Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid vague phrasing like "compound houses containing few family members"—say who lives there or describe the houses more clearly. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home. Instead, the neighbourhood mostly has small compound houses where several extended-family members live together, so the area feels low-rise and close-knit.

提案: Give a direct answer, then briefly explain with a clear reason and a linking word. Use correct grammar ("not a fan of"). Add one specific example if possible. Keep it short and natural.

例: No, I don’t usually take photos of buildings because I’m not a fan of photography. For example, I prefer taking pictures of friends or nature when I travel.

提案: Make your response more coherent and concise. Start with the building name and location, then explain briefly why you want to visit using linking words (e.g., "because" or "since") and one specific detail about your interest. Avoid short repetitive sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Independence Arch in the Greater Accra region because I’ve heard it’s historically important and offers a panoramic view. I’m especially interested in learning about Ghana’s independence history when I visit.

× Where I live is full of compound houses containing few family members.

✓ Where I live is full of compound houses containing few families.

The noun 'family' should be plural ('families') because 'compound houses' is plural and each house contains multiple family units. Use plural nouns to match a plural subject to indicate more than one family present.

× No, I don't take photos of buildings, but this is because I am not fan of taking photos.

✓ No, I don't take photos of buildings, but this is because I am not a fan of taking photos.

The phrase needs the article 'a' before 'fan'. This is not a modal verb issue strictly, but under the provided list it best fits 'Modal verb usage' category constraints; however the actual error is an article omission. Add 'a' to make the noun phrase grammatically complete.

× Yes, there's a building I would like to visit someday. That area is in Greater Accra region.

✓ Yes, there's a building I would like to visit someday. That area is in the Greater Accra region.

When referring to a specific region, use the definite article 'the'. 'Greater Accra region' as a known administrative region requires 'the' before the name for proper English usage.

× It's called the Independence Arc.

✓ It's called the Independence Arch.

The word 'Arc' is likely a lexical error; the correct term for the memorial is 'Arch'. This is a word choice correction to match the intended noun. Also ensure proper nouns are used accurately.

× I have heard about it for some time now and I'll be happy. I'll go and see it myself.

✓ I have heard about it for some time now and I would be happy to visit it. I'll go and see it myself someday.

The original 'I'll be happy.' is abrupt and lacks a clear object; rephrasing to 'I would be happy to visit it' clarifies intention. Adding 'someday' to the second sentence sets a future time. This maintains appropriate future tense and improves coherence.