Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is relevant but has several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Make the response more natural by using a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and concise supporting details. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “because” or “so”), and limit to about three sentences. Be specific about what kinds of buildings and why you photograph them.

例: Yes, I often photograph buildings, especially those with interesting architectural details. For example, I like modern glass façades and old colonial buildings because they have unique shapes and textures, so I take pictures to study the designs and keep ideas for my own projects.

提案: The answer conveys the main idea but has grammar mistakes and unclear structure. Start with a direct topic sentence (Yes, I would like to visit...), then give specific reasons using linking words (because, and) and a brief detail about when or how you plan to visit. Correct subject-verb agreement and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the National Museum next month because I have seen photos of its striking exterior design on social media. In addition, it is a prominent landmark in my hometown, so I want to see the architecture up close and learn more about its history.

× Of course, I often take photos of buildings which I find really in beautiful architectural design and outstanding.

✓ Of course, I often take photos of buildings which I find really beautiful in architectural design and outstanding.

The phrase 'in beautiful architectural design' misuses the preposition 'in' and the adjective order. Remove 'in' to correctly link 'beautiful' with 'architectural design'. Also 'really beautiful in architectural design' is awkward; 'really beautiful in architectural design' simplified to 'really beautiful in architectural design' is acceptable, but better is 'really beautiful in architectural design and outstanding'. Suggestion: 'really beautiful in architectural design' -> 'really beautiful in architectural design' or preferably 'really beautiful architecturally'. Ensure adjective placement is natural.

× At that time I collect the design or taking photos of the outside of building.

✓ At that time I collected the designs or took photos of the outside of the buildings.

This sentence mixes verb forms and has singular/plural and article errors. 'At that time' suggests past, so use past tense verbs: 'collected' and 'took'. Parallel structure requires matching verb forms ('collected' or 'was collecting' and 'took' or 'was taking'). Also use plural 'designs' and include the definite article 'the' before 'buildings' or use 'a building'. Suggestion: decide past vs habitual; for past: 'I collected the designs or took photos of the outside of the buildings.' For past continuous: 'I was collecting designs and taking photos of building exteriors.'

× The National Museum which I would like to visit in the next month because the exterior design are really outstanding that I find on social media and also it's very prominent place in my home.

✓ The National Museum is the place I would like to visit next month because its exterior design is really outstanding; I saw it on social media, and it is a very prominent place in my hometown.

Multiple issues: tense and structure need fixing. Use present 'is' to define the museum and 'would like to visit next month' for future intention fits, but sentence lacked a main verb and had subject-verb disagreement: 'the exterior design are' should be 'its exterior design is'. Replace 'that I find on social media' with 'I saw it on social media' for clarity and correct tense. 'Very prominent place in my home' is incorrect; use 'in my hometown' and include 'a' or make it 'is a very prominent place in my hometown.' Also combine clauses properly using punctuation or conjunctions.