Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 答えを簡潔にし、話の流れを自然にする必要があります。冒頭の呼びかけ（"dear"）は不自然なので使わないでください。主題文で直接答え（Yes, there are tall buildings near my home.）を述べ、その後で場所や特徴（central Tokyo、shopping mall、observation decks）を具体的に短く説明しましょう。接続語（for example, also, and）を使って文をつなげ、冗長な語を省いてください。発音と語順（"my house is very close to central Tokyo"）にも注意してください。

例: Yes, there are many tall buildings near my home. For example, in central Tokyo there are mixed-use complexes with shopping malls and observation decks, and I sometimes visit them on weekends.

提案: 流暢さと語法の正確さを改善しましょう。単数・複数（photo → photos）、不定冠詞や定冠詞（the some → some/the）に注意してください。回答は直接で自然に（"Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of buildings."）始め、理由や頻度を具体的に述べてください。語彙を少し広げ（"architecture, facades, skylines"）語の繰り返しを避けると良いです。

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of buildings because I like their architecture and details. For example, when I visit the shopping area called Bravo, I often take several photos of the city skyline and interesting facades.

提案: 答えは明確で良いですが、文法と語順を改善し、詳細をより具体的に述べてください（Why Gothic appeals, which parts to see）。場所の表現（"Saint Paul's Cathedral and the Vatican City"）や時制（"I saw a photograph"）を正しく使い、接続語（because, for example）で説明をつなげてください。

例: Yes, I would like to visit St Paul's Cathedral and the Vatican City in the future. I saw photos on social media and I was impressed by the Gothic atmosphere and the cathedral's intricate architecture, so I especially want to see the interior and the artwork in person.

提案: 意味が曖昧で文法的に不正確な部分が多いです。まず直接に答え（Yes or No）を述べ、その後に理由を具体的に説明しましょう。数字や表現（"12 big things"）は意味不明なので避け、"on a high floor"や"top of the building"のような自然な表現を使ってください。接続詞（because, so）で理由と結果を明確に結びつけ、発音と文の構造を整えてください。

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because apartments on high floors offer great views. For example, living near the top would let me see the city skyline every morning, which would make me feel relaxed and happy.

× Yes, dear, my house is very close to the central Tokyo and they are very tall, complex buildings and they have this shopping mall and the observation decks. I sometimes go there.

✓ Yes, my house is very close to central Tokyo, and there are very tall, complex buildings with a shopping mall and observation decks. I sometimes go there.

The preposition 'to' is incorrect with 'close' in this context; use 'close to' with a place but not 'the central Tokyo' — use 'central Tokyo' without 'the'. 'They' incorrectly refers to 'my house' and causes agreement problems; use 'there are' to introduce the buildings. Use 'with' to show the buildings include a shopping mall and observation decks. Remove the term of endearment 'dear' which is unnatural in this context. Improve sentence flow by splitting into two clauses.

× Yes, I like taking photo of the buildings. Uh, when I go to the Bravo, I usually take a photo of the some buildings in the city.

✓ Yes, I like taking photos of buildings. When I go to the Bravo, I usually take photos of some buildings in the city.

'Photo' should be plural 'photos' when speaking generally. Use the plural form 'photos of buildings' for general liking. The phrase 'a photo of the some buildings' mixes singular article 'a' and determiner 'some' incorrectly; use 'photos of some buildings' or 'a photo of a building'. Remove filler 'Uh' for clarity.

× Yes, in the future I want to go to the Saint Paul's Cathedral and Vatican City. I saw the photograph on social media and the atmosphere is very nice and the building was very Gothic.

✓ In the future, I want to go to St Paul's Cathedral and Vatican City. I saw photographs on social media; the atmosphere looks very nice and the building is very Gothic.

Maintain consistent tense: 'in the future I want' is present, so describe the photos' appearance in present tense: 'looks' or 'is'. Use plural 'photographs' or 'a photograph'. 'Saint Paul's' is commonly written 'St Paul's'. 'Was very Gothic' implies past; better 'is very Gothic' when describing characteristic of a building. Also split into clearer clauses with a semicolon or period.

× As I want to live in the 12 big things because the top of the building we saw very nice views and that makes me feel nice.

✓ I want to live in a tall 12th-floor apartment because from the top of the building you can see very nice views, and that makes me feel happy.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'As I want to live in the 12 big things' is incomprehensible; likely intended '12th floor' or 'a building with 12 floors'. Rephrase to specify 'a tall 12th-floor apartment' or 'a building with 12 floors'. Use 'from the top of the building you can see' to express ability and correct word order. Replace vague 'feel nice' with natural 'feel happy'. Ensure articles and ordinal number use are correct.