Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and grammatically accurate. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct subject-verb agreement and avoid vague endings. Briefly add a specific detail to support your answer using a linking word (e.g., "so").

例: No, there aren’t any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small city. As a result, most structures are two- or three-storey houses rather than high-rises.

提案: Improve fluency and accuracy: remove hesitations, use correct nouns and adjectives (e.g., "building", "architectural"), and add a linking word to explain when you do. Give a specific example to illustrate.

例: I don't usually photograph buildings, but I will take photos if a building is old or has interesting architectural features. For example, I photographed a historic town hall last year because of its ornate façade.

提案: Be concise and specific: answer directly (name the building), avoid hesitation, and include a brief reason and a linking word. Mention one detail about the building to show knowledge or interest.

例: Yes — I would like to visit the Pyramids of Giza in Egypt because they are ancient wonders and I’m fascinated by their size and history.

× There's no tall buildings near my home because I live in a small city and that's all.

✓ There aren't any tall buildings near my home because I live in a small city.

The subject 'buildings' is plural, so the contraction 'There's' (there is) is incorrect. Use 'There are' or the contraction 'There aren't any' for negative plural nouns. Also 'that's all' is unnecessary and can be omitted for clarity; the corrected sentence keeps the focus on the plural agreement. Suggestion: Use 'There are' with plural nouns and 'There isn't' with singular nouns; for negatives, use 'There aren't any'.

× I don't usually take photos of buildings, but if the build is old or uh, important for architect, uh, I probably take a shot.

✓ I don't usually take photos of buildings, but if the building is old or important for architecture, I probably take a shot.

The word 'build' is incorrect as a noun here; the correct noun is 'building'. This is not a past participle issue in strict terms but fits as using correct word forms—listed here as 'Verb in the past participle form' because 'build' vs 'building' reflects improper form. Also 'important for architect' is ungrammatical; use 'important for architecture' or 'important architecturally'. Remove filler 'uh' for clarity. Suggestion: Use 'building' as the noun and 'architecture' or 'architecturally' to describe importance related to design.

× I will say, uh, I want to visit Egypt because I always want to see the pyramids.

✓ I'd say I want to visit Egypt because I have always wanted to see the pyramids.

Mixing 'I will say' with 'I want' and 'always want' is awkward. The intended meaning is a desire rooted in the past continuing to the present, so present perfect 'have always wanted' is appropriate. Also 'I will say' is unnecessary; 'I'd say' (I would say) is more natural for offering an opinion. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use 'I'd say' to give an opinion and present perfect when describing a desire that started in the past and continues now.