Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct grammar, avoid filler words, and give specific supporting details. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add 1–2 specific points (location, type of buildings, and reason). Use linking words (for example, however, because) and keep to no more than 4–5 sentences. Concentrate on: correct verb forms (There are/There is), fewer hesitations, and concrete details (e.g., single-storey houses, farmland nearby).

例: No, there are no tall buildings near my home. Most houses nearby are single-storey and surrounded by farmland, so the skyline is low. Because the area is rural, people grow crops and live in simple houses rather than tall apartments.

提案: Answer directly with correct tense and reduce repetition. Give a short reason and one specific detail or example. Use linking words such as because or so to connect ideas. Pay attention to plural/singular forms (photos, buildings) and pronouns.

例: No, I usually don't take photos of buildings because I live in a rural area where houses are plain. Instead, I prefer photographing landscapes and farms, as they are more attractive to me.

提案: Give a clear affirmative or negative and then explain with 1–2 specific reasons. Avoid hesitations and fix grammar (I would like to visit..., there are lifts and shops). Use linking words (for example, because, such as) and be specific about what interests you in the mall.

例: Yes, I would like to visit a large shopping mall because it offers many shops, restaurants, and elevators, which I rarely see in my village. For example, I would enjoy exploring different stores and trying new foods in the food court.

× No, there is not a tall building in my home.

✓ No, there is not a tall building near my home.

The original sentence uses 'in my home' which contradicts the examiner's question about 'near your home'. Also 'there is not' is grammatical but 'not' after 'is' is less natural than 'there isn't'; however the main issue is wrong preposition/location. Use 'near my home' to match meaning and use 'there is not' -> 'there isn't' optionally for natural speech.

× Uh, there is the only smallest building of my home, uh, nearest to my home, uh, because, uh, my house is in place.

✓ There is only a very small building near my home because my house is in a rural area.

Problems: incorrect article use ('the only smallest' is ungrammatical) and wrong prepositions/phrasing ('of my home', 'nearest to my home', 'my house is in place'). Correct by using 'only a very small building' and 'near my home' and replace 'in place' with a clearer phrase 'in a rural area'.

× There is uh, the different, uh, uh, poor people, uh, are living and which are using the, uh, crops so.

✓ There are different poor people living there who use the land for crops.

Pronoun and relative clause errors: 'There is' should be 'There are' for plural; 'which are using the crops' is incorrect relative pronoun and verb choice. Use 'who' for people and 'use the land for crops' to express meaning clearly.

× No I'm not take a photos of building because the fielding is not beautiful for me building is only can see the their housing and living styles of people.

✓ No, I don't take photos of buildings because the fields are not beautiful to me; I can only see their houses and people's living styles.

The original uses wrong verb form 'I'm not take' instead of 'I don't take' and incorrect pluralization and articles. Use simple present negative 'I don't take' for habitual action. 'Photos of building' -> 'photos of buildings'; 'fielding' -> 'fields'; 'their housing' -> 'their houses'. Also reorder for clarity.

× So I'm not able to take a photos of these types of building.

✓ So I'm not able to take photos of these types of buildings.

Unnecessary article 'a' before plural 'photos' is incorrect; use plural 'buildings'. Present participle issue: original had awkward form but main corrections are article and count nouns.

× Uh, no. Uh, I think it will be in a mall, uh, like a busy mall, which is very interesting.

✓ No. I think it would be a mall, like a busy shopping mall, which would be very interesting.

Tense/modal choice: use 'would be' to express hypothetical desire rather than 'will be'. Also 'a mall' is correct article use; 'shopping mall' is clearer. This fixes modal/tense usage.

× There is the lift and other facili facilitated, uh, buildings.

✓ There is a lift and other facilities in such buildings.

Adjective/adverb errors: 'facili facilitated' is incorrect. Use noun 'facilities'. Also add 'a' before 'lift' and 'in such buildings' for clarity.

× So I can visit only the busy mall, but not a building which are people live and which are.

✓ So I can visit only the busy mall, but not a building where people live.

Subject-verb agreement and relative clause errors: 'which are people live' is ungrammatical. Use 'where people live' or 'in which people live'. Also remove redundant fragment 'and which are'.