so I often crave it, especially on cold evenings when spicy food feels comforting.

提案: Reduce hesitation and organise your answer: start with a clear statement, then explain with a specific detail and a linking phrase. Specify what made those desserts special (family time, recipes) or give an example of a favourite treat you baked.

例: When I was young I loved desserts, especially cookies and cakes, because I baked them with my mother. For example, we often made honey cookies together at weekends, which taught me simple baking skills and created warm family memories.

提案: Avoid contradictory phrasing and remove fillers. Give a clear direct answer then expand with a specific example of seasonal foods and when you eat them. Use linking words like 'however' or 'for example' to make the response coherent.

例: Not really; I usually keep the same diet year-round. However, I do eat more seasonal fruits, for example in summer I eat a lot of watermelon and peaches because they are fresh and refreshing.

提案: Give a concise, structured response: state whether it changed, then explain why with specific details (age, tolerance, experiences). Remove repetitions and filler words. Mention a brief consequence or example of the change.

例: Yes, my tastes have changed: as a child I couldn't handle spicy food, but after I turned twenty I gradually developed a tolerance. As a result, I now enjoy spicy dishes like monkfish, which I would never have eaten before.

× Umm, it's a kind of spicy food and I'm living abroad at this moment so I cannot find it easily, so that's why I'm craving more and more.

✓ Umm, it's a kind of spicy food and I'm living abroad at the moment, so I cannot find it easily; that's why I crave it more and more.

The pronoun 'it' is used correctly but the sentence has tense and word-choice issues tied to pronoun reference and clarity. Replace 'at this moment' with the more natural 'at the moment'. Change 'so that's why I'm craving more and more' to 'that's why I crave it more and more' to match simple present habitual feeling. Use a semicolon or shorter clauses to improve clarity.

× What kind of food did you like when you were young? / When I was young, I really liked dessert, like a cookie or a cake, umm, like I liked baking with my mom so I could make uh, like healthy and sweet food. So I really enjoyed it, the experience.

✓ When I was young, I really liked desserts, like cookies or cake. I liked baking with my mom, so I could make healthy and sweet treats. I really enjoyed the experience.

Plural nouns need to match past reference: 'dessert' should be plural 'desserts' and 'a cookie or a cake' can be simplified to 'cookies or cake'. Maintain past tense 'liked' and 'enjoyed'. Remove filler words and restructure for natural English. 'So I could make' is acceptable in past; 'treats' is a clearer noun than repeating 'food'.

× Umm, I don't really care about umm, eating different food at different times of the year. Uh, but at the same time, umm, there is a seasonal fruit, umm, like every time. So I tend to eat a lot of like seasonal fruits.

✓ Umm, I don't really care about eating different foods at different times of the year. However, there are seasonal fruits available, so I tend to eat a lot of seasonal fruit.

Use plural 'foods' when speaking generally. Replace 'there is a seasonal fruit' with 'there are seasonal fruits' for general plural reference. 'A lot of like seasonal fruits' is redundant; use 'a lot of seasonal fruit' or 'a lot of seasonal fruits'. Also replace 'but at the same time' with 'however' for clarity.

× Yeah, it has been changed because I couldn't eat spicy food at all when I was young, but umm, since I turned uh, to 20 and I could eat more spicy food, umm, and it made me to eat more spicy food.

✓ Yeah, it has changed because I couldn't eat spicy food at all when I was young, but since I turned 20 I have been able to eat spicier food, and that made me eat spicier food.

'Has been changed' is passive and awkward; use active present perfect 'has changed'. 'Since I turned to 20' is incorrect; say 'since I turned 20'. Use present perfect 'have been able' to describe ability from that point to now. Remove 'to' after 'made me' — 'made me eat' is correct. Use 'spicier' as comparative adjective for 'more spicy'.