Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接并注意语法、句子完整性和连贯性。首先用一句话直接回答并描述情况，然后用一两句具体原因或感受补充，避免不完整的句子和含糊表达。注意主谓一致（buildings），时态和词汇搭配（feel stressed 而非 feel quite stressful），并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, there are many tall modern buildings near the city center. However, I often feel a bit stressed when I look at them because their design seems chaotic and overcrowded. For example, the narrow streets and dense high-rises make the area feel noisy and cramped.

提案: 回答应保持时态一致并补全未完成句子。先用一句话概括是否拍照，然后用具体例子说明拍摄对象、频率或用途，并用连接词衔接。避免口语残句（They all.）并改正时态错误（when I come across）。

例: Yes, I often take photos of buildings when I come across interesting ones, such as historic temples or striking modern skyscrapers. I usually share these photos with my friends and parents because they enjoy seeing the places I visit.

提案: 回答需更清晰并纠正词汇与语法错误。先明确想去的建筑是什么并说明原因，避免重复词（old history historical）和错误词（starving picture）。使用具体细节说明吸引你的地方（建筑风格、年代、特色），并用合适的连接词表达计划。

例: Yes, I'd like to visit an ancient historical temple in Shanxi that I saw in a photograph. The temple's intricate carvings and traditional architecture really appealed to me, so I plan to visit it with my friends to learn about its history and take some photos.

提案: 回答应更简洁并修正语法与词汇搭配。先直接回答喜欢或不喜欢，然后用一两句具体原因补充，说明什么样的居住条件更适合你（spacious flat, quiet room, fresh air）。注意动词形式和名词搭配（spacious flat/a room to relax, feel refreshed, relieve stress）。

例: Not really. I prefer to live in a spacious flat with a quiet room where I can relax and feel refreshed. Having more space and fresh air helps me relieve the stress accumulated from a busy life.

× Yes, definitely. There are lots of tall modern building near the city center.

✓ Yes, definitely. There are lots of tall modern buildings near the city center.

存在可数名词的单复数错误。“building”在此处表示多个建筑物，应使用复数形式“buildings”。建议记住：可数名词指多个时需要加-s或使用复数形式。

× To be honest, I will feel quite stressful when I look at them since they have a lot of flaws and.

✓ To be honest, I feel quite stressed when I look at them since they have a lot of flaws.

原句用“will feel”与描述一般事实或习惯的语境不符，应使用一般现在时“feel”。另外，形容词和名词使用错误：应使用形容词“stressed”而非名词“stressful”，且句尾不应有多余的“and”。建议在表达情感时用形容词（I feel tired / I feel stressed）。

× Definitely, I take photos when I came across some special or historical building like temple or very tall modern building that catches my eyes.

✓ Definitely, I take photos when I come across some special or historical building, like a temple or a very tall modern building that catches my eye.

句子中时态混用：主句用一般现在时“I take”，从句不应使用过去式“came across”，应改为一般现在时“come across”。此外，单数可数名词需要冠词：a temple；“catches my eyes”用法不自然，常说“catches my eye”。建议保持时态一致并注意冠词及固定短语用法。

× I often show photos with my friends and parents. They all.

✓ I often show the photos to my friends and parents. They all like them.

原句介词使用不当，应该用“show something to somebody”而不是“show something with somebody”。另外“They all.”为不完整句子，需补全谓语，例如“They all like them.”。建议写完整句子并使用正确的动词搭配。

× I saw a starving picture of a old history historical temple in Shanxi which is is charming to me and strong to visit.

✓ I saw a striking picture of an old historical temple in Shanxi which is charming to me and makes me want to visit.

原句存在词汇误用和冗余："starving"（饥饿的）用错，应为"striking"或"stunning"（引人注目的）。“a old history historical”重复且顺序错误，应为“an old historical”或“an old historical temple”并注意冠词“an”。“is is”有重复。短语“strong to visit”不自然，改为“makes me want to visit”。建议选择语义合适的形容词，避免重复描述，并保持语序与冠词正确。

× So I want to visit with my friends.

✓ So I want to visit it with my friends.

动词“visit”通常需要宾语，此处缺少被访问的对象，应加上代词“it”指代前文的寺庙。注意代词使用以连接上下文。

× Not really, I prefer to live in a spacious and have a room to relax and fresh so it can relieve the stress which accumulated from busy life.

✓ Not really. I prefer to live in a spacious place and have a room to relax and refresh, so it can relieve the stress accumulated from a busy life.

原句缺少必要的名词搭配："spacious"为形容词，需搭配名词如"place"或"apartment"。"refresh"需要用动词原形作目的或形容词可改为"refreshing"，这里用动词不定式"to relax and refresh"更自然。定语从句“which accumulated from busy life”结构不当，改为“accumulated from a busy life”。建议补全名词，调整动词形式，并在“busy life”前加不定冠词。