Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally relevant but could be clearer and more natural. Start with a direct topic sentence, avoid awkward phrasing like "a very few" and "prominent individuals in the communities," and give one brief specific detail (e.g. number or type). Use a linking phrase if adding information.

例: Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home. For example, there are three apartment blocks and a couple of office towers, though only one skyscraper. These buildings mostly serve residential and commercial purposes, so the area is quite busy during weekdays.

提案: The answer is understandable but unclear and grammatically incorrect. Give a clear topic sentence (Yes/No), then explain briefly with specific reasons and avoid vague phrases like "there are something I usually see regularly". Use linking words like "because" or "however" and finish your thought—don't leave sentences incomplete.

例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I see them every day and they don't feel special. However, I sometimes photograph buildings when I travel or when a structure has unusual architecture, since those images make good memories.

提案: The response is positive but lacks a clear topic sentence and specific details. State directly which building (or type), then give two concise supporting details about its features and why you want to visit. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to connect ideas.

例: Yes. When I traveled a few months ago I noticed a modern cultural centre with striking glass façades and curved steel beams. I would like to visit it to see the interior galleries and learn about the architect’s use of light and space.

× Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home, but a very few skyscrapers, and these are owned by prominent individuals in the communities.

✓ Yes, there are several tall buildings near my home, but very few skyscrapers, and these are owned by prominent individuals in the community.

The phrase 'a very few skyscrapers' is incorrect because 'few' with a quantifier does not need 'a'. Also 'communities' should be singular 'community' to refer to the local area mentioned; using plural gives an unclear reference. Use 'very few skyscrapers' and 'the community' for clarity. Suggestion: Remove the extra 'a' before 'very few' and use 'community' when referring to the local area.

× No, I haven't considered taking photos of any of the buildings because I feel that there are something I usually see regularly, so there's actually no point taking pictures of them.

✓ No, I haven't considered taking photos of any of the buildings because I feel that they are things I usually see regularly, so there's actually no point in taking pictures of them.

The phrase 'there are something' is ungrammatical: 'something' is singular and cannot follow 'there are'. Replace with 'they are things' to refer to the buildings, or use 'there is something' if referring to one item. Also 'no point taking pictures' requires the preposition 'in' before the gerund in this context: 'no point in taking'. Suggestion: Use 'they are things' or 'there is nothing' and include 'in' before 'taking pictures' for correct structure.

× But sometimes I look forward to taking pictures of them with.

✓ But sometimes I look forward to taking pictures of them.

The sentence ends with the preposition 'with' without an object, which is incorrect and unnecessary. Remove the trailing 'with' to complete the sentence properly. Suggestion: Omit the stray preposition or add the object if you intended one (e.g., 'with my camera').

× Yes, yes, one building that caught my attention when I traveled a few months ago.

✓ Yes, there is one building that caught my attention when I traveled a few months ago.

This fragment lacks a main verb and subject structure: 'one building that caught my attention...' needs a verb phrase like 'there is' or 'I saw'. Adding 'there is' creates a complete sentence that fits the question about a building to visit. Suggestion: Use 'There is one building...' or 'One building caught my attention...' to form a full sentence.

× This building had a significant architectural design. I was looking forward to seeing more of the features.

✓ This building had a significant architectural design. I looked forward to seeing more of its features.

'I was looking forward to seeing' suggests an ongoing desire in the past but is less direct than 'I looked forward to seeing' for a completed trip; both can be correct depending on nuance. More importantly, 'more of the features' is vague; 'more of its features' clearly links features to the building. Use simple past 'looked forward to' to match the completed action context. Suggestion: Use 'I looked forward to seeing more of its features' for clarity and proper past-tense narration.