Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, correct articles and word order, avoid redundancy, and add one specific detail. Keep it under five sentences and use a linking word if adding detail.

例: Yes — there are several tall buildings near my home because I live in the centre of Ha City. For example, a cluster of office towers and high-rise apartments stand along the main boulevard, which makes the skyline look very dense.

提案: Make the response more concise and natural by combining ideas into one or two sentences, remove filler words (uh), and give one specific example of a favourite subject or place you photograph. Use a linking phrase to contrast.

例: Not really — I prefer photographing natural scenery instead. For instance, I often take pictures of the nearby beach at sunrise because the light and reflections there are especially beautiful.

提案: Make your timing and reason clearer and fix grammar (use correct tense and articles). Use one clear sentence with a supporting detail explaining why you want to visit and when. Avoid repeating phrases.

例: Yes — I would like to visit the City Museum next month because it has an extensive collection of local history and art. I'm especially interested in the exhibition about the city's past, which I heard is very informative.

提案: Answer directly with a clear opinion, correct tense and prepositions, and give one concrete reason or condition. Keep it to one or two sentences and avoid vague phrases like "a bit" or awkward constructions.

例: Yes, I would like to live in a tall building because I've been fascinated by high-rise living since childhood. For example, I enjoy the idea of having a balcony with a wide city view and easy access to city amenities.

× Definitely there are several tall buildings near me house because I live in a center of the HA city so that's why there are lots of building which is really tall and also enormous.

✓ Definitely there are several tall buildings near my house because I live in the center of HA City, so there are lots of buildings that are really tall and also enormous.

Errors: 'me house' should be 'my house' (pronoun possessive — maps to singular/plural/pronoun but corrected under singular/plural list as it affects noun form), 'a center of the HA city' is unnatural; 'the center of HA City' is correct article and noun use, 'lots of building' should be 'lots of buildings' (singular/plural mismatch), 'which is really tall' should be 'that are really tall' to agree in number with 'buildings'. Suggestion: use correct possessive pronouns, match nouns and verbs in number, use 'the center' for a specific place and pluralize countable nouns.

× Actually, I'm not a huge fan of taking photos of buildings.

✓ Actually, I'm not a huge fan of taking photos of buildings.

No grammatical error requiring change under the provided list. The gerund 'taking' is correctly used after 'fan of'. No correction necessary.

× Instead, I enjoy capturing some natural scenarios and also, uh, natural scenic views including beaches, mountains and also so many.

✓ Instead, I enjoy capturing natural scenes and scenic views, including beaches and mountains, among many others.

Errors: awkward conjunctions and redundancy ('and also' repeated) and 'so many' is vague. Replaced 'natural scenarios' with 'natural scenes' and removed filler 'uh'. Use 'including' followed by concise examples and 'among many others' to indicate more. Suggestion: avoid repetitive conjunctions, remove fillers, and use clear list structure.

× And I get, I would say I would like to explore the museum in next month because I will get a summer.

✓ I would like to explore the museum next month because I will be on summer break.

Errors: 'in next month' should be 'next month' (preposition error but corrected under future tense since timing expression with future), 'I will get a summer' is unnatural — use 'I will be on summer break' or 'it will be summer'. Also remove filler 'And I get, I would say'. Suggestion: use 'next month' without 'in' and express future plans with 'will' plus appropriate noun phrase for 'summer break'.

× It would be great fun if I can also because I was a bit fascinated about living in a tall building since my childhood.

✓ It would be great fun if I could, because I have been fascinated by living in a tall building since my childhood.

Errors: 'if I can' should be 'if I could' to match hypothetical mood introduced by 'It would be', 'was a bit fascinated about' should be 'have been fascinated by' to indicate a continuing state from childhood to present, and preposition 'about' with 'fascinated' is incorrect — use 'by'. Suggestion: match modal verbs to conditional mood ('would' with 'could'), use present perfect for ongoing states, and use correct prepositions with 'fascinated'.