Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, correct small grammar errors, and give one specific example. Use linking words to connect place and examples. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes. I live in Wushi City, Jiangsu Province, and the city center, Liangxi District, has many tall buildings. For example, there are several modern office towers and a large multi‑storey shopping mall nearby.

提案: Start with a clear direct answer (e.g., “No, I don’t usually”). Correct tense and word choice, avoid redundancy, and give a brief reason plus one specific occasion when you would take photos. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like “because” and “however.”

例: No, I don’t usually take photos of the buildings because I see them every day. However, I sometimes take pictures with my friends when we visit a tall building for fun or special events.

提案: Give a direct answer naming the building, correct the place name and grammar, and add one specific reason why you want to visit or why you haven’t. Use linking words like “because” or “so” and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the Potala Palace in Lhasa, Tibet, which in Chinese is called 布达拉宫. I haven’t visited yet because it is at high altitude and I’m worried about altitude sickness.

× Yes, my family live in the Wushi City in Jiangsu Province, and the Liangsi District is the city center of the UC City.

✓ Yes, my family lives in Wushi City in Jiangsu Province, and Liangsi District is the city center of UC City.

'Family' is a collective noun treated as singular in this context, so the verb should be 'lives' not 'live'. Also remove extra definite articles 'the' before proper place names and unnecessary commas for natural English. Suggestion: treat collective nouns with singular verbs and use proper nouns without 'the' unless required.

× There are many tall buildings in Liangxi District, such as the shopping mall or the office building.

✓ There are many tall buildings in Liangxi District, such as shopping malls and office buildings.

Use plural nouns after 'such as' when giving examples of a general category. 'Such as the shopping mall or the office building' sounds like specific items; use plural forms and 'and' to list examples. Also ensure consistent district name (Liangxi vs Liangsi) — keep same name throughout.

× I seldom take photos with these buildings because I live here.

✓ I seldom take photos of these buildings because I live here.

Use the correct preposition 'of' with 'take photos' to indicate the subject of the photograph. 'With' implies accompanied by the buildings, which is unnatural here. Keep present simple for habitual actions.

× But sometimes my friends and I went to the high buildings play together.

✓ But sometimes my friends and I go to the tall buildings to play together.

The student shifts incorrectly to past tense 'went' while describing habitual or habitual/past repeated actions implied by 'sometimes'; present simple 'go' fits better with 'sometimes'. Also use 'tall' (adjective) and add infinitive 'to play' for purpose. Suggestion: maintain consistent tense and correct verb forms and word order.

× I might take photos with them.

✓ I might take photos of them.

'Take photos of' is the correct collocation. 'Might' is acceptable to express possibility. Change the preposition 'with' to 'of' to correctly indicate photographing the buildings.

× Oh, you maybe know the building, its name is Potala Palace and in Chinese it's called Budalagong.

✓ Oh, you may know the building; its name is Potala Palace, and in Chinese it's called Budalagong.

Use 'may' rather than 'maybe' when placed before a verb to express possibility. 'Maybe' is an adverb meaning 'perhaps' and does not fit directly after 'you'. Also replace comma splice with proper punctuation and separate clauses with a semicolon or period. Maintain correct pronoun 'its' and punctuation for clarity.

× It is in Shizun, China but the altitude is high there so I haven't go to watch it.

✓ It is in Shizun, China, but the altitude is high there, so I haven't gone to see it.

Use present perfect 'haven't gone' for negative experience up to now. 'Go to watch' is unnatural; use 'go to see' or 'visited'. Also add commas for clause separation. 'Gone' is the past participle required after 'have'. Suggestion: use present perfect for experiences and correct past participle forms.