Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, fix singular/plural and word errors (e.g., 'health and farms' unclear, 'skyscraper' → 'skyscrapers'). Add one specific example and a linking phrase to make the answer coherent.

例: I don't live near many tall buildings because I live in a rural area of Taiwan where most houses are low-rise. However, in the nearby city of Taichung there are many high-rises and a few skyscrapers, which I sometimes visit when I go shopping or meet friends.

提案: Correct small errors and tighten phrasing. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then use a linking word and one specific example. Fix mistakes like 'I owe' → 'no,', 'a new cities' → 'a new city', and use natural collocations ('take photos', 'appreciate the details').

例: No, I don't often take photos of buildings because I prefer to appreciate architectural details in person. However, when I visit a new city, I sometimes take a photo of a building with an unusual design or interesting historical features to remember it.

提案: Improve clarity and correct vocabulary and spelling ('Violet interners' unclear—maybe 'stained-glass interiors'). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples using linking words. Mention one or two named cathedrals to show knowledge.

例: I don't have one specific building in mind, but I would love to visit the great cathedrals of Europe. For example, I would like to see Notre-Dame in Paris or St. Peter's Basilica in Rome because of their stunning stained-glass windows and richly decorated interiors, and I enjoy learning about the centuries of history and art inside.

× There aren't many tall buildings near my home because I live in a rural area of Taiwan, so many structures are low rise homes and health and farms.

✓ There aren't many tall buildings near my home because I live in a rural area of Taiwan, so many structures are low-rise houses and health-care facilities and farms.

The original sentence misuses quantifiers and nouns: 'low rise homes and health and farms' is ungrammatical and mixes items. 'Low-rise' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective modifying 'houses'. 'Homes' is fine but 'houses' is more natural here. 'Health and farms' is unclear; likely intended 'health-care facilities and farms'. Use correct nouns and quantifiers to list parallel items.

× However, there are plenty of high rise and skyscraper in nearby cities which I visit occasionally.

✓ However, there are plenty of high-rises and skyscrapers in nearby cities which I visit occasionally.

Number agreement and word form errors: 'high rise' and 'skyscraper' should be in plural form to agree with 'plenty of'. Also hyphenate 'high-rise' when used as a noun compound or use 'high-rises'. The preposition 'in' is correct; change to 'skyscrapers' for plural agreement.

× Actually, I owe I don't often take photos of buildings.

✓ Actually, I don't often take photos of buildings.

The fragment 'I owe' is incorrect and breaks sentence structure. Remove 'I owe' to form a correct negative present simple statement 'I don't often take photos of buildings.' The sentence should match the present habitual meaning.

× I prefer to look at them and appreciate the details with my own eyes, especially when I'm exploring a new cities.

✓ I prefer to look at them and appreciate the details with my own eyes, especially when I'm exploring a new city.

Tense is present progressive for 'I'm exploring' which is fine, but 'a new cities' mixes singular article 'a' with plural 'cities'. Use singular 'a new city' to match the article.

× Sometimes I will take one picture if a building has an unusual design or historical features I want to remember.

✓ Sometimes I will take a picture if a building has an unusual design or historical features I want to remember.

Using 'one picture' is grammatical but 'a picture' is more natural in this context. This is a quantifier/style issue; replace 'one' with the indefinite article 'a' for natural spoken English.

× I don't really have a single building in mind, but I love to visit the cathedrals of Europe.

✓ I don't really have a single building in mind, but I would love to visit the cathedrals of Europe.

Present simple 'I love to visit' expresses a general preference, but in context of speaking about desire to visit in future, 'would love to visit' is more appropriate. This adjusts tense/mood to express hypothetical desire. If keeping present simple is intended, original is acceptable; suggestion improves natural response.

× There are architectural masterpieces with stunning glass windows and Violet interners and in and I enjoy exploring the centuries of history and the art inside.

✓ There are architectural masterpieces with stunning glass windows and violet interiors, and I enjoy exploring the centuries of history and the art inside.

Several errors: 'Violet interners' contains spelling errors and wrong noun form; correct to 'violet interiors'. Remove the stray 'and in'. Also punctuation: add comma before conjunction 'and' joining independent clauses. 'The centuries of history' is acceptable, though one could say 'centuries of history' without 'the'.