Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 注意语法和单词形式错误，回答要更直接并使用连接词使句子更流畅。可把主题句放在开头（例如有/没有高楼），然后用一两句具体细节支持。避免拼写和单复数错误（floors, buy）。尽量不超过5句。可练习使用更准确的词汇来描述便利性和频率。

例: Yes, there are some tall buildings near my home, including a large supermarket. It has five floors, so I can buy groceries, clothes and household items there easily. Because it is close by, I shop there a few times a week, which makes daily life much more convenient.

提案: 注意时态一致和表达清晰。回答要先给出直接的肯定或否定句，然后用一两句具体例子说明原因。避免口头语（uh）和模糊短语（amid sound well known）。使用正确的词汇和语法（when I travel, famous buildings, I always take photos）。

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I travel. For example, when I visit famous landmarks, I take pictures to record the memories and to remember the details later when I look back at the photos.

提案: 回答要更准确地使用词汇和句子结构。开头直接表明愿望，接着给出具体原因并用连接词衔接。避免把长城称为“building”（用site, landmark或structure更合适）；注意语法（which takes you back to ancient China → takes you back in time）并减少填充词。

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Great Wall. It is one of China's most famous landmarks and walking along it would give me a strong sense of history, as if stepping back in time to ancient China.

× Yes, there is a big supermarket near my home.

✓ Yes, there is a big supermarket near my home.

原句没有语法错误。句型“There is”用于说明某处存在某物，这是正确的用法。

× It has five floor and it makes my life more convenient.

✓ It has five floors and it makes my life more convenient.

“floor”在表示层数时应使用复数形式“floors”。建议：名词表示数量时注意单复数一致，五个层数应写成“five floors”。

× I always buys clothes, fruit and so on there.

✓ I always buy clothes, fruit and so on there.

主语“I”与动词必须一致，现时第三人称单数才在动词后加-s，而“I”不是第三人称单数，因此动词应为“buy”。建议：复习主语与动词的一致性，遇到“I/you/we/they”用动词原形，遇到“he/she/it”加-s。

× For example, when I go travelling and amid sound well known buildings, I always took photos of this because it can help me to record the memory when I uh, look back the photos.

✓ For example, when I go travelling and am surrounded by well-known buildings, I always take photos of them because they help me record memories when I look back at the photos.

此句存在多处时态和用法错误： 1) “amid sound well known buildings”用法不当，正确表达为“am surrounded by well-known buildings”（被……环绕）。 2) 主句使用一般现在时，应与描述习惯性动作“I always take”一致，因此把“took”改为现在时“take”。 3) 指代不当，“this”应改为复数“them”指建筑物或“the buildings”。 4) “it can help me to record the memory”中有代词和可数名词问题，改为“they help me record memories”。 5) “look back the photos”需加介词“at”： “look back at the photos”。 建议：描述习惯动作用一般现在时，注意被动表达和正确的代词与介词搭配。

× Yes, of course I would like to visit the Great Wall.

✓ Yes, of course I would like to visit the Great Wall.

该句语法正确。“would like to”用于表示愿望或想做某事，符合语境。

× Uh, it's one of the most well known buildings in China and uh, which can take back to the ancient China.

✓ Uh, it's one of the most well-known monuments in China and it can take you back to ancient China.

原句问题： 1) “well known”作为复合形容词应加连字符“well-known”。 2) “buildings”与“Great Wall”更贴切的词是“monuments（名胜）”，但若保留“buildings”也可。建议根据语义选择更合适的名词。 3) 从句“which can take back to the ancient China”结构错误，缺少动作承受者，应为“it can take you back to ancient China”（它能把你带回到古代中国的感觉）。 4) “the ancient China”中不需定冠词，应为“ancient China”。 建议：注意连字符、代词位置和定冠词使用，以及选择更贴切的词汇。