Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Pronunciation and word choice errors reduce clarity (e.g. “wheelies” instead of “buildings”). Sentence structure is repetitive and sometimes awkward. Keep answers concise: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Use correct vocabulary (tall buildings, high-rise, low-rise) and check grammar (plural/singular, articles).

例: No, there aren’t many tall buildings near my home. I live in a high-rise apartment, but most buildings in the neighborhood are low-rise, so our building is the tallest in the immediate area.

提案: The idea is clear but grammar and cohesion need work. Use one clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons with linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid run-on sentences and check verb forms and pronouns. Be concise and give a concrete example of a building or situation.

例: Yes, I often photograph buildings when I travel because I like preserving memories. For example, I usually visit the city’s landmark first and take pictures at sunset, since its lights and architecture look especially beautiful then.

提案: The response is relevant but has grammar and word order issues. Start with a clear direct answer, then give 1–2 specific reasons using linking words (because, so, therefore). Correct verb tenses and prepositions (seen -> seen/seen it, visit inside -> go inside/visit).

例: Yes. I would like to visit the Oriental Pearl Tower because I have seen it many times from the street but never been inside. I hope to go there someday to enjoy the panoramic views and take photographs from the observation deck.

× No, there are not any tall wheelies near my home.

✓ No, there are not any tall buildings near my home.

The word 'wheelies' is incorrect in this context; 'buildings' is the intended noun. Also ensure plural 'buildings' matches 'any' and the plural sense. Suggestion: use appropriate vocabulary and check plural forms.

× Actually I live in a high rise apartment, but most building in the neighborhood are low rise, so on the range our building is a tallest building in the near distance.

✓ Actually I live in a high-rise apartment, but most buildings in the neighborhood are low-rise, so in the area our building is the tallest building nearby.

Multiple errors: 'high rise' and 'low rise' should be hyphenated when used as adjectives ('high-rise', 'low-rise'). 'Most building' should be plural 'most buildings' (singular/plural). 'On the range' is incorrect preposition/phrase; use 'in the area'. 'a tallest' is incorrect article use and comparison; use the definite article 'the tallest'. 'in the near distance' is unnatural; 'nearby' is correct. Suggestion: pluralize nouns correctly, use hyphenated compound adjectives, choose correct articles ('the' for superlatives), and use natural prepositional phrases.

× Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel to somewhere I usually visited the city's landmark building first and a photograph them to preserve memories and it's a building always brightens the light in the evening and it's so valuable to.

✓ Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel. I usually visit the city's landmark buildings first and photograph them to preserve memories, and the buildings always light up in the evening and are very beautiful.

This sentence mixes tenses and has several grammar problems. 'travel to somewhere I usually visited' mixes present and past; use simple present 'travel' and 'visit'. 'a photograph them' is wrong form; use verb 'photograph' and plural 'them'. 'it's a building always brightens the light' has wrong subject-verb structure and article; use 'the buildings always light up' or 'the building always lights up' and 'are very beautiful' instead of 'so valuable to'. Suggestions: keep consistent tense (present for habitual actions), use correct verb forms, ensure subject-verb agreement, and choose appropriate adjectives.

× Yes, Oriental Pearl Tower I would like to visit.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the Oriental Pearl Tower.

Word order is incorrect. In English, the subject and verb should come before the object or name: 'I would like to visit the Oriental Pearl Tower.' Also include the definite article 'the' for a specific landmark. Suggestion: use natural English word order (subject + verb + object) and include articles for named landmarks when required.

× I have been seen it on the street so many times, but I had no chance to visit inside.

✓ I have seen it on the street so many times, but I have had no chance to go inside.

'Have been seen' is incorrect: passive present perfect is not appropriate; the correct active present perfect is 'I have seen'. 'Had no chance to visit inside' mixes past and infinitive; use 'have had no chance to go inside' or 'haven't had a chance to visit inside' for present relevance. Suggestion: use 'have seen' for experiences and 'go inside' or 'visit it inside' with correct perfect aspect.

× So I look forward to visit it if I have time and chance.

✓ So I look forward to visiting it if I have the time and the chance.

After 'look forward to' the verb should be in the -ing form ('visiting'), not the base form. Also include articles 'the' before 'time' and 'chance' in this context. Suggestion: use gerund after 'look forward to' and include definite articles when referring to specific opportunities.