Building— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the response more natural and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, use correct article and plural/singular forms, and add one brief specific detail. Keep it under five sentences.

例: Yes, there is a tall building near my home. It’s actually a shopping center with several floors of stores and a small cinema, so many people visit it on weekends.

提案: Clarify your reason and use correct grammar. Give a clear topic sentence and one supporting detail using a linking phrase like 'because' or 'since'. Avoid unclear phrases such as 'prefer to visitors'.

例: No, I don't usually take photos of buildings because I prefer taking pictures of people and natural scenery; buildings rarely interest me.

提案: Remove repetition, be specific about which museum or galleries, and explain why with a clear reason. Use linking words like 'because' or 'as' to connect the reason. Keep it concise.

例: Yes, I would like to visit the National Art Museum and several nearby art galleries because I enjoy historic architecture and seeing how artists depict local history.

提案: Organize the answer with one clear topic sentence and one or two coherent supporting details. Correct grammar and remove repetitions. Explain specifically what you prefer to see and why, using linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: No, I wouldn't like to live in a tall building because I prefer shorter buildings where windows look out onto wide views of the countryside; the quieter environment suits me better.

× Yes, there is a whole tall building nearby home.

✓ Yes, there is a tall building near my home.

Used 'there is' correctly but 'nearby home' is ungrammatical and 'a whole tall building' is awkward. Replace 'nearby home' with 'near my home' and remove 'whole' because it is unnecessary. Ensure article 'a' + singular noun 'building' is correct.

× It's a shopping center.

✓ It's a shopping center.

Sentence is already correct. Included here only to indicate no change needed for preposition use; 'shopping center' and 'it is' are correct.

× No, I don't like taking photos of buildings because I prefer to visitors building.

✓ No, I don't like taking photos of buildings because I prefer visiting buildings.

Original mixes 'prefer to' with an incorrect noun phrase 'visitors building.' Use 'prefer visiting buildings' or 'prefer to visit buildings.' The error fits present tense/verb form and incorrect word choice; corrected to maintain present simple preference.

× Yes, I'd like I'd like to visit the Art Museum and art galleries because I like visiting historic buildings.

✓ Yes, I'd like to visit the art museum and art galleries because I enjoy visiting historic buildings.

Sentence repeats 'I'd like' twice; remove duplicate. Capitalization of 'art museum' can be lowercased unless a proper name. 'Like visiting' is acceptable but 'enjoy visiting' is more natural. Maintains conditional/wish form 'I'd like' and present simple for general likes.

× It makes me more interested.

✓ It makes me more interested.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; however 'It makes me more interested' is slightly awkward—better alternatives include 'It interests me more' or 'It makes me more interested in history.' No pronoun error to correct.

× No, I don't want to live in the tall building.

✓ No, I don't want to live in a tall building.

Using 'the' implies a specific tall building previously identified; context asks generally about tall buildings, so use the indefinite article 'a'.

× I like living in a short building because I like the scene from the window of the shop building.

✓ I like living in a low-rise building because I like the view from the window of the shop building.

'Short building' is non-native; use 'low-rise building.' 'Scene' is incorrect collocation with window—use 'view.' This is adjective/noun choice and collocation improvement while keeping present simple.

× It's very wide and the because I like the the rural countryside scenery.

✓ It's very wide and I like the rural countryside scenery.

Original has extraneous 'the' and a fragment 'and the because.' Remove repeated words and the extra conjunction to form a complete sentence. 'Rural countryside scenery' is redundant; 'rural scenery' or 'countryside scenery' is preferable; kept both minimally to respect original meaning.