Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子需要更自然連貫，避免句子過短或語法錯誤（例如用 because 開頭的片語）。提供更具體細節並使用連接詞讓回答更順暢。注意拼寫和語法（如 "ever" 應為 "even"）。最多控制在五句內。

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a large city. For example, there are high-rise apartment blocks, several office towers and even a shopping mall in one of the taller buildings. These structures make the neighbourhood feel busy and modern, especially at night when the offices are lit up.

提案: 回答已比較自然且內容完整，但可用更豐富詞彙和具體例子來提升表達（例如說明最喜歡拍的建築類型或拍攝目的）。可添加一個連接詞或原因句使結構更清晰。

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings, especially when I travel to a new city. I enjoy photographing both historic landmarks and contemporary skyscrapers because their shapes and details tell different stories. For instance, I like capturing ornate facades of old churches as well as sleek glass towers, and I sometimes post the best shots on social media to share my travels.

提案: 回答表達意圖清楚，但存在語法和邏輯錯誤（最後一句不通順）。應修正錯誤並補充具體原因或期望（如想做的活動或參觀時間）。控制句數並使用連接詞使語意連貫。

例: Yes, I would love to visit the Eiffel Tower in Paris because it is an iconic landmark and I imagine the view from the top would be spectacular. Many films show it as a romantic spot, so I would like to go there with someone special and enjoy the city skyline at sunset.

× Because I live in a big city.

✓ I live in a big city.

句子以“Because”开头但未与主句连接，造成不完整的从句。应把从句改为完整句或与前句合并。例如将其改为“I live in a big city.”或与前句合并为“There are many tall buildings near my home because I live in a big city.”这样句子才完整且语义连贯。

× There are lots of high rise apartments and some office buildings and ever a shopping mall in a tall building nearby.

✓ There are lots of high-rise apartments, some office buildings, and even a shopping mall in a tall building nearby.

“high rise”应连字符为“high-rise”作形容词；列举多项时需要逗号分隔以提高可读性；“ever”用错，正确词为“even”。此外保持并列结构一致性。建议多注意复合形容词的连字符和常用词汇拼写。

× It made the area feel busy and modern.

✓ It makes the area feel busy and modern.

上下文描述的是现在情况（附近有高楼，使该地区感觉繁忙现代），因此应使用一般现在时“makes”而不是一般过去时“made”。建议根据时间背景选择正确时态，描述当前事实用现在时。

× Yes, I do take photo of buildings, especially when I travel to a new place.

✓ Yes, I do take photos of buildings, especially when I travel to a new place.

“photo”需用复数“photos”或在前面加不定冠词“a photo”。这里说的是通常会拍多张照片，故用复数。注意名词与量词的一致性。

× I have been a in movies and already want to go there.

✓ I have seen it in movies and already want to go there.

原句“I have been a in movies”结构混乱，可能想表达“我在电影中见过它”或“它在电影里出现过”。用“I have seen it in movies”可以正确表达“我在电影里见过它”。此外“already want to go there”语义可接受，但可更自然地说“I already want to go there”。建议写句前先理清想表达的主体和动作，保证主语、谓语和宾语齐全。