Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорите чётко и прямо, избегайте шумных междометий и незаконченных фраз. Дайте короткое главное предложение, затем при необходимости добавьте одно-два уточняющих предложения с логическими связками. Например: назовите тип зданий поблизости и расстояние до города, укажите причину отсутствия высотных зданий.

例: I live well outside the city, so there are no tall buildings near my home. The area is mostly low-rise houses and farms, about 20 kilometers from the city center, which is why you rarely see skyscrapers there.

提案: Отвечайте прямо на вопрос, используйте естественные выражения и избегайте разговорных оборотов, которые могут звучать неуверенно. Дайте тему в первом предложении, затем поддержите её конкретным примером и связывающим словом (for example, because, when).

例: I don't usually take photos of buildings, but I sometimes photograph interesting cafés or restaurants. For example, when I find a place with unique decoration or lighting, I take a quick picture to remember it.

提案: Дайте ясное основное предложение и добавьте конкретные причины и детали, используя связки (because, for instance, also). Избегайте повторов («well known, famous, popular» — достаточно одного слова) и уберите запинки.

例: I would like to visit the Ritz-Carlton hotel because it is a famous luxury landmark in my city. It has more than 20 floors and is known for its elegant interior and panoramic views from the top floors, which I would love to see.

× Uh, I live far from the city, umm, and there are no estate homes and skyscrapers because, uh, we. What way?

✓ I live far from the city, so there are no apartment complexes or skyscrapers near us.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains filler words and an unfinished clause ('we. What way?'). This is a sentence structure error: ideas are not connected and the clause is incomplete. Combine related ideas with a coordinating conjunction (so) and replace vague terms ('estate homes') with more natural vocabulary ('apartment complexes'). Remove fillers ('uh', 'umm') and finish the thought for clarity.

× Will I really go in for taking a photo, especially taking a photo of buildings?

✓ Do I really go in for taking photos, especially of buildings?

The original uses 'Will I' which incorrectly places the action in the future; the speaker is asking about their general habit, so present tense is appropriate. Change 'Will I' to 'Do I' to form a question about habitual preference. Also pluralize 'photo' to 'photos' for naturalness. Alternatively, use 'Do I really like taking photos' for clearer wording.

× When I see fascinating appearance of coffee or restaurants I do it usually.

✓ When I see a fascinating appearance of a cafe or restaurant, I usually take a photo.

The phrase lacks necessary articles and has awkward word order. Insert 'a' before 'fascinating appearance' and 'a' before 'cafe or restaurant'. Reorder adverb 'usually' to its typical position before the main verb: 'I usually take a photo.' Also replace 'coffee' with 'cafe' to refer to the place rather than the drink.

× I'd like to visit Ritz Carlton Hotel because this is the most well known, famous and popular building.

✓ I'd like to visit the Ritz-Carlton Hotel because it is the most well-known and popular building.

Proper nouns for hotels usually take the definite article 'the' and the hotel name is hyphenated 'Ritz-Carlton'. Using both 'well known' and 'famous and popular' is redundant; combine into 'well-known and popular.' Replace 'this is' with 'it is' for natural reference to the hotel.

× Uh, it consists of uh, over 20 floors.

✓ It has over 20 floors.

Using 'consists of' is awkward with floors; 'has' is the natural present-tense verb for possession. Remove fillers 'uh'. Ensure present simple tense for a general fact: 'It has over 20 floors.'