Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan soruya yanıt veriyor ancak anlatım karışık ve gereksiz ayrıntılar var. Daha doğal ve akıcı olmak için yer isimlerini daha net verin, cümleleri kısaltın ve bir bağlaç kullanarak ek bilgi sağlayın. Örneğin önce kısa bir konu cümlesi kurun (Yes/No + kısa açıklama), sonra 'and' veya 'also' gibi bağlayıcılarla alışveriş merkezlerinden bahsedin. Ayrıca dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin (ör. 'in there' yerine 'there' ya da 'in my town').

例: Yes. I live in a town in Turkey that has many tall buildings and several shopping malls. Also, these malls are convenient because you can buy almost anything there.

提案: Cevap olumsuz ama ifadeler mantıksal olarak hatalı veya yanlış kelime kullanımı içeriyor (ör. 'I do not have the architecture' anlamlı değil). Duygularınızı ve nedenlerinizi daha açık ve doğal cümlelerle ifade edin. Kısa bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın (No, I don't), sonra sebebinizi bağlaçla ekleyin ve daha uygun kelimeler kullanın (e.g. 'appreciate', 'interest in architecture'). Ayrıca kişisel tercihinizi nazikçe ifade edin.

例: No, I don't usually photograph buildings because I'm not very interested in architecture or aesthetics. I prefer taking photos of people and nature instead.

提案: Cevap doğrudan tek bir binadan ziyade genel alışveriş merkezlerinden söz ediyor; soruyu daha spesifik olarak tek bir binayı belirtip nedenini açıklamanız daha iyi olur. Ayrıca cümle yapıları düzeltilmeli ('I like visiting', 'watching films' vb.). Bağlaçlarla mantıklı akış sağlayın ve örnek aktivite olarak birkaç net etkinlik verin.

例: I don't have a particular famous building in mind, but I enjoy visiting the large shopping mall in my town because I can go to the cinema, meet friends and find lots of shops and restaurants there.

× Yes, I live in Turkey, Kojeli and the town named Muklukhand. We have also a lot of buildings in there and also shopping malls.

✓ Yes, I live in Turkey, in Kojeli and in a town named Muklukhand. We also have a lot of buildings and shopping malls there.

The sentence uses incorrect or missing prepositions and awkward word order. Use 'in' before place names (in Kojeli, in a town), place 'there' at the end to refer back to the location, and move 'also' to a natural position: 'We also have'. Suggestion: practice placing prepositions before locations and natural adverb placement.

× There you can purchase everything you want.

✓ There you can buy everything you want.

'Purchase' is correct but sounds formal; not a grammatical error per the list but prefer simpler verb 'buy'. No present participle issue required; nevertheless keep present simple modal structure 'can buy'. Suggestion: use 'buy' for natural spoken English.

× Especially not because I do not have the architecture, culture and aesthetics.

✓ Not really, because I am not interested in architecture, culture, or aesthetics.

The original misuses 'have' with abstract interests and lacks clarity. Use 'be interested in' to talk about personal interests and separate items with commas and 'or'. Suggestion: use 'not really' for negative replies and 'interested in' for preferences.

× So I hate the tall buildings.

✓ So I dislike tall buildings.

'Hate' is grammatically fine but colloquial intensity may not match context. Change to 'dislike' for softer expression. This is a stylistic sentence structure improvement.

× I think that's the main reason that why I'm not taking the photos.

✓ I think that's the main reason why I don't take photos of them.

The phrase 'that why' is incorrect (redundant). Use 'reason why' or 'reason that'. Use simple present 'don't take' to express habitual action. Suggestion: avoid combining 'that' and 'why' together.

× As I told you before, there's a lot of shopping malls that you can visit or purchase everything you want.

✓ As I told you before, there are a lot of shopping malls where you can buy everything you want.

Use 'there are' for plural 'a lot of shopping malls' (singular 'there's' is incorrect). Also use 'where' to indicate place and 'buy' instead of 'purchase' for natural speech. Suggestion: match 'there is/there are' to singular/plural nouns.

× So I like the visiting shopping malls with more friends and doing activities out there, for instance, watching cinema or able to join some group chats.

✓ So I like visiting shopping malls with more friends and doing activities there, for instance watching films or joining group activities.

Remove the definite article before 'visiting' ('the visiting' is incorrect). Use 'visiting shopping malls' (verb + object), 'there' instead of 'out there', 'watching films' (natural collocation) and 'joining group activities' instead of 'able to join some group chats'. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary articles before gerunds and use natural collocations like 'watching films' and 'joining groups'.